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九、2025·南京金陵中学河西分校期末书面表达15分
同学们,大自然的奇妙地貌和户外探索总能给我们带来惊喜!请以“A Wonderful Day in Nature”为题,分享一次你在大自然中难忘的户外活动的经历。
内容须包含以下要点:1. 描述户外地貌特点,如山川、湖泊、森林、海滩等;2. 记录户外活动的过程,如爬山、野餐、骑行等;3. 分享个人心情和感受。
注意:1. 语句通顺,条理清晰,适当发挥,书写规范;2. 词数90左右开头已给出,不计入总词数;3. 文中不得出现真实姓名、校名等信息。
A Wonderful Day in Nature
Outdoor activities are the best ways to enjoy the natural beauty.
同学们,大自然的奇妙地貌和户外探索总能给我们带来惊喜!请以“A Wonderful Day in Nature”为题,分享一次你在大自然中难忘的户外活动的经历。
内容须包含以下要点:1. 描述户外地貌特点,如山川、湖泊、森林、海滩等;2. 记录户外活动的过程,如爬山、野餐、骑行等;3. 分享个人心情和感受。
注意:1. 语句通顺,条理清晰,适当发挥,书写规范;2. 词数90左右开头已给出,不计入总词数;3. 文中不得出现真实姓名、校名等信息。
A Wonderful Day in Nature
Outdoor activities are the best ways to enjoy the natural beauty.
Last spring, my classmates and I visited a lovely forest park near our town. We were greeted by tall trees standing like giant umbrellas and a small lake sparkling like diamonds under the gentle sun.
We spent the morning hiking up a zigzag path, chatting and laughing all the way. Though we felt tired, reaching the top offered a breathtaking view that instantly refreshed us.
Later, we had a simple picnic lunch by the quiet lake, shared sandwiches, and listened to the cheerful birds singing overhead.
This day filled my heart with calm and happiness. It truly became an unforgettable memory that deepened my love for nature's quiet magic.
答案
九、One possible version:
A Wonderful Day in Nature
Outdoor activities are the best ways to enjoy the natural beauty. Last spring, my classmates and I visited a lovely forest park near our town. We were greeted by tall trees standing like giant umbrellas and a small lake sparkling like diamonds under the gentle sun.
We spent the morning hiking up a zigzag path, chatting and laughing all the way. Though we felt tired, reaching the top offered a breathtaking view that instantly refreshed us. Later, we had a simple picnic lunch by the quiet lake, shared sandwiches, and listened to the cheerful birds singing overhead.
This day filled my heart with calm and happiness. It truly became an unforgettable memory that deepened my love for nature's quiet magic.
→现在分词作伴随状语
思路引导 [总体分析]
①题材:本文是一篇材料作文。②时态:时态主要为"一般过去时"。③提示:写作要点已给出,内容应包含地貌特点、活动过程和感受,适当增加细节,并突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步,表明写作意图,开篇点明户外活动是享受自然之美的最佳方式;第二步,具体阐述写作内容,描述森林公园的地貌特点树木、湖泊、活动过程爬山、野餐以及心情感受;第三步,书写结语,总结这次经历的意义,表达对大自然的热爱。
[亮点词汇]
①be greeted by...被……迎接 ②sparkling like diamonds像钻石般闪烁 ③zigzag path蜿蜒的小路 ④breathtaking view令人惊叹的景色 ⑤fill my heart with...使我的内心充满……
[高分句型]
①We were greeted by tall trees standing like giant umbrellas and a small lake sparkling like diamonds under the gentle sun.比喻修辞:like giant umbrellas, like diamonds
②Though we felt tired, reaching the top offered a breathtaking view that instantly refreshed us.though引导让步状语从句;that引导定语从句
A Wonderful Day in Nature
Outdoor activities are the best ways to enjoy the natural beauty. Last spring, my classmates and I visited a lovely forest park near our town. We were greeted by tall trees standing like giant umbrellas and a small lake sparkling like diamonds under the gentle sun.
We spent the morning hiking up a zigzag path, chatting and laughing all the way. Though we felt tired, reaching the top offered a breathtaking view that instantly refreshed us. Later, we had a simple picnic lunch by the quiet lake, shared sandwiches, and listened to the cheerful birds singing overhead.
This day filled my heart with calm and happiness. It truly became an unforgettable memory that deepened my love for nature's quiet magic.
→现在分词作伴随状语
思路引导 [总体分析]
①题材:本文是一篇材料作文。②时态:时态主要为"一般过去时"。③提示:写作要点已给出,内容应包含地貌特点、活动过程和感受,适当增加细节,并突出写作重点。
[写作步骤]
第一步,表明写作意图,开篇点明户外活动是享受自然之美的最佳方式;第二步,具体阐述写作内容,描述森林公园的地貌特点树木、湖泊、活动过程爬山、野餐以及心情感受;第三步,书写结语,总结这次经历的意义,表达对大自然的热爱。
[亮点词汇]
①be greeted by...被……迎接 ②sparkling like diamonds像钻石般闪烁 ③zigzag path蜿蜒的小路 ④breathtaking view令人惊叹的景色 ⑤fill my heart with...使我的内心充满……
[高分句型]
①We were greeted by tall trees standing like giant umbrellas and a small lake sparkling like diamonds under the gentle sun.比喻修辞:like giant umbrellas, like diamonds
②Though we felt tired, reaching the top offered a breathtaking view that instantly refreshed us.though引导让步状语从句;that引导定语从句
解析
【分析】
本题为英语材料类书面表达题，要求以“A Wonderful Day in Nature”为题分享户外自然活动经历。解题思路需紧扣三个核心要点：一是描述自然地貌（如森林、湖泊等），二是记录活动过程（如爬山、野餐等），三是表达个人心情感受；同时需注意时态用一般过去时（讲述过去经历），衔接给定开头句，词数控制在90左右，避免真实信息，适当运用亮点词汇和句式提升作文质量。
【解析】
写作遵循三步法：第一步，承接开头句，点明具体经历（去年春天和同学去森林公园），描述地貌特点（高大树木、闪烁湖泊）；第二步，详细写活动过程（上午爬山、途中聊天、登顶观景、湖边野餐）；第三步，总结心情感受，表达对自然的热爱。需统一使用一般过去时，覆盖所有要求要点，运用比喻、从句等句式增强文章生动性。
【答案】
A Wonderful Day in Nature
Outdoor activities are the best ways to enjoy the natural beauty. Last spring, my classmates and I visited a lovely forest park near our town. We were greeted by tall trees standing like giant umbrellas and a small lake sparkling like diamonds under the gentle sun.
We spent the morning hiking up a zigzag path, chatting and laughing all the way. Though we felt tired, reaching the top offered a breathtaking view that instantly refreshed us. Later, we had a simple picnic lunch by the quiet lake, shared sandwiches, and listened to the cheerful birds singing overhead.
This day filled my heart with calm and happiness. It truly became an unforgettable memory that deepened my love for nature's quiet magic.
【知识点】
英语书面表达、一般过去时、要点式写作
【点评】
本文严格围绕题目要求，覆盖地貌描述、活动过程、心情感受三个核心要点，时态运用准确，语言生动，运用了比喻修辞、让步状语从句、定语从句等句式，结构清晰衔接自然，符合词数要求，是一篇优秀的书面表达范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
本题为英语材料类书面表达题，要求以“A Wonderful Day in Nature”为题分享户外自然活动经历。解题思路需紧扣三个核心要点：一是描述自然地貌（如森林、湖泊等），二是记录活动过程（如爬山、野餐等），三是表达个人心情感受；同时需注意时态用一般过去时（讲述过去经历），衔接给定开头句，词数控制在90左右，避免真实信息，适当运用亮点词汇和句式提升作文质量。
【解析】
写作遵循三步法：第一步，承接开头句，点明具体经历（去年春天和同学去森林公园），描述地貌特点（高大树木、闪烁湖泊）；第二步，详细写活动过程（上午爬山、途中聊天、登顶观景、湖边野餐）；第三步，总结心情感受，表达对自然的热爱。需统一使用一般过去时，覆盖所有要求要点，运用比喻、从句等句式增强文章生动性。
【答案】
A Wonderful Day in Nature
Outdoor activities are the best ways to enjoy the natural beauty. Last spring, my classmates and I visited a lovely forest park near our town. We were greeted by tall trees standing like giant umbrellas and a small lake sparkling like diamonds under the gentle sun.
We spent the morning hiking up a zigzag path, chatting and laughing all the way. Though we felt tired, reaching the top offered a breathtaking view that instantly refreshed us. Later, we had a simple picnic lunch by the quiet lake, shared sandwiches, and listened to the cheerful birds singing overhead.
This day filled my heart with calm and happiness. It truly became an unforgettable memory that deepened my love for nature's quiet magic.
【知识点】
英语书面表达、一般过去时、要点式写作
【点评】
本文严格围绕题目要求，覆盖地貌描述、活动过程、心情感受三个核心要点，时态运用准确，语言生动，运用了比喻修辞、让步状语从句、定语从句等句式，结构清晰衔接自然，符合词数要求，是一篇优秀的书面表达范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
