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不以规矩，不能成方圆。国有国法，校有校规。请以“My school rules”为题，写一篇80词左右的文章。
[高分范文]
My school rules
We have a lot of school rules at our school. ① And we aren't allowed to break the rules.
I think some of the rules are necessary. For example ②, students must listen carefully in class and finish homework carefully. And we aren't allowed to make noise in the library. We have to be friendly to classmates. It's helpful to get along with classmates. At our school, we have to wear uniforms every day. The problem is that all my classmates think the uniforms are ugly. I think young people should look smart, so I'd like to wear my own clothes. If we have to wear uniforms, we should be allowed to design our own uniforms. ③ That would be a good way to keep both teachers and students happy.
[名师点评]
本文罗列作者的校规，并且阐述作者对校规的建议，文章逻辑性强，层次分明。
① 文章开头简洁明了，直接点出主题。这种方式为下面观点的表达提供了前提和基础。
② 文章内容充实，For example, get along with, “both ... and ...”等短语的运用为文章增色不少。
③ If引导的条件状语从句的使用显示了作者较强的写作功底，增强了文章的感染力。
不以规矩，不能成方圆。国有国法，校有校规。请以“My school rules”为题，写一篇80词左右的文章。
[高分范文]
My school rules
We have a lot of school rules at our school. ① And we aren't allowed to break the rules.
I think some of the rules are necessary. For example ②, students must listen carefully in class and finish homework carefully. And we aren't allowed to make noise in the library. We have to be friendly to classmates. It's helpful to get along with classmates. At our school, we have to wear uniforms every day. The problem is that all my classmates think the uniforms are ugly. I think young people should look smart, so I'd like to wear my own clothes. If we have to wear uniforms, we should be allowed to design our own uniforms. ③ That would be a good way to keep both teachers and students happy.
[名师点评]
本文罗列作者的校规，并且阐述作者对校规的建议，文章逻辑性强，层次分明。
① 文章开头简洁明了，直接点出主题。这种方式为下面观点的表达提供了前提和基础。
② 文章内容充实，For example, get along with, “both ... and ...”等短语的运用为文章增色不少。
③ If引导的条件状语从句的使用显示了作者较强的写作功底，增强了文章的感染力。
答案
My school rules
We have a lot of school rules at our school and we can't break any of them.
Some rules are quite necessary. For example, we must listen carefully in class, mustn't make noise in the library, and we have to be friendly to get along well with classmates. But all of us think our school uniforms are ugly. I think if we have to wear uniforms, we can design our own uniforms to keep both teachers and students happy.
We have a lot of school rules at our school and we can't break any of them.
Some rules are quite necessary. For example, we must listen carefully in class, mustn't make noise in the library, and we have to be friendly to get along well with classmates. But all of us think our school uniforms are ugly. I think if we have to wear uniforms, we can design our own uniforms to keep both teachers and students happy.
解析
【分析】
本题为英语命题作文，要求以“My school rules”为题写一篇80词左右的文章。解题思路：首先明确文章结构，开头直接点题说明学校有校规且不能违反；中间分两部分，一是列举必要的校规（如课堂认真听讲、图书馆不吵闹、与同学友好相处），二是提出对校服的看法及合理建议；结尾呼应观点，说明建议的好处。写作时需运用合适的短语和句式，保证逻辑连贯，符合字数要求。
【解析】
写作步骤：
1. 开头：直接点明主题，表述为“We have a lot of school rules at our school and we can't break any of them.”；
2. 中间：用For example引出必要校规，如“we must listen carefully in class, mustn't make noise in the library, and we have to be friendly to get along well with classmates.”；接着提出对校服的看法及建议，表述为“But all of us think our school uniforms are ugly. I think if we have to wear uniforms, we can design our own uniforms to keep both teachers and students happy.”；
3. 检查调整语句，确保流畅，符合80词左右的要求。
【答案】
My school rules
We have a lot of school rules at our school and we can't break any of them.
Some rules are quite necessary. For example, we must listen carefully in class, mustn't make noise in the library, and we have to be friendly to get along well with classmates. But all of us think our school uniforms are ugly. I think if we have to wear uniforms, we can design our own uniforms to keep both teachers and students happy.
【知识点】
英语命题作文写作、校规话题表达、if条件状语从句
【点评】
本文结构清晰，层次分明，开头点题明确，中间列举校规并提出合理建议，结尾呼应主题，运用了For example、both...and...等短语及if引导的条件状语从句，语言流畅，符合写作要求，是一篇优秀的命题作文范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
本题为英语命题作文，要求以“My school rules”为题写一篇80词左右的文章。解题思路：首先明确文章结构，开头直接点题说明学校有校规且不能违反；中间分两部分，一是列举必要的校规（如课堂认真听讲、图书馆不吵闹、与同学友好相处），二是提出对校服的看法及合理建议；结尾呼应观点，说明建议的好处。写作时需运用合适的短语和句式，保证逻辑连贯，符合字数要求。
【解析】
写作步骤：
1. 开头：直接点明主题，表述为“We have a lot of school rules at our school and we can't break any of them.”；
2. 中间：用For example引出必要校规，如“we must listen carefully in class, mustn't make noise in the library, and we have to be friendly to get along well with classmates.”；接着提出对校服的看法及建议，表述为“But all of us think our school uniforms are ugly. I think if we have to wear uniforms, we can design our own uniforms to keep both teachers and students happy.”；
3. 检查调整语句，确保流畅，符合80词左右的要求。
【答案】
My school rules
We have a lot of school rules at our school and we can't break any of them.
Some rules are quite necessary. For example, we must listen carefully in class, mustn't make noise in the library, and we have to be friendly to get along well with classmates. But all of us think our school uniforms are ugly. I think if we have to wear uniforms, we can design our own uniforms to keep both teachers and students happy.
【知识点】
英语命题作文写作、校规话题表达、if条件状语从句
【点评】
本文结构清晰，层次分明，开头点题明确，中间列举校规并提出合理建议，结尾呼应主题，运用了For example、both...and...等短语及if引导的条件状语从句，语言流畅，符合写作要求，是一篇优秀的命题作文范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
[名言警句]
Everyone is expected to stick to the rules.
每个人都要遵守规则。
写作演练＞＞
安全对于每个人都很重要。中学生年龄较小，学生安全更是人们关注的焦点。请根据以下提示，写一篇80～100词的作文。
内容提示:1. 交通安全:遵守交通规则,不闯红灯……2. 食品安全:吃健康食物……3. 活动安全:不私自游泳……
[思路点拨]
1. 时态:以一般现在时为主。2. 人称:以第一人称为主。3. 写作时,先总述安全对每个人都很重要,再结合内容提示,介绍中学生在交通安全、食品安全、活动安全方面应该怎么做，最后总结全文。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
(更多精彩作文素材见“强基手册”)
Everyone is expected to stick to the rules.
每个人都要遵守规则。
写作演练＞＞
安全对于每个人都很重要。中学生年龄较小，学生安全更是人们关注的焦点。请根据以下提示，写一篇80～100词的作文。
内容提示:1. 交通安全:遵守交通规则,不闯红灯……2. 食品安全:吃健康食物……3. 活动安全:不私自游泳……
[思路点拨]
1. 时态:以一般现在时为主。2. 人称:以第一人称为主。3. 写作时,先总述安全对每个人都很重要,再结合内容提示,介绍中学生在交通安全、食品安全、活动安全方面应该怎么做，最后总结全文。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
Safety is very important to everyone. Middle school students are flowers of our country, so students' safety is becoming the focus to us all.
First, we must obey the traffic rules when we are out.
We can't cross the street when the traffic light is red. And we must keep to the right in the street.
Second, we should eat healthy food. We had better not eat junk food.
We should eat more fruits and vegetables and less meat.
Besides, we should be careful while we are playing. It's dangerous to swim in the river alone, so we can't go to the river without permission.
In a word, it's important to remember these for us all.
(更多精彩作文素材见“强基手册”)
答案
One possible version:
Safety is very important to everyone. Middle school students are flowers of our country, so students' safety is becoming the focus to us all.
First, we must obey the traffic rules when we are out. We can't cross the street when the traffic light is red. And we must keep to the right in the street.
Second, we should eat healthy food. We had better not eat junk food. We should eat more fruits and vegetables and less meat. Besides, we should be careful while we are playing. It's dangerous to swim in the river alone, so we can't go to the river without permission.
In a word, it's important to remember these for us all.
Safety is very important to everyone. Middle school students are flowers of our country, so students' safety is becoming the focus to us all.
First, we must obey the traffic rules when we are out. We can't cross the street when the traffic light is red. And we must keep to the right in the street.
Second, we should eat healthy food. We had better not eat junk food. We should eat more fruits and vegetables and less meat. Besides, we should be careful while we are playing. It's dangerous to swim in the river alone, so we can't go to the river without permission.
In a word, it's important to remember these for us all.
解析
【分析】首先明确写作主题为安全，需遵循“总-分-总”结构：第一步总起，点明安全对每个人（尤其是中学生）的重要性；第二步分述，从交通安全（遵守规则、不闯红灯）、食品安全（吃健康食物）、活动安全（不私自游泳）三个方面展开，用衔接词使条理清晰；第三步总结，再次强调安全要点的重要性。写作时以一般现在时为主，第一人称，控制字数在80-100词左右，覆盖所有提示内容。
【解析】1. 开头：直接点题“Safety is very important to everyone”，结合中学生身份说明学生安全是关注焦点；2. 分条论述：First部分写交通安全，具体说明遵守交通规则、不闯红灯、靠右行；Second部分写食品安全，说明吃健康食物、少吃垃圾食品；Besides部分写活动安全，说明不私自下河游泳；3. 结尾：用“In a word”总结，呼应开头，强调记住安全要点的重要性。
【答案】One possible version:
Safety is very important to everyone. Middle school students are flowers of our country, so students' safety is becoming the focus to us all.
First, we must obey the traffic rules when we are out. We can't cross the street when the traffic light is red. And we must keep to the right in the street.
Second, we should eat healthy food. We had better not eat junk food. We should eat more fruits and vegetables and less meat. Besides, we should be careful while we are playing. It's dangerous to swim in the river alone, so we can't go to the river without permission.
In a word, it's important to remember these for us all.
【知识点】英语应用文写作、一般现在时运用、常用衔接词
【点评】本文结构清晰，严格遵循“总-分-总”的写作结构，覆盖了所有安全相关的提示内容，语言简洁准确，符合初中英语写作要求，是一篇符合标准的范文。
【难度系数】0.4
【解析】1. 开头：直接点题“Safety is very important to everyone”，结合中学生身份说明学生安全是关注焦点；2. 分条论述：First部分写交通安全，具体说明遵守交通规则、不闯红灯、靠右行；Second部分写食品安全，说明吃健康食物、少吃垃圾食品；Besides部分写活动安全，说明不私自下河游泳；3. 结尾：用“In a word”总结，呼应开头，强调记住安全要点的重要性。
【答案】One possible version:
Safety is very important to everyone. Middle school students are flowers of our country, so students' safety is becoming the focus to us all.
First, we must obey the traffic rules when we are out. We can't cross the street when the traffic light is red. And we must keep to the right in the street.
Second, we should eat healthy food. We had better not eat junk food. We should eat more fruits and vegetables and less meat. Besides, we should be careful while we are playing. It's dangerous to swim in the river alone, so we can't go to the river without permission.
In a word, it's important to remember these for us all.
【知识点】英语应用文写作、一般现在时运用、常用衔接词
【点评】本文结构清晰，严格遵循“总-分-总”的写作结构，覆盖了所有安全相关的提示内容，语言简洁准确，符合初中英语写作要求，是一篇符合标准的范文。
【难度系数】0.4
