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五、书面表达
假设你是校学生会的一员,请选择一种你最喜欢的野生动物,根据下面思维导图的提示,从外貌、食物、能力、特性、危险处境等方面介绍该野生动物,并以校学生会的名义发出倡议,号召更多同学加入保护野生动物的队伍。
注意:
1. 文章须包括思维导图中所有提示内容,语句通顺、意思连贯;
2. 思维导图中的省略号部分需作适当发挥;
3. 词数 90 左右,已给出部分不计入总词数。
Dear friends,
Wild animals play an important part on our planet. But they are facing many problems.
The Students' Union
假设你是校学生会的一员,请选择一种你最喜欢的野生动物,根据下面思维导图的提示,从外貌、食物、能力、特性、危险处境等方面介绍该野生动物,并以校学生会的名义发出倡议,号召更多同学加入保护野生动物的队伍。
注意:
1. 文章须包括思维导图中所有提示内容,语句通顺、意思连贯;
2. 思维导图中的省略号部分需作适当发挥;
3. 词数 90 左右,已给出部分不计入总词数。
Dear friends,
Wild animals play an important part on our planet. But they are facing many problems.
The Students' Union
答案
One possible version:
Dear friends,
Wild animals play an important part on our planet. But they are facing many problems. I am writing to call on everyone to do something for them.
I like tigers best among all the wild animals. They have yellow fur with black stripes. Tigers like living in groups. They are very brave. They can run fast, but only for a short while. They can also swim and climb trees. Tigers eat animals like rabbits, deer, wolves and so on. However, these big cats are in great danger now. Many of them don't have enough food to eat and their living areas are becoming smaller and smaller.
I think everybody should act to protect wild animals. Let's take action now!
The Students' Union
Dear friends,
Wild animals play an important part on our planet. But they are facing many problems. I am writing to call on everyone to do something for them.
I like tigers best among all the wild animals. They have yellow fur with black stripes. Tigers like living in groups. They are very brave. They can run fast, but only for a short while. They can also swim and climb trees. Tigers eat animals like rabbits, deer, wolves and so on. However, these big cats are in great danger now. Many of them don't have enough food to eat and their living areas are becoming smaller and smaller.
I think everybody should act to protect wild animals. Let's take action now!
The Students' Union
解析
【分析】首先明确题目要求：以校学生会名义写倡议书，需选择一种野生动物，涵盖思维导图的外貌、特性、能力、食物、危险处境五个方面，最后发出保护倡议。解题思路：1. 选定特征鲜明的代表性野生动物（如老虎）；2. 对应思维导图各模块填充具体内容，确保覆盖所有提示点；3. 适当发挥细节（如群居特点）；4. 结尾发出符合学生会身份的保护倡议，保证语句连贯、词数达标。
【解析】写作步骤：1. 审题：确定文体为倡议书，时态用一般现在时，人称用第一人称（学生会代表）；2. 选材：选老虎作为介绍对象，其特征清晰易展开；3. 内容组织：①外貌：描述黄皮毛带黑条纹；②特性：勇敢、群居；③能力：跑得快、会游泳、爬树；④食物：以兔子、鹿等小动物为食；⑤危险：栖息地缩小、食物不足；4. 结尾：发出保护倡议，呼吁大家行动起来，契合学生会的身份定位。
【答案】One possible version:
Dear friends,
Wild animals play an important part on our planet. But they are facing many problems. I am writing to call on everyone to do something for them.
I like tigers best among all the wild animals. They have yellow fur with black stripes. Tigers like living in groups. They are very brave. They can run fast, but only for a short while. They can also swim and climb trees. Tigers eat animals like rabbits, deer, wolves and so on. However, these big cats are in great danger now. Many of them don't have enough food to eat and their living areas are becoming smaller and smaller.
I think everybody should act to protect wild animals. Let's take action now!
The Students' Union
【知识点】英语书面表达、野生动物描述词汇、一般现在时
【点评】该范文紧扣题目要求，全面覆盖思维导图的所有提示内容，语句通顺连贯，逻辑清晰，格式正确，有效传达了保护野生动物的主题，是一篇符合要求的优秀范文。
【难度系数】0.5
【解析】写作步骤：1. 审题：确定文体为倡议书，时态用一般现在时，人称用第一人称（学生会代表）；2. 选材：选老虎作为介绍对象，其特征清晰易展开；3. 内容组织：①外貌：描述黄皮毛带黑条纹；②特性：勇敢、群居；③能力：跑得快、会游泳、爬树；④食物：以兔子、鹿等小动物为食；⑤危险：栖息地缩小、食物不足；4. 结尾：发出保护倡议，呼吁大家行动起来，契合学生会的身份定位。
【答案】One possible version:
Dear friends,
Wild animals play an important part on our planet. But they are facing many problems. I am writing to call on everyone to do something for them.
I like tigers best among all the wild animals. They have yellow fur with black stripes. Tigers like living in groups. They are very brave. They can run fast, but only for a short while. They can also swim and climb trees. Tigers eat animals like rabbits, deer, wolves and so on. However, these big cats are in great danger now. Many of them don't have enough food to eat and their living areas are becoming smaller and smaller.
I think everybody should act to protect wild animals. Let's take action now!
The Students' Union
【知识点】英语书面表达、野生动物描述词汇、一般现在时
【点评】该范文紧扣题目要求，全面覆盖思维导图的所有提示内容，语句通顺连贯，逻辑清晰，格式正确，有效传达了保护野生动物的主题，是一篇符合要求的优秀范文。
【难度系数】0.5
