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七、书面表达 (20分)
假如你是安,收到了一封英国笔友的来信,询问你最敬佩的人是谁。请你根据来信内容,结合自己的实际,写一篇不少于90词的文章。
Hello Ann,
I hear that you've learned something about great people this week. Can you tell me about the person you admire most in history? Can you tell me some basic information about him/ her? What did he/she do? What have you learned from him/her?
Andy
The person I admire most is
假如你是安,收到了一封英国笔友的来信,询问你最敬佩的人是谁。请你根据来信内容,结合自己的实际,写一篇不少于90词的文章。
Hello Ann,
I hear that you've learned something about great people this week. Can you tell me about the person you admire most in history? Can you tell me some basic information about him/ her? What did he/she do? What have you learned from him/her?
Andy
The person I admire most is
答案
The person I admire most is Edison.
He was one of the greatest scientists in the twentieth century. He was famous around
the world as an inventor as well. In 1879, he succeeded in inventing the lamp after
thousands of times of tests. Edison devoted all his life to invention. During his life, he had
over one thousand inventions and made a great contribution to the development of mankind.
I consider Edison as my hero. From him, I have learned that whatever difficulties I
meet, I should never give up.
He was one of the greatest scientists in the twentieth century. He was famous around
the world as an inventor as well. In 1879, he succeeded in inventing the lamp after
thousands of times of tests. Edison devoted all his life to invention. During his life, he had
over one thousand inventions and made a great contribution to the development of mankind.
I consider Edison as my hero. From him, I have learned that whatever difficulties I
meet, I should never give up.
解析
【分析】
首先，我们需要明确题目要求：给英国笔友Andy回信，介绍自己最敬佩的历史人物，需涵盖人物基本信息、主要事迹以及从他身上学到的品质，且字数不少于90词。
解题思路如下：
1. 确定写作对象：选择事迹广为人知、容易展开内容的人物，比如爱迪生，他的发明事迹极具代表性，能很好地支撑文章内容。
2. 搭建文章结构：开头直接点明最敬佩的人；中间部分先介绍人物的基本身份、时代背景，再详细讲述他的核心成就及对人类的贡献；结尾部分阐述从该人物身上获得的启示，回应笔友的所有问题。
3. 语言表达：注意时态的正确使用，介绍人物过去的事迹用一般过去时，表达自身感悟用一般现在时或现在完成时；运用丰富的短语和句式提升文章质量，同时确保逻辑连贯、要点齐全。
【解析】
步骤1：开篇点题，直接说明最敬佩的人是爱迪生，回应笔友“你最敬佩的人是谁”的问题。
步骤2：介绍爱迪生的基本信息：他是20世纪最伟大的科学家之一，也是闻名世界的发明家，让笔友了解人物的基本身份。
步骤3：讲述核心事迹：1879年，他经过数千次试验成功发明电灯；一生致力于发明，拥有超一千项发明，为人类发展做出巨大贡献，详细回答“他做了什么”的问题。
步骤4：阐述感悟：将爱迪生视为自己的榜样，说明从他身上学到遇到困难永不放弃的精神，回应“你从他身上学到了什么”的问题。
步骤5：检查内容：确保所有问题都被覆盖，字数符合要求，语法正确，语句通顺连贯。
【答案】
The person I admire most is Edison.
He was one of the greatest scientists in the twentieth century. He was famous around
the world as an inventor as well. In 1879, he succeeded in inventing the lamp after
thousands of times of tests. Edison devoted all his life to invention. During his life, he had
over one thousand inventions and made a great contribution to the development of mankind.
I consider Edison as my hero. From him, I have learned that whatever difficulties I
meet, I should never give up.
【知识点】
1. 人物介绍类写作
2. 一般过去时的运用
3. 英语书面表达连贯技巧
【点评】
这篇范文紧扣题目要求，完整回应了笔友提出的四个问题，结构清晰，逻辑连贯。文中运用了“one of the greatest scientists”“devoted all his life to”“made a great contribution to”等丰富的短语，提升了文章的表达层次。时态使用准确，既清晰叙述了爱迪生的事迹，又真切传达了自身的感悟，符合书面表达的字数要求，是一篇优秀的参考范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先，我们需要明确题目要求：给英国笔友Andy回信，介绍自己最敬佩的历史人物，需涵盖人物基本信息、主要事迹以及从他身上学到的品质，且字数不少于90词。
解题思路如下：
1. 确定写作对象：选择事迹广为人知、容易展开内容的人物，比如爱迪生，他的发明事迹极具代表性，能很好地支撑文章内容。
2. 搭建文章结构：开头直接点明最敬佩的人；中间部分先介绍人物的基本身份、时代背景，再详细讲述他的核心成就及对人类的贡献；结尾部分阐述从该人物身上获得的启示，回应笔友的所有问题。
3. 语言表达：注意时态的正确使用，介绍人物过去的事迹用一般过去时，表达自身感悟用一般现在时或现在完成时；运用丰富的短语和句式提升文章质量，同时确保逻辑连贯、要点齐全。
【解析】
步骤1：开篇点题，直接说明最敬佩的人是爱迪生，回应笔友“你最敬佩的人是谁”的问题。
步骤2：介绍爱迪生的基本信息：他是20世纪最伟大的科学家之一，也是闻名世界的发明家，让笔友了解人物的基本身份。
步骤3：讲述核心事迹：1879年，他经过数千次试验成功发明电灯；一生致力于发明，拥有超一千项发明，为人类发展做出巨大贡献，详细回答“他做了什么”的问题。
步骤4：阐述感悟：将爱迪生视为自己的榜样，说明从他身上学到遇到困难永不放弃的精神，回应“你从他身上学到了什么”的问题。
步骤5：检查内容：确保所有问题都被覆盖，字数符合要求，语法正确，语句通顺连贯。
【答案】
The person I admire most is Edison.
He was one of the greatest scientists in the twentieth century. He was famous around
the world as an inventor as well. In 1879, he succeeded in inventing the lamp after
thousands of times of tests. Edison devoted all his life to invention. During his life, he had
over one thousand inventions and made a great contribution to the development of mankind.
I consider Edison as my hero. From him, I have learned that whatever difficulties I
meet, I should never give up.
【知识点】
1. 人物介绍类写作
2. 一般过去时的运用
3. 英语书面表达连贯技巧
【点评】
这篇范文紧扣题目要求，完整回应了笔友提出的四个问题，结构清晰，逻辑连贯。文中运用了“one of the greatest scientists”“devoted all his life to”“made a great contribution to”等丰富的短语，提升了文章的表达层次。时态使用准确，既清晰叙述了爱迪生的事迹，又真切传达了自身的感悟，符合书面表达的字数要求，是一篇优秀的参考范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
