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七、书面表达(满分 25 分)
在过去一年的初一学习、生活中，你肯定参加过一些户外活动，比如 a school trip 或 going camping 等。你班将开展以“An amazing outdoor activity”为题的英语作文活动，并在班级内展示。请根据以下思维导图提示的要点完成一篇文章。
要点：
注意：
1. 词数不少于 90，开头已给出，不计入总词数；
2. 内容必须包括但不限于图中的要点，可以适当发挥，使短文完整、流畅。
An amazing outdoor activity
Time flies by quickly. In the past year, I took part in many amazing outdoor activities.
在过去一年的初一学习、生活中，你肯定参加过一些户外活动，比如 a school trip 或 going camping 等。你班将开展以“An amazing outdoor activity”为题的英语作文活动，并在班级内展示。请根据以下思维导图提示的要点完成一篇文章。
要点：
注意：
1. 词数不少于 90，开头已给出，不计入总词数；
2. 内容必须包括但不限于图中的要点，可以适当发挥，使短文完整、流畅。
An amazing outdoor activity
Time flies by quickly. In the past year, I took part in many amazing outdoor activities.
答案
One possible version：
An amazing outdoor activity
Time flies by quickly. In the past year， I took part in many amazing outdoor activities. Last summer， my classmates and I took part in an unforgettable school trip to the nearby hills.
We had a fun day hiking up the hills， breathing in the fresh air， and watching all kinds of animals. We also had a little picnic by the river， where we told stories and laughed together. When we got to the top of the hill， we saw a beautiful sight of the whole valley.
This was really great because it let us get away from the loud everyday life and enjoy nature. It was also a good time to talk with our classmates and make some good memories. After the trip， I was full of energy and ready to take on the new school year with all my strength.
An amazing outdoor activity
Time flies by quickly. In the past year， I took part in many amazing outdoor activities. Last summer， my classmates and I took part in an unforgettable school trip to the nearby hills.
We had a fun day hiking up the hills， breathing in the fresh air， and watching all kinds of animals. We also had a little picnic by the river， where we told stories and laughed together. When we got to the top of the hill， we saw a beautiful sight of the whole valley.
This was really great because it let us get away from the loud everyday life and enjoy nature. It was also a good time to talk with our classmates and make some good memories. After the trip， I was full of energy and ready to take on the new school year with all my strength.
解析
【分析】
这是一篇以“An amazing outdoor activity”为题的英语书面表达，要求根据思维导图的四个核心要点（活动的时间地点、活动内容、活动令人惊奇的原因、个人感受）完成写作，且开头已给出。解题思路为：1. 承接开头，明确具体活动的时间与地点，引出要描述的户外活动；2. 详细叙述活动过程中的具体行为，丰富内容；3. 说明活动令人惊奇的原因，可从亲近自然、增进同学情谊等角度展开；4. 表达参与活动后的个人感受，确保内容完整流畅，符合词数要求。
【解析】
写作时需注意：① 时态：描述过去的活动需用一般过去时；② 要点覆盖：必须包含思维导图的四个要点，可适当添加细节使内容更充实；③ 结构：按“活动时间地点→活动内容→活动原因→个人感受”的逻辑展开，结构清晰；④ 语言：使用符合初一水平的词汇和语句，确保通顺自然，词数不少于90。
【答案】
One possible version：
An amazing outdoor activity
Time flies by quickly. In the past year， I took part in many amazing outdoor activities. Last summer， my classmates and I took part in an unforgettable school trip to the nearby hills.
We had a fun day hiking up the hills， breathing in the fresh air， and watching all kinds of animals. We also had a little picnic by the river， where we told stories and laughed together. When we got to the top of the hill， we saw a beautiful sight of the whole valley.
This was really great because it let us get away from the loud everyday life and enjoy nature. It was also a good time to talk with our classmates and make some good memories. After the trip， I was full of energy and ready to take on the new school year with all my strength.
【知识点】
英语书面表达，一般过去时，要点式写作
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求，完整覆盖思维导图的所有要点，内容充实具体，语言流畅自然，时态运用准确，符合初一学生的写作能力，适当添加细节使文章更生动，结构清晰、逻辑连贯。
【难度系数】
0.6
这是一篇以“An amazing outdoor activity”为题的英语书面表达，要求根据思维导图的四个核心要点（活动的时间地点、活动内容、活动令人惊奇的原因、个人感受）完成写作，且开头已给出。解题思路为：1. 承接开头，明确具体活动的时间与地点，引出要描述的户外活动；2. 详细叙述活动过程中的具体行为，丰富内容；3. 说明活动令人惊奇的原因，可从亲近自然、增进同学情谊等角度展开；4. 表达参与活动后的个人感受，确保内容完整流畅，符合词数要求。
【解析】
写作时需注意：① 时态：描述过去的活动需用一般过去时；② 要点覆盖：必须包含思维导图的四个要点，可适当添加细节使内容更充实；③ 结构：按“活动时间地点→活动内容→活动原因→个人感受”的逻辑展开，结构清晰；④ 语言：使用符合初一水平的词汇和语句，确保通顺自然，词数不少于90。
【答案】
One possible version：
An amazing outdoor activity
Time flies by quickly. In the past year， I took part in many amazing outdoor activities. Last summer， my classmates and I took part in an unforgettable school trip to the nearby hills.
We had a fun day hiking up the hills， breathing in the fresh air， and watching all kinds of animals. We also had a little picnic by the river， where we told stories and laughed together. When we got to the top of the hill， we saw a beautiful sight of the whole valley.
This was really great because it let us get away from the loud everyday life and enjoy nature. It was also a good time to talk with our classmates and make some good memories. After the trip， I was full of energy and ready to take on the new school year with all my strength.
【知识点】
英语书面表达，一般过去时，要点式写作
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要求，完整覆盖思维导图的所有要点，内容充实具体，语言流畅自然，时态运用准确，符合初一学生的写作能力，适当添加细节使文章更生动，结构清晰、逻辑连贯。
【难度系数】
0.6
