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七、书面表达
假设你是无锡星光中学的学生李华。最近你的英国笔友里德在他的来信中谈到了自己对未来生活的设想，请你根据以下信息给里德回信，向他介绍你想在未来完成的一个发明，内容包括：1. What do you want to invent for the future life?
2. What is it like?
3. Why do you want to invent it?
Dear Reed,
I have read your last letter about our future life. I'm glad to share with you about something I want to invent in the future.
Yours,
Li Hua
假设你是无锡星光中学的学生李华。最近你的英国笔友里德在他的来信中谈到了自己对未来生活的设想，请你根据以下信息给里德回信，向他介绍你想在未来完成的一个发明，内容包括：1. What do you want to invent for the future life?
2. What is it like?
3. Why do you want to invent it?
Dear Reed,
I have read your last letter about our future life. I'm glad to share with you about something I want to invent in the future.
I hope in the future we can travel anywhere we want with just a special bag. It is small
and comes in different colours. It's just like our schoolbag, but it is specially designed as a
form of transport.
When we need to go to school or go for a day trip, we just carry it on our shoulders
and turn it on. Then we can fly in the air. With the GPS inside, it will lead the way so that
we can easily reach where we want to go.
I hope we can travel in an easy and interesting way. The special bag can make it
possible, as well as produce less pollution. What do you think?
and comes in different colours. It's just like our schoolbag, but it is specially designed as a
form of transport.
When we need to go to school or go for a day trip, we just carry it on our shoulders
and turn it on. Then we can fly in the air. With the GPS inside, it will lead the way so that
we can easily reach where we want to go.
I hope we can travel in an easy and interesting way. The special bag can make it
possible, as well as produce less pollution. What do you think?
Yours,
Li Hua
答案
Dear Reed,
I have read your last letter about our future life. I'm glad to share with you about
something I want to invent in the future.
I hope in the future we can travel anywhere we want with just a special bag. It is small
and comes in different colours. It's just like our schoolbag, but it is specially designed as a
form of transport.
When we need to go to school or go for a day trip, we just carry it on our shoulders
and turn it on. Then we can fly in the air. With the GPS inside, it will lead the way so that
we can easily reach where we want to go.
I hope we can travel in an easy and interesting way. The special bag can make it
possible, as well as produce less pollution. What do you think?
Yours,
Li Hua
I have read your last letter about our future life. I'm glad to share with you about
something I want to invent in the future.
I hope in the future we can travel anywhere we want with just a special bag. It is small
and comes in different colours. It's just like our schoolbag, but it is specially designed as a
form of transport.
When we need to go to school or go for a day trip, we just carry it on our shoulders
and turn it on. Then we can fly in the air. With the GPS inside, it will lead the way so that
we can easily reach where we want to go.
I hope we can travel in an easy and interesting way. The special bag can make it
possible, as well as produce less pollution. What do you think?
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
首先，我们需要紧扣题目要求的三个核心要点来构思回信：确定发明物品、描述其特征、说明发明原因。第一步，选择贴近日常出行需求的发明会更容易展开内容，比如参考范文里的特殊飞行包，既新颖又贴近生活；第二步，描述物品时要兼顾外观和功能，外观可以从大小、颜色等直观方面入手，功能则要具体说明使用方式，比如如何启动、导航功能等，让描述更生动；第三步，说明原因要结合实际需求，比如解决出行不便、环保等问题，使内容更有说服力。同时，要注意书信的语气，保持和笔友交流的友好自然，结尾可以加入互动性的语句，比如询问对方的看法，符合书信的交际功能。
【解析】
1. 开篇衔接：承接题目给出的开头，直接点明要分享的发明——特殊飞行包，快速切入主题。
2. 物品描述：先介绍外观，“small and comes in different colours. It's just like our schoolbag”，让读者对物品有直观认识；再说明特殊功能“specially designed as a form of transport”，引出后续使用方式。
3. 功能详解：具体描述使用场景和操作方式，“carry it on our shoulders and turn it on. Then we can fly in the air”，同时补充内置GPS导航的细节，使功能更具体可信。
4. 发明原因：从出行体验和环保两个角度阐述，“travel in an easy and interesting way”“produce less pollution”，贴合现实需求，让发明的意义更明确。
5. 结尾互动：用“What do you think?”询问对方看法，符合笔友书信的交流氛围，使内容更完整。
【答案】
Dear Reed,
I have read your last letter about our future life. I'm glad to share with you about
something I want to invent in the future.
I hope in the future we can travel anywhere we want with just a special bag. It is small
and comes in different colours. It's just like our schoolbag, but it is specially designed as a
form of transport.
When we need to go to school or go for a day trip, we just carry it on our shoulders
and turn it on. Then we can fly in the air. With the GPS inside, it will lead the way so that
we can easily reach where we want to go.
I hope we can travel in an easy and interesting way. The special bag can make it
possible, as well as produce less pollution. What do you think?
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
1. 书信写作格式
2. 物品特征描述
3. 未来生活话题表达
【点评】
这篇范文结构清晰，完整覆盖了题目要求的三个核心要点，语言简洁流畅，符合笔友之间友好交流的语境。对发明物品的描述从外观到功能层层递进，发明原因贴合实际需求，结尾的互动语句增强了书信的交际性，是一篇优秀的书面表达范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先，我们需要紧扣题目要求的三个核心要点来构思回信：确定发明物品、描述其特征、说明发明原因。第一步，选择贴近日常出行需求的发明会更容易展开内容，比如参考范文里的特殊飞行包，既新颖又贴近生活；第二步，描述物品时要兼顾外观和功能，外观可以从大小、颜色等直观方面入手，功能则要具体说明使用方式，比如如何启动、导航功能等，让描述更生动；第三步，说明原因要结合实际需求，比如解决出行不便、环保等问题，使内容更有说服力。同时，要注意书信的语气，保持和笔友交流的友好自然，结尾可以加入互动性的语句，比如询问对方的看法，符合书信的交际功能。
【解析】
1. 开篇衔接：承接题目给出的开头，直接点明要分享的发明——特殊飞行包，快速切入主题。
2. 物品描述：先介绍外观，“small and comes in different colours. It's just like our schoolbag”，让读者对物品有直观认识；再说明特殊功能“specially designed as a form of transport”，引出后续使用方式。
3. 功能详解：具体描述使用场景和操作方式，“carry it on our shoulders and turn it on. Then we can fly in the air”，同时补充内置GPS导航的细节，使功能更具体可信。
4. 发明原因：从出行体验和环保两个角度阐述，“travel in an easy and interesting way”“produce less pollution”，贴合现实需求，让发明的意义更明确。
5. 结尾互动：用“What do you think?”询问对方看法，符合笔友书信的交流氛围，使内容更完整。
【答案】
Dear Reed,
I have read your last letter about our future life. I'm glad to share with you about
something I want to invent in the future.
I hope in the future we can travel anywhere we want with just a special bag. It is small
and comes in different colours. It's just like our schoolbag, but it is specially designed as a
form of transport.
When we need to go to school or go for a day trip, we just carry it on our shoulders
and turn it on. Then we can fly in the air. With the GPS inside, it will lead the way so that
we can easily reach where we want to go.
I hope we can travel in an easy and interesting way. The special bag can make it
possible, as well as produce less pollution. What do you think?
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
1. 书信写作格式
2. 物品特征描述
3. 未来生活话题表达
【点评】
这篇范文结构清晰，完整覆盖了题目要求的三个核心要点，语言简洁流畅，符合笔友之间友好交流的语境。对发明物品的描述从外观到功能层层递进，发明原因贴合实际需求，结尾的互动语句增强了书信的交际性，是一篇优秀的书面表达范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
