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审时态：一般现在时
审人称：以第一人称为主
随着“双减”政策的落地，现在学生们有了足够的空余时间来培养自己的爱好。你最喜欢的爱好是什么？请你根据下面的要点提示，以“My Favourite Hobby”为题用英语写一篇短文。
要点：(1)介绍你最喜欢的爱好是什么；
(2)描述和你的爱好有关的经历；
(3)介绍这个爱好给你的生活带来的影响。
要求：(1)根据要点适当发挥，文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称；
(2)词数70左右。
My Favourite Hobby
写作支架
教材原文
P32 As a rock music lover, I play the electric guitar in the school band.
P32 Sometimes I write songs and share them online.
P32 There is so much fun in music.
优秀范文
My Favourite Hobby
I have different kinds of hobbies. My favourite one is rock music.①
When I’m free②, I often do something about rock music. As a rock music lover, I play the electric guitar in the school band. Sometimes I write songs and share them online. A lot of people love my songs.
Rock music makes my life colourful.③ I get so much pleasure from music. There is so much fun in music. It also helps me make more friends.
亮点评析
①点明“我”最喜欢的爱好是摇滚乐。
②使用时间状语从句为文章增色。
③总体描述这个爱好给“我”的生活带来的影响。
审人称：以第一人称为主
随着“双减”政策的落地，现在学生们有了足够的空余时间来培养自己的爱好。你最喜欢的爱好是什么？请你根据下面的要点提示，以“My Favourite Hobby”为题用英语写一篇短文。
要点：(1)介绍你最喜欢的爱好是什么；
(2)描述和你的爱好有关的经历；
(3)介绍这个爱好给你的生活带来的影响。
要求：(1)根据要点适当发挥，文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称；
(2)词数70左右。
My Favourite Hobby
写作支架
教材原文
P32 As a rock music lover, I play the electric guitar in the school band.
P32 Sometimes I write songs and share them online.
P32 There is so much fun in music.
优秀范文
My Favourite Hobby
I have different kinds of hobbies. My favourite one is rock music.①
When I’m free②, I often do something about rock music. As a rock music lover, I play the electric guitar in the school band. Sometimes I write songs and share them online. A lot of people love my songs.
Rock music makes my life colourful.③ I get so much pleasure from music. There is so much fun in music. It also helps me make more friends.
亮点评析
①点明“我”最喜欢的爱好是摇滚乐。
②使用时间状语从句为文章增色。
③总体描述这个爱好给“我”的生活带来的影响。
答案
My Favourite Hobby
I have different kinds of hobbies. My favourite one is rock music.
When I’m free, I often do something about rock music. As a rock music lover, I play the electric guitar in the school band. Sometimes I write songs and share them online. A lot of people love my songs.
Rock music makes my life colourful. I get so much pleasure from music. There is so much fun in music. It also helps me make more friends.
I have different kinds of hobbies. My favourite one is rock music.
When I’m free, I often do something about rock music. As a rock music lover, I play the electric guitar in the school band. Sometimes I write songs and share them online. A lot of people love my songs.
Rock music makes my life colourful. I get so much pleasure from music. There is so much fun in music. It also helps me make more friends.
解析
【分析】
首先明确写作要求：以“My Favourite Hobby”为题，采用一般现在时、第一人称，结合给定写作支架，分三段完成：开头点明最喜欢的爱好；中间描述爱好相关经历；结尾说明爱好带来的影响。需紧扣要点、适当发挥，词数约70。先确定最喜欢的爱好为摇滚乐，对应支架内容填充，确保语句通顺、符合语法。
【解析】
1. 开头段：开篇点题，说明自己有多种爱好，最喜欢的是摇滚乐，对应支架开篇部分。
2. 中间段：描述爱好相关经历，空闲时做和摇滚相关的事，作为摇滚爱好者在学校乐队弹电吉他，有时写歌分享到网上，很多人喜欢，对应支架详细描述部分。
3. 结尾段：说明爱好的影响，摇滚乐让生活多彩，从音乐中获得快乐，还能帮助交更多朋友，对应支架影响部分。整体使用一般现在时、第一人称，符合题目要求，词数达标。
【答案】
My Favourite Hobby
I have different kinds of hobbies. My favourite one is rock music.
When I’m free, I often do something about rock music. As a rock music lover, I play the electric guitar in the school band. Sometimes I write songs and share them online. A lot of people love my songs.
Rock music makes my life colourful. I get so much pleasure from music. There is so much fun in music. It also helps me make more friends.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作；一般现在时运用；英语句子表达
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要点，结构清晰，分为开头、中间、结尾三段，分别对应点明爱好、描述经历、说明影响。语言通顺，运用了时间状语从句等句式，符合一般现在时和第一人称的要求，词数合适，是一篇符合要求的优秀短文。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先明确写作要求：以“My Favourite Hobby”为题，采用一般现在时、第一人称，结合给定写作支架，分三段完成：开头点明最喜欢的爱好；中间描述爱好相关经历；结尾说明爱好带来的影响。需紧扣要点、适当发挥，词数约70。先确定最喜欢的爱好为摇滚乐，对应支架内容填充，确保语句通顺、符合语法。
【解析】
1. 开头段：开篇点题，说明自己有多种爱好，最喜欢的是摇滚乐，对应支架开篇部分。
2. 中间段：描述爱好相关经历，空闲时做和摇滚相关的事，作为摇滚爱好者在学校乐队弹电吉他，有时写歌分享到网上，很多人喜欢，对应支架详细描述部分。
3. 结尾段：说明爱好的影响，摇滚乐让生活多彩，从音乐中获得快乐，还能帮助交更多朋友，对应支架影响部分。整体使用一般现在时、第一人称，符合题目要求，词数达标。
【答案】
My Favourite Hobby
I have different kinds of hobbies. My favourite one is rock music.
When I’m free, I often do something about rock music. As a rock music lover, I play the electric guitar in the school band. Sometimes I write songs and share them online. A lot of people love my songs.
Rock music makes my life colourful. I get so much pleasure from music. There is so much fun in music. It also helps me make more friends.
【知识点】
英语记叙文写作；一般现在时运用；英语句子表达
【点评】
本文紧扣题目要点，结构清晰，分为开头、中间、结尾三段，分别对应点明爱好、描述经历、说明影响。语言通顺，运用了时间状语从句等句式，符合一般现在时和第一人称的要求，词数合适，是一篇符合要求的优秀短文。
【难度系数】
0.6
