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七、书面表达(共1大题,满分20分)
今天是周末,你和朋友来到公园游玩。请你根据以下
1. What are you doing?
2. What are people around you doing?
3. How do you feel?
4. Please write something more.
注意:文中不得透露个人真实信息;词数80左右;开头已给出,不计入总词数。
It is a sunny weekend. My friends and I are playing in the park.
今天是周末,你和朋友来到公园游玩。请你根据以下
内
容
提
示
,写一篇英语日记,记录你的所见所感。内
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提
示
:1. What are you doing?
2. What are people around you doing?
3. How do you feel?
4. Please write something more.
注意:文中不得透露个人真实信息;词数80左右;开头已给出,不计入总词数。
It is a sunny weekend. My friends and I are playing in the park.
We are flying a kite on the green grass. Around us, many people are enjoying themselves. Some children are chasing each other happily near the flower beds. Their parents are sitting on benches, chatting and laughing. I feel completely relaxed and joyful. The fresh air and the warm sunshine make me forget all my worries. I hope we can have more days like this. It's wonderful to see everyone enjoying the simple pleasures of life together in this beautiful park.
答案
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It is a sunny weekend. My friends and I are playing in the park. We are flying a kite on the green grass. Around us, many people are enjoying themselves. Some children are chasing each other happily near the flower beds. Their parents are sitting on benches, chatting and laughing. I feel completely relaxed and joyful. The fresh air and the warm sunshine make me forget all my worries. I hope we can have more days like this. It's wonderful to see everyone enjoying the simple pleasures of life together in this beautiful park.
It is a sunny weekend. My friends and I are playing in the park. We are flying a kite on the green grass. Around us, many people are enjoying themselves. Some children are chasing each other happily near the flower beds. Their parents are sitting on benches, chatting and laughing. I feel completely relaxed and joyful. The fresh air and the warm sunshine make me forget all my worries. I hope we can have more days like this. It's wonderful to see everyone enjoying the simple pleasures of life together in this beautiful park.
解析
【分析】
首先，这是一篇情景类英语日记写作题，解题时需紧扣题目给出的四个提示点，同时注意日记的语境和时态选择。
1. 确定时态：因为描述的是正在公园游玩的场景，所以主要使用现在进行时来体现动作的正在进行。
2. 填充内容：
第一步，承接开头，写出自己和朋友正在做的具体活动，比如放风筝，让内容更具体；
第二步，描述周围人的活动，可从不同年龄段入手，比如孩子追逐、家长聊天，丰富画面感；
第三步，表达自己的感受，比如放松、愉悦，结合环境（新鲜空气、暖阳）来强化感受；
第四步，补充延伸内容，比如对这类美好日子的期盼，或是对大家享受简单生活的感慨，让文章更有情感。
3. 注意词数控制在要求范围内，避免透露个人真实信息，语言要自然流畅。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，点明自身活动：用“We are flying a kite on the green grass.”，以现在进行时清晰说明自己和朋友的游玩项目，贴合当下场景。
2. 描述周围人群的活动：先用“Around us, many people are enjoying themselves.”总起公园的热闹氛围，再分述“Some children are chasing each other happily near the flower beds.”和“Their parents are sitting on benches, chatting and laughing.”，从孩子到家长，层次分明，让场景更鲜活。
3. 表达个人感受：用“I feel completely relaxed and joyful.”直接抒发心情，再补充“The fresh air and the warm sunshine make me forget all my worries.”，说明感受的来源，让情感表达更真实可信。
4. 补充延伸内容：用“I hope we can have more days like this. It's wonderful to see everyone enjoying the simple pleasures of life together in this beautiful park.”表达对美好时光的期盼，升华文章主题，使内容更完整。
【答案】
It is a sunny weekend. My friends and I are playing in the park. We are flying a kite on the green grass. Around us, many people are enjoying themselves. Some children are chasing each other happily near the flower beds. Their parents are sitting on benches, chatting and laughing. I feel completely relaxed and joyful. The fresh air and the warm sunshine make me forget all my worries. I hope we can have more days like this. It's wonderful to see everyone enjoying the simple pleasures of life together in this beautiful park.
【知识点】
1. 现在进行时用法
2. 英语日记写作
3. 情景话题描述
【点评】
这篇范文紧扣题目所有要求，内容完整覆盖提示要点，时态运用准确规范。文章逻辑清晰，从自身活动到周围场景，再到个人感受和延伸期盼，层层递进。语言简洁流畅，用词恰当自然，既符合词数要求，又传递出真挚的情感，是一篇优秀的情景类书面表达范文。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先，这是一篇情景类英语日记写作题，解题时需紧扣题目给出的四个提示点，同时注意日记的语境和时态选择。
1. 确定时态：因为描述的是正在公园游玩的场景，所以主要使用现在进行时来体现动作的正在进行。
2. 填充内容：
第一步，承接开头，写出自己和朋友正在做的具体活动，比如放风筝，让内容更具体；
第二步，描述周围人的活动，可从不同年龄段入手，比如孩子追逐、家长聊天，丰富画面感；
第三步，表达自己的感受，比如放松、愉悦，结合环境（新鲜空气、暖阳）来强化感受；
第四步，补充延伸内容，比如对这类美好日子的期盼，或是对大家享受简单生活的感慨，让文章更有情感。
3. 注意词数控制在要求范围内，避免透露个人真实信息，语言要自然流畅。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，点明自身活动：用“We are flying a kite on the green grass.”，以现在进行时清晰说明自己和朋友的游玩项目，贴合当下场景。
2. 描述周围人群的活动：先用“Around us, many people are enjoying themselves.”总起公园的热闹氛围，再分述“Some children are chasing each other happily near the flower beds.”和“Their parents are sitting on benches, chatting and laughing.”，从孩子到家长，层次分明，让场景更鲜活。
3. 表达个人感受：用“I feel completely relaxed and joyful.”直接抒发心情，再补充“The fresh air and the warm sunshine make me forget all my worries.”，说明感受的来源，让情感表达更真实可信。
4. 补充延伸内容：用“I hope we can have more days like this. It's wonderful to see everyone enjoying the simple pleasures of life together in this beautiful park.”表达对美好时光的期盼，升华文章主题，使内容更完整。
【答案】
It is a sunny weekend. My friends and I are playing in the park. We are flying a kite on the green grass. Around us, many people are enjoying themselves. Some children are chasing each other happily near the flower beds. Their parents are sitting on benches, chatting and laughing. I feel completely relaxed and joyful. The fresh air and the warm sunshine make me forget all my worries. I hope we can have more days like this. It's wonderful to see everyone enjoying the simple pleasures of life together in this beautiful park.
【知识点】
1. 现在进行时用法
2. 英语日记写作
3. 情景话题描述
【点评】
这篇范文紧扣题目所有要求，内容完整覆盖提示要点，时态运用准确规范。文章逻辑清晰，从自身活动到周围场景，再到个人感受和延伸期盼，层层递进。语言简洁流畅，用词恰当自然，既符合词数要求，又传递出真挚的情感，是一篇优秀的情景类书面表达范文。
【难度系数】
0.7
