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[2025 镇江改编]为了给学生营造更好的成长环境，你校通过校报英文专栏向初三学生征集学校改善场地、筹划活动等方面的建议。请写一篇短文投稿。
要求:1. 记录至少一次你在某场地的活动经历和感受，并提出建议，可适当发挥；
2. 文章不少于90词，开头已给出(画直线部分)，不计入总词数。
[高分范文]
During the past three years' school life, I have had so many good memories. I remember that our science class had a robot-making activity in the school lab last term. We shared a few old tools and had no extra parts, but we cheered loudly when our robot moved a little.
It was a great time that made me love science more. ①
[名师点评]
文章开头直接切入主题，以校园科学课的经历引出建议，文章要点全面、条理清晰，灵活运用了所学单词和短语，如 suggestion、improve our school life 等，充分展
(续表)
To make our school better, I have two small suggestions. ②
First③, I hope the school can buy more new tools and spare parts for the lab. Then more students can try making things by themselves.
Second③, we can have a science show every month. This will make our school life more interesting and help us practice our hands-on skills.
I really hope my suggestions will be helpful in improving our school life.
现了作者活学活用的能力。
① 该句运用了定语从句结构，抒发了真实的活动感受。
② 直接说明自己有两条建议，起到了承上启下的关键作用。
③ 文中恰当使用了 First、Second 等连接词，让建议的呈现更具条理性。
[2025 镇江改编]为了给学生营造更好的成长环境，你校通过校报英文专栏向初三学生征集学校改善场地、筹划活动等方面的建议。请写一篇短文投稿。
要求:1. 记录至少一次你在某场地的活动经历和感受，并提出建议，可适当发挥；
2. 文章不少于90词，开头已给出(画直线部分)，不计入总词数。
[高分范文]
During the past three years' school life, I have had so many good memories. I remember that our science class had a robot-making activity in the school lab last term. We shared a few old tools and had no extra parts, but we cheered loudly when our robot moved a little.
It was a great time that made me love science more. ①
[名师点评]
文章开头直接切入主题，以校园科学课的经历引出建议，文章要点全面、条理清晰，灵活运用了所学单词和短语，如 suggestion、improve our school life 等，充分展
(续表)
To make our school better, I have two small suggestions. ②
First③, I hope the school can buy more new tools and spare parts for the lab. Then more students can try making things by themselves.
Second③, we can have a science show every month. This will make our school life more interesting and help us practice our hands-on skills.
I really hope my suggestions will be helpful in improving our school life.
现了作者活学活用的能力。
① 该句运用了定语从句结构，抒发了真实的活动感受。
② 直接说明自己有两条建议，起到了承上启下的关键作用。
③ 文中恰当使用了 First、Second 等连接词，让建议的呈现更具条理性。
答案
During the past three years' school life, I have had so many good memories. I remember that our science class had a robot-making activity in the school lab last term. We shared a few old tools and had no extra parts, but we cheered loudly when our robot moved a little.
It was a great time that made me love science more.
To make our school better, I have two small suggestions.
First, I hope the school can buy more new tools and spare parts for the lab. Then more students can try making things by themselves.
Second, we can have a science show every month. This will make our school life more interesting and help us practice our hands-on skills.
I really hope my suggestions will be helpful in improving our school life.
It was a great time that made me love science more.
To make our school better, I have two small suggestions.
First, I hope the school can buy more new tools and spare parts for the lab. Then more students can try making things by themselves.
Second, we can have a science show every month. This will make our school life more interesting and help us practice our hands-on skills.
I really hope my suggestions will be helpful in improving our school life.
解析
【分析】本题为英语应用文写作题，要求围绕校园场地改善、活动筹划提建议，需结合个人校园活动经历。解题思路：1. 承接给定开头，具体描述在学校实验室参与机器人制作的活动经历，抒发真实感受；2. 用First、Second等连接词，条理清晰地提出2条贴合主题的合理建议，并说明建议的益处；3. 确保文章结构完整、词数达标，语言符合初三英语水平。
【解析】写作步骤：① 承接给定开头，详细叙述学校实验室的机器人制作活动：提到使用旧工具、缺少额外零件，但机器人微动时的喜悦，抒发对科学的热爱；② 用“To make our school better, I have two small suggestions.”承上启下，引出建议；③ 用First提出实验室添置新工具和备用零件的建议，说明能让更多学生动手实践；④ 用Second提出每月举办科学展的建议，说明能丰富校园生活、锻炼动手能力；⑤ 收尾表达对建议的期望，完成全文。
【答案】During the past three years' school life, I have had so many good memories. I remember that our science class had a robot-making activity in the school lab last term. We shared a few old tools and had no extra parts, but we cheered loudly when our robot moved a little.
It was a great time that made me love science more.
To make our school better, I have two small suggestions.
First, I hope the school can buy more new tools and spare parts for the lab. Then more students can try making things by themselves.
Second, we can have a science show every month. This will make our school life more interesting and help us practice our hands-on skills.
I really hope my suggestions will be helpful in improving our school life.
【知识点】英语应用文写作，校园话题表达，定语从句运用
【点评】范文紧扣题目要求，以真实的校园实验室活动引出建议，结构清晰，逻辑连贯，灵活运用所学连接词和句式，语言符合初三水平，要点全面，是符合要求的优秀习作。
【难度系数】0.5
【解析】写作步骤：① 承接给定开头，详细叙述学校实验室的机器人制作活动：提到使用旧工具、缺少额外零件，但机器人微动时的喜悦，抒发对科学的热爱；② 用“To make our school better, I have two small suggestions.”承上启下，引出建议；③ 用First提出实验室添置新工具和备用零件的建议，说明能让更多学生动手实践；④ 用Second提出每月举办科学展的建议，说明能丰富校园生活、锻炼动手能力；⑤ 收尾表达对建议的期望，完成全文。
【答案】During the past three years' school life, I have had so many good memories. I remember that our science class had a robot-making activity in the school lab last term. We shared a few old tools and had no extra parts, but we cheered loudly when our robot moved a little.
It was a great time that made me love science more.
To make our school better, I have two small suggestions.
First, I hope the school can buy more new tools and spare parts for the lab. Then more students can try making things by themselves.
Second, we can have a science show every month. This will make our school life more interesting and help us practice our hands-on skills.
I really hope my suggestions will be helpful in improving our school life.
【知识点】英语应用文写作，校园话题表达，定语从句运用
【点评】范文紧扣题目要求，以真实的校园实验室活动引出建议，结构清晰，逻辑连贯，灵活运用所学连接词和句式，语言符合初三水平，要点全面，是符合要求的优秀习作。
【难度系数】0.5
