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品读范文，拆解核心技巧
假设你是李军，你和新认识的英国笔友埃里克都热爱运动。请你根据以下提示给埃里克回一封90词左右的电子邮件，向他介绍你在运动方面的爱好及相关情况。
内容提示：
1. 介绍你最喜欢的运动是什么。
2. 目前的水平：擅长该运动，是校队成员。
3. 日常训练：每天一个小时。
4. 感受、愿望：……
[素材积累]
储备金句，提升语言质感
[开头句]
1. My favourite hobby is singing.
2. I am interested in reading books.
3. I like painting.
[中间句]
1. I often play football with my classmates after school.
2. He also watches football matches.
3. We feel proud when we win the matches.
4. We are really excited to win the games.
[结尾句]
1. Yao Ming is my favourite basketball player.
2. I want to be a great basketball player in the future.
3. I hope my dream can come true.
[名言警句]
1. Interest is the seed, and action is the fruit. 兴趣是种子，行动是果实。
2. Everyone's life is a boat, and the dream is the sail of the boat.
每个人的生命都是一只小船，梦想是小船的风帆。
品读范文，拆解核心技巧
假设你是李军，你和新认识的英国笔友埃里克都热爱运动。请你根据以下提示给埃里克回一封90词左右的电子邮件，向他介绍你在运动方面的爱好及相关情况。
内容提示：
1. 介绍你最喜欢的运动是什么。
2. 目前的水平：擅长该运动，是校队成员。
3. 日常训练：每天一个小时。
4. 感受、愿望：……
[素材积累]
储备金句，提升语言质感
[开头句]
1. My favourite hobby is singing.
2. I am interested in reading books.
3. I like painting.
[中间句]
1. I often play football with my classmates after school.
2. He also watches football matches.
3. We feel proud when we win the matches.
4. We are really excited to win the games.
[结尾句]
1. Yao Ming is my favourite basketball player.
2. I want to be a great basketball player in the future.
3. I hope my dream can come true.
[名言警句]
1. Interest is the seed, and action is the fruit. 兴趣是种子，行动是果实。
2. Everyone's life is a boat, and the dream is the sail of the boat.
每个人的生命都是一只小船，梦想是小船的风帆。
答案
Dear Eric,
Thanks for your email. You're really good at different sports. I'm glad to tell you about my favourite sport. My favourite sport is table tennis and I'm good at it. I'm a member of our school table tennis team.
I play table tennis with other members for one hour after school every day. It is fun to share our skills with each other. Sometimes we feel really tired, but none of us feel bored.
Fan Zhendong is my favourite table tennis player. He is my hero too. I hope I can be a great player like him one day. It will be really great to make my dream come true.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Jun
Thanks for your email. You're really good at different sports. I'm glad to tell you about my favourite sport. My favourite sport is table tennis and I'm good at it. I'm a member of our school table tennis team.
I play table tennis with other members for one hour after school every day. It is fun to share our skills with each other. Sometimes we feel really tired, but none of us feel bored.
Fan Zhendong is my favourite table tennis player. He is my hero too. I hope I can be a great player like him one day. It will be really great to make my dream come true.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Jun
解析
【分析】这是一道英语应用文写作题，要求以李军的身份给英国笔友埃里克回邮件，介绍自己的运动爱好。解题思路：①遵循电子邮件的标准格式（称呼、正文、祝福语、落款）；②覆盖所有内容要点：明确最喜欢的运动是乒乓球，说明自己擅长且是校队成员，介绍每天一小时的日常训练，表达训练的感受及想成为优秀球员的愿望；③运用合适的连接词使内容连贯，语言贴合初中英语写作要求，控制字数在90词左右。
【解析】按照电子邮件格式写作：开头用Dear Eric，先感谢对方的邮件，点明最喜欢的运动是乒乓球，说明自己擅长且是校队成员；接着写日常训练：每天放学后和队友练一小时，分享技能很有趣，虽累但不无聊；然后写喜欢的运动员樊振东，将其视为偶像，表达希望成为像他一样的优秀球员、实现梦想的愿望；最后用Best wishes和落款完成书信。
【答案】Dear Eric,
Thanks for your email. You're really good at different sports. I'm glad to tell you about my favourite sport. My favourite sport is table tennis and I'm good at it. I'm a member of our school table tennis team.
I play table tennis with other members for one hour after school every day. It is fun to share our skills with each other. Sometimes we feel really tired, but none of us feel bored.
Fan Zhendong is my favourite table tennis player. He is my hero too. I hope I can be a great player like him one day. It will be really great to make my dream come true.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Jun
【知识点】英语应用文写作、电子邮件写作、运动话题表达
【点评】该范文紧扣题目要求，结构清晰，要点完整，细节真实具体，情感真挚自然，语言流畅得体，是一篇符合要求的优秀英语书信，为学生提供了清晰的写作范例。
【难度系数】0.3
【解析】按照电子邮件格式写作：开头用Dear Eric，先感谢对方的邮件，点明最喜欢的运动是乒乓球，说明自己擅长且是校队成员；接着写日常训练：每天放学后和队友练一小时，分享技能很有趣，虽累但不无聊；然后写喜欢的运动员樊振东，将其视为偶像，表达希望成为像他一样的优秀球员、实现梦想的愿望；最后用Best wishes和落款完成书信。
【答案】Dear Eric,
Thanks for your email. You're really good at different sports. I'm glad to tell you about my favourite sport. My favourite sport is table tennis and I'm good at it. I'm a member of our school table tennis team.
I play table tennis with other members for one hour after school every day. It is fun to share our skills with each other. Sometimes we feel really tired, but none of us feel bored.
Fan Zhendong is my favourite table tennis player. He is my hero too. I hope I can be a great player like him one day. It will be really great to make my dream come true.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Jun
【知识点】英语应用文写作、电子邮件写作、运动话题表达
【点评】该范文紧扣题目要求，结构清晰，要点完整，细节真实具体，情感真挚自然，语言流畅得体，是一篇符合要求的优秀英语书信，为学生提供了清晰的写作范例。
【难度系数】0.3
