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宠物是人类的好朋友。学校的英语俱乐部正在举行主题为“Pet Week”的征文活动。假如你是刘涛，请你根据以下提示，用英语写一篇短文介绍你最喜欢的宠物。
要求：1. 词数80左右，短文开头已给出，不计入总词数。2. 文中应包括所给提示，可适当发挥，使文章连贯。
[思路点拨] 1. 文体：说明文。2. 时态：以一般现在时为主。3. 人称：以第三人称为主。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
Hello，guys. I'm Liu Tao from Class 1，Grade 7. I'd like to introduce my favourite pet.
宠物是人类的好朋友。学校的英语俱乐部正在举行主题为“Pet Week”的征文活动。假如你是刘涛，请你根据以下提示，用英语写一篇短文介绍你最喜欢的宠物。
要求：1. 词数80左右，短文开头已给出，不计入总词数。2. 文中应包括所给提示，可适当发挥，使文章连贯。
[思路点拨] 1. 文体：说明文。2. 时态：以一般现在时为主。3. 人称：以第三人称为主。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
Hello，guys. I'm Liu Tao from Class 1，Grade 7. I'd like to introduce my favourite pet.
One possible version:
Hello, guys. I'm Liu Tao from Class 1, Grade 7. I'd like to introduce my favourite pet. My favourite pet is a dog and his name is John. He is a three-year-old fox dog from Europe. He looks very beautiful with his golden hair. He likes sleeping so much that he even sleeps for five hours a day.
There are many interesting activities between us. For example, he can play wonderful tricks if I give him some orders. He likes to run and play when we are in the park.
My dog is both my friend and my family member. I will give him a happy and healthy life.
答案
One possible version:
Hello, guys. I'm Liu Tao from Class 1, Grade 7. I'd like to introduce my favourite pet. My favourite pet is a dog and his name is John. He is a three-year-old fox dog from Europe. He looks very beautiful with his golden hair. He likes sleeping so much that he even sleeps for five hours a day.
There are many interesting activities between us. For example, he can play wonderful tricks if I give him some orders. He likes to run and play when we are in the park.
My dog is both my friend and my family member. I will give him a happy and healthy life.
Hello, guys. I'm Liu Tao from Class 1, Grade 7. I'd like to introduce my favourite pet. My favourite pet is a dog and his name is John. He is a three-year-old fox dog from Europe. He looks very beautiful with his golden hair. He likes sleeping so much that he even sleeps for five hours a day.
There are many interesting activities between us. For example, he can play wonderful tricks if I give him some orders. He likes to run and play when we are in the park.
My dog is both my friend and my family member. I will give him a happy and healthy life.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题，首先明确核心要求：以刘涛的身份写一篇介绍自己最喜爱宠物的短文，参与"Pet Week"征文，词数80左右，开头已给出。解题思路可以分三步搭建内容框架：第一步，承接开头，先点明要介绍的宠物是什么，补充它的名字、年龄、品种、外貌这些基础信息，让读者快速了解宠物的基本情况；第二步，补充宠物的日常习性，以及你和它之间的互动趣事，让内容更鲜活；第三步，收尾表达你对这只宠物的感情，点明它对你的意义。全程注意使用一般现在时，介绍宠物相关内容用第三人称，保证逻辑连贯，适当加入细节让文章通顺自然，避免语法错误，控制总词数符合要求。
【解析】
1. 承接给定开头，首先点明自己最爱的宠物是一只名叫John的狗，补充它的基础属性：3岁的欧洲狐狸犬，有着金色的毛发，外形好看，完成宠物基础信息的介绍。
2. 接着补充宠物的日常习性：它非常爱睡觉，每天要睡5个小时，之后加入和自己的互动细节：我下达指令它就能表演精彩的小把戏，我们常一起去公园奔跑玩耍，让内容更有真实感。
3. 最后收尾升华，点明这只狗既是我的朋友也是我的家人，我会给它幸福健康的生活，完成全文。最后核查：全文以一般现在时为主，人称使用正确，所有要点都覆盖，词数符合80左右的要求，逻辑流畅。
【答案】
One possible version:
Hello, guys. I'm Liu Tao from Class 1, Grade 7. I'd like to introduce my favourite pet. My favourite pet is a dog and his name is John. He is a three-year-old fox dog from Europe. He looks very beautiful with his golden hair. He likes sleeping so much that he even sleeps for five hours a day.
There are many interesting activities between us. For example, he can play wonderful tricks if I give him some orders. He likes to run and play when we are in the park.
My dog is both my friend and my family member. I will give him a happy and healthy life.
【知识点】
英语说明文写作
一般现在时运用
宠物主题表达
【点评】
这篇范文完全符合题目各项要求，结构清晰分层合理：先介绍宠物基础信息，再讲述和宠物的相处趣事，最后抒发对宠物的情感，逻辑连贯自然。文中用到了so...that结果状语从句、if引导的条件状语从句等多样句式，用词准确生动，词数控制得当，所有提示要点都完整覆盖，是一篇很适合七年级学生参考的优秀习作。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道写作题，首先明确核心要求：以刘涛的身份写一篇介绍自己最喜爱宠物的短文，参与"Pet Week"征文，词数80左右，开头已给出。解题思路可以分三步搭建内容框架：第一步，承接开头，先点明要介绍的宠物是什么，补充它的名字、年龄、品种、外貌这些基础信息，让读者快速了解宠物的基本情况；第二步，补充宠物的日常习性，以及你和它之间的互动趣事，让内容更鲜活；第三步，收尾表达你对这只宠物的感情，点明它对你的意义。全程注意使用一般现在时，介绍宠物相关内容用第三人称，保证逻辑连贯，适当加入细节让文章通顺自然，避免语法错误，控制总词数符合要求。
【解析】
1. 承接给定开头，首先点明自己最爱的宠物是一只名叫John的狗，补充它的基础属性：3岁的欧洲狐狸犬，有着金色的毛发，外形好看，完成宠物基础信息的介绍。
2. 接着补充宠物的日常习性：它非常爱睡觉，每天要睡5个小时，之后加入和自己的互动细节：我下达指令它就能表演精彩的小把戏，我们常一起去公园奔跑玩耍，让内容更有真实感。
3. 最后收尾升华，点明这只狗既是我的朋友也是我的家人，我会给它幸福健康的生活，完成全文。最后核查：全文以一般现在时为主，人称使用正确，所有要点都覆盖，词数符合80左右的要求，逻辑流畅。
【答案】
One possible version:
Hello, guys. I'm Liu Tao from Class 1, Grade 7. I'd like to introduce my favourite pet. My favourite pet is a dog and his name is John. He is a three-year-old fox dog from Europe. He looks very beautiful with his golden hair. He likes sleeping so much that he even sleeps for five hours a day.
There are many interesting activities between us. For example, he can play wonderful tricks if I give him some orders. He likes to run and play when we are in the park.
My dog is both my friend and my family member. I will give him a happy and healthy life.
【知识点】
英语说明文写作
一般现在时运用
宠物主题表达
【点评】
这篇范文完全符合题目各项要求，结构清晰分层合理：先介绍宠物基础信息，再讲述和宠物的相处趣事，最后抒发对宠物的情感，逻辑连贯自然。文中用到了so...that结果状语从句、if引导的条件状语从句等多样句式，用词准确生动，词数控制得当，所有提示要点都完整覆盖，是一篇很适合七年级学生参考的优秀习作。
【难度系数】
0.7
