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请根据你校校刊有关“Dream home”的征稿内容写一篇英语短文来设计你自己的梦想家园。
In TEENS MAG, we like to share ideas about anything you are interested in. This month we want you to write about your dream home.
What is your dream home like?
How many rooms are there in your dream home and what are they?
What things are in it?
…
要求：1. 文章要涵盖所有要点，可以适当发挥。2. 词数不少于 80，文章开头已给出，但不计入总词数。
［思路点拨］1. 文体：记叙文。2. 时态：一般现在时。3. 人称：以第三人称为主。
［写作提纲］
There is/are …
［妙笔生花］
I’m glad to share my ideas about my dream home.
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请根据你校校刊有关“Dream home”的征稿内容写一篇英语短文来设计你自己的梦想家园。
In TEENS MAG, we like to share ideas about anything you are interested in. This month we want you to write about your dream home.
What is your dream home like?
How many rooms are there in your dream home and what are they?
What things are in it?
…
要求：1. 文章要涵盖所有要点，可以适当发挥。2. 词数不少于 80，文章开头已给出，但不计入总词数。
［思路点拨］1. 文体：记叙文。2. 时态：一般现在时。3. 人称：以第三人称为主。
［写作提纲］
There is/are …
［妙笔生花］
I’m glad to share my ideas about my dream home.
My dream home is a house with seven rooms in it.
On the ground floor, you can see a sofa in the living room. Beside the living room is the kitchen. There is a large fridge and a cupboard in it. There is a large dinner table in the dining room.
On the first floor, there is a study and three bedrooms. There is a large bookcase in the study. I have my own bedroom and there is a bathroom in it.
In front of my house is a nice garden with many flowers. How beautiful the flowers are!
That's my dream home. Would you like to share yours with me?
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答案
One possible version:
I'm glad to share my ideas about my dream home. My dream home is a house with seven rooms in it.
On the ground floor, you can see a sofa in the living room. Beside the living room is the kitchen. There is a large fridge and a cupboard in it. There is a large dinner table in the dining room. On the first floor, there is a study and three bedrooms. There is a large bookcase in the study. I have my own bedroom and there is a bathroom in it. In front of my house is a nice garden with many flowers. How beautiful the flowers are!
That's my dream home. Would you like to share yours with me?
I'm glad to share my ideas about my dream home. My dream home is a house with seven rooms in it.
On the ground floor, you can see a sofa in the living room. Beside the living room is the kitchen. There is a large fridge and a cupboard in it. There is a large dinner table in the dining room. On the first floor, there is a study and three bedrooms. There is a large bookcase in the study. I have my own bedroom and there is a bathroom in it. In front of my house is a nice garden with many flowers. How beautiful the flowers are!
That's my dream home. Would you like to share yours with me?
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题，首先明确核心要求：围绕“我的梦想家园”主题，覆盖“家园外观特征、房间数量与类型、屋内陈设”所有要点，词数不少于80，全程使用一般现在时。接下来按照题目给出的三段式提纲搭建写作框架：第一步先完成开篇段，承接已给出的开头，直接点出梦想家园的整体属性，说明它是一栋带多间功能区的小屋，完成整体介绍。第二步写核心主体段，按照从低层到高层、从室内到室外的空间顺序展开，依次介绍各区域的布局和设施，灵活使用提示给出的On the ground floor、There is/are等参考句式，把题干要求的所有细节补充完整，适当加入小细节让内容更生动。第三步写收尾段，总结全文，用互动问句呼应校刊征稿的分享主题，完成整篇文章。
【解析】
1. 开篇段承接给定开头，直接点题：使用提示句式My dream home is a house with seven rooms in it，清晰交代梦想家园的整体情况，开门见山。
2. 主体段按照空间顺序分层展开描写：
① 先介绍底层空间：用On the ground floor引出，依次介绍客厅的沙发、厨房的冰箱和橱柜、餐厅的大餐桌，用There be句型准确描述物品的摆放位置。
② 接着介绍上层空间：说明二层有1间书房和3间卧室，补充书房的大书架、自己卧室配套独立卫浴的细节，丰富文章内容。
③ 最后介绍屋外环境：用In front of my house引出，描写屋前种满鲜花的漂亮花园，补充感叹句增强画面感。
3. 收尾段使用提示句式That's my dream home. 总结全文，再用Would you like to share yours with me? 发出互动邀请，贴合校刊分享的主题，完成全文。
【答案】
I'm glad to share my ideas about my dream home. My dream home is a house with seven rooms in it.
On the ground floor, you can see a sofa in the living room. Beside the living room is the kitchen. There is a large fridge and a cupboard in it. There is a large dinner table in the dining room. On the first floor, there is a study and three bedrooms. There is a large bookcase in the study. I have my own bedroom and there is a bathroom in it. In front of my house is a nice garden with many flowers. How beautiful the flowers are!
That's my dream home. Would you like to share yours with me?
【知识点】
There be句型，空间顺序写作，英语短文写作
【点评】
本文严格贴合写作提纲和所有题干要求，逻辑清晰，采用由下到上、由内到外的空间顺序介绍梦想家园，所有要点无遗漏，句式简单通顺，符合初中阶段英语写作的表达要求，结尾的互动设计也完美适配校刊征稿的分享属性，是一篇完成度很高的优秀短文。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道写作题，首先明确核心要求：围绕“我的梦想家园”主题，覆盖“家园外观特征、房间数量与类型、屋内陈设”所有要点，词数不少于80，全程使用一般现在时。接下来按照题目给出的三段式提纲搭建写作框架：第一步先完成开篇段，承接已给出的开头，直接点出梦想家园的整体属性，说明它是一栋带多间功能区的小屋，完成整体介绍。第二步写核心主体段，按照从低层到高层、从室内到室外的空间顺序展开，依次介绍各区域的布局和设施，灵活使用提示给出的On the ground floor、There is/are等参考句式，把题干要求的所有细节补充完整，适当加入小细节让内容更生动。第三步写收尾段，总结全文，用互动问句呼应校刊征稿的分享主题，完成整篇文章。
【解析】
1. 开篇段承接给定开头，直接点题：使用提示句式My dream home is a house with seven rooms in it，清晰交代梦想家园的整体情况，开门见山。
2. 主体段按照空间顺序分层展开描写：
① 先介绍底层空间：用On the ground floor引出，依次介绍客厅的沙发、厨房的冰箱和橱柜、餐厅的大餐桌，用There be句型准确描述物品的摆放位置。
② 接着介绍上层空间：说明二层有1间书房和3间卧室，补充书房的大书架、自己卧室配套独立卫浴的细节，丰富文章内容。
③ 最后介绍屋外环境：用In front of my house引出，描写屋前种满鲜花的漂亮花园，补充感叹句增强画面感。
3. 收尾段使用提示句式That's my dream home. 总结全文，再用Would you like to share yours with me? 发出互动邀请，贴合校刊分享的主题，完成全文。
【答案】
I'm glad to share my ideas about my dream home. My dream home is a house with seven rooms in it.
On the ground floor, you can see a sofa in the living room. Beside the living room is the kitchen. There is a large fridge and a cupboard in it. There is a large dinner table in the dining room. On the first floor, there is a study and three bedrooms. There is a large bookcase in the study. I have my own bedroom and there is a bathroom in it. In front of my house is a nice garden with many flowers. How beautiful the flowers are!
That's my dream home. Would you like to share yours with me?
【知识点】
There be句型，空间顺序写作，英语短文写作
【点评】
本文严格贴合写作提纲和所有题干要求，逻辑清晰，采用由下到上、由内到外的空间顺序介绍梦想家园，所有要点无遗漏，句式简单通顺，符合初中阶段英语写作的表达要求，结尾的互动设计也完美适配校刊征稿的分享属性，是一篇完成度很高的优秀短文。
【难度系数】
0.7
