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假如你是亚敏，上周你和父母一起去云南大理旅游。请根据下列提示及要求，给你的笔友Linda写一封电子邮件，介绍你的大理之行。
要求：词数80~100。
Dear Linda,
How is everything going? I'm writing to tell you about my trip to Dali.
Yours,
Yamin
[审题指导]
1. 体裁：应用文 2.话题：旅游经历
3.人称：以第一人称为主
4.时态：以一般过去时为主
[思路构建]
[精彩范文]
Dear Linda,
How is everything going? I'm writing to tell you about my trip to Dali.
Last week, my parents and I went on a trip to Dali, Yunnan. On the first day, we visited Dali Ancient City. It is a very famous city with a long history in China. The next morning we went to Cangshan Mountain and the Erhai Lake by bus. The Erhai Lake looks like an ear. How amazing it is! We took quite a few photos there. In the afternoon, we tried Dali Spicy and Sour Fish. It tasted really good! After that, we took a plane to our city. Though we felt tired, we would never forget the trip. What a wonderful trip!
Did you go anywhere interesting? I'm looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Yamin
there. In the afternoon, we tried Dali Spicy and Sour Fish. It tasted really good! After that, we took a plane to our city. Though we felt tired, we would never forget the trip. What a wonderful trip!
Did you go anywhere interesting? I'm looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Yamin
高分点评：1.思路清晰，采用“总—分—总”三段式结构。 2. go on a trip to, look like, quite a few, look forward to等短语的正确运用，展示了作者扎实的基本功。 3.文中though引导的让步状语从句以及感叹句的正确运用成为文章的加分点。
12 英语 八上R
假如你是亚敏，上周你和父母一起去云南大理旅游。请根据下列提示及要求，给你的笔友Linda写一封电子邮件，介绍你的大理之行。
要求：词数80~100。
Dear Linda,
How is everything going? I'm writing to tell you about my trip to Dali.
Yours,
Yamin
[审题指导]
1. 体裁：应用文 2.话题：旅游经历
3.人称：以第一人称为主
4.时态：以一般过去时为主
[思路构建]
[精彩范文]
Dear Linda,
How is everything going? I'm writing to tell you about my trip to Dali.
Last week, my parents and I went on a trip to Dali, Yunnan. On the first day, we visited Dali Ancient City. It is a very famous city with a long history in China. The next morning we went to Cangshan Mountain and the Erhai Lake by bus. The Erhai Lake looks like an ear. How amazing it is! We took quite a few photos there. In the afternoon, we tried Dali Spicy and Sour Fish. It tasted really good! After that, we took a plane to our city. Though we felt tired, we would never forget the trip. What a wonderful trip!
Did you go anywhere interesting? I'm looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Yamin
there. In the afternoon, we tried Dali Spicy and Sour Fish. It tasted really good! After that, we took a plane to our city. Though we felt tired, we would never forget the trip. What a wonderful trip!
Did you go anywhere interesting? I'm looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Yamin
高分点评：1.思路清晰，采用“总—分—总”三段式结构。 2. go on a trip to, look like, quite a few, look forward to等短语的正确运用，展示了作者扎实的基本功。 3.文中though引导的让步状语从句以及感叹句的正确运用成为文章的加分点。
12 英语 八上R
答案
Last week, my parents and I went on a trip to Dali, Yunnan. On the first day, we visited Dali Ancient City. It is a very famous old city with a long history in China.
On the second day, we climbed Cangshan Mountain and traveled around Erhai Lake in the morning. The lake looks like an ear, it is so amazing! In the afternoon, we tasted Dali spicy and sour fish, it tasted really delicious. Then we took the plane back home. Though we felt a little tired, we had a fantastic time. What a wonderful trip! I'm looking forward to your reply.
On the second day, we climbed Cangshan Mountain and traveled around Erhai Lake in the morning. The lake looks like an ear, it is so amazing! In the afternoon, we tasted Dali spicy and sour fish, it tasted really delicious. Then we took the plane back home. Though we felt a little tired, we had a fantastic time. What a wonderful trip! I'm looking forward to your reply.
解析
本题是人教版八年级上册的旅行话题应用文写作，要求完成一封介绍大理之行的电子邮件：1. 体裁为给笔友的邮件，以第一人称为主，核心时态为一般过去时；2. 写作需要覆盖全部提示要点：第一天游览历史悠久的大理古城、第二天上午爬苍山游洱海、下午品尝特色美食后乘飞机返程，最后补充旅行感受，词数控制在80~100，可灵活运用本单元所学的go on a trip、look like、quite a few等短语，搭配感叹句、让步状语从句提升作文亮点，保证逻辑通顺、要点齐全。
实战演练
安徽人文信息题假如你和你父母4月5日在巢湖观光，请根据以下图示用英语写一篇日记，把你们的经历记录下来与大家分享。
提示词: peony 牡丹, local 当地的
要求: 词数 80~100(开头已给出,不计入总词数)。
Sunday, April 5th
It was a nice spring day today. I went to Chaohu on vacation with my parents.
安徽人文信息题假如你和你父母4月5日在巢湖观光，请根据以下图示用英语写一篇日记，把你们的经历记录下来与大家分享。
提示词: peony 牡丹, local 当地的
要求: 词数 80~100(开头已给出,不计入总词数)。
Sunday, April 5th
It was a nice spring day today. I went to Chaohu on vacation with my parents.
We took a train and arrived in Chaohu at 7:30 in the morning.
First we went to the Chaohu Lake. We took a boat on the lake and enjoyed the beauty of the lake. It was wonderful.
Then we went to Yinping Mountain. We watched Yinping Peony. More than 20 peony flowers came out this year.
At about 12:00, we had some local snacks for lunch on Ear Street. They were really delicious!
After lunch I bought gifts for my grandparents.
In the afternoon, we visited Zhang Zhizhong’s Old House. I learned a lot from it.
All in all, the trip was very interesting and I had a great day today.
答案
We took a train and arrived in Chaohu at 7:30 in the morning.
First we went to the Chaohu Lake. We took a boat on the lake and enjoyed the beauty of the lake. It was wonderful. Then we went to Yinping Mountain. We watched Yinping Peony. More than 20 peony flowers came out this year. At about 12:00, we had some local snacks for lunch on Ear Street. They were really delicious! After lunch I bought gifts for my grandparents. In the afternoon, we visited Zhang Zhizhong’s Old House. I learned a lot from it.
All in all, the trip was very interesting and I had a great day today.
【思路分析】这是一篇日记。首段写坐火车去了巢湖游玩，接着写游玩的过程，最后写作者的感受。
First we went to the Chaohu Lake. We took a boat on the lake and enjoyed the beauty of the lake. It was wonderful. Then we went to Yinping Mountain. We watched Yinping Peony. More than 20 peony flowers came out this year. At about 12:00, we had some local snacks for lunch on Ear Street. They were really delicious! After lunch I bought gifts for my grandparents. In the afternoon, we visited Zhang Zhizhong’s Old House. I learned a lot from it.
All in all, the trip was very interesting and I had a great day today.
【思路分析】这是一篇日记。首段写坐火车去了巢湖游玩，接着写游玩的过程，最后写作者的感受。
