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假如你是李华，你英国的笔友 Mike 给你发电子邮件想了解你们学校的设施情况。请你根据下面的示意图，写一封电子邮件，告诉他你的学校主要设施的位置。80 词左右。
[高分范文]
Dear Mike,
Thanks for your email. To answer your question, my school is great! There are many great modern buildings in our school. ¹
The school gate is in the front of my school. ² There is a garden in the middle of the school yard. Some beautiful flowers are in it. The art building is on the right of the garden and the science building is on its left. ³ The classroom building is behind the gard
There are 30 classrooms in it. My classroom is on the third floor. There's a large sports field next to the art building. All the students go there and do exercises together in the morning. ⁴
I love my school and it's a good place for us to learn. ⁵
How about your school?
Yours,
Li Hua
[名师点评]
① 恰当使用 there be 句型，引出下文要介绍的学校设施。
② 使用 in the front of 介绍了学校大门的位置。
③ 准确使用并列句，介绍了艺术楼和科学楼的位置。
④ 用简洁的语言写出了学生们在操场上的活动。
⑤ 表达了作者对学校的喜爱之情。
假如你是李华，你英国的笔友 Mike 给你发电子邮件想了解你们学校的设施情况。请你根据下面的示意图，写一封电子邮件，告诉他你的学校主要设施的位置。80 词左右。
[高分范文]
Dear Mike,
Thanks for your email. To answer your question, my school is great! There are many great modern buildings in our school. ¹
The school gate is in the front of my school. ² There is a garden in the middle of the school yard. Some beautiful flowers are in it. The art building is on the right of the garden and the science building is on its left. ³ The classroom building is behind the gard
There are 30 classrooms in it. My classroom is on the third floor. There's a large sports field next to the art building. All the students go there and do exercises together in the morning. ⁴I love my school and it's a good place for us to learn. ⁵
How about your school?
Yours,
Li Hua
[名师点评]
① 恰当使用 there be 句型，引出下文要介绍的学校设施。
② 使用 in the front of 介绍了学校大门的位置。
③ 准确使用并列句，介绍了艺术楼和科学楼的位置。
④ 用简洁的语言写出了学生们在操场上的活动。
⑤ 表达了作者对学校的喜爱之情。
答案
Dear Mike,
Thanks for your email. To answer your question, my school is great! There are many great modern buildings in our school.
The school gate is in the front of my school. There is a garden in the middle of the school yard. Some beautiful flowers are in it. The art building is on the right of the garden and the science building is on its left. The classroom building is behind the garden. There are 30 classrooms in it. My classroom is on the third floor. There's a large sports field next to the art building. All the students go there and do exercises together in the morning.
I love my school and it's a good place for us to learn.
How about your school?
Yours,
Li Hua
Thanks for your email. To answer your question, my school is great! There are many great modern buildings in our school.
The school gate is in the front of my school. There is a garden in the middle of the school yard. Some beautiful flowers are in it. The art building is on the right of the garden and the science building is on its left. The classroom building is behind the garden. There are 30 classrooms in it. My classroom is on the third floor. There's a large sports field next to the art building. All the students go there and do exercises together in the morning.
I love my school and it's a good place for us to learn.
How about your school?
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】首先明确写作任务：以李华的身份给英国笔友Mike写邮件，介绍学校主要设施的位置，词数80左右，需遵循英文书信格式。解题思路：1. 开头礼貌问候并回应对方的问题，引出介绍学校的内容；2. 按方位顺序介绍学校设施：大门位置→校园中间的花园→花园左右的艺术楼和科学楼→花园后方的教学楼→艺术楼旁的操场；3. 结尾表达对学校的喜爱并询问对方学校情况，确保语言简洁、方位表达准确，符合邮件要求。
【解析】按照英文书信格式分三段写作：第一段开头，感谢Mike的邮件，引出介绍学校的内容；第二段运用there be句型和方位介词（in the front of, in the middle of, on the right/left of, behind, next to），按方位依次介绍学校各设施的位置；第三段表达对学校的喜爱，询问对方学校情况，控制词数符合要求。
【答案】Dear Mike,
Thanks for your email. To answer your question, my school is great! There are many great modern buildings in our school.
The school gate is in the front of my school. There is a garden in the middle of the school yard. Some beautiful flowers are in it. The art building is on the right of the garden and the science building is on its left. The classroom building is behind the garden. There are 30 classrooms in it. My classroom is on the third floor. There's a large sports field next to the art building. All the students go there and do exercises together in the morning.
I love my school and it's a good place for us to learn.
How about your school?
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】英语书信写作、方位介词、there be句型
【点评】这篇范文结构清晰，严格遵循英文书信格式，方位表达准确恰当，合理运用there be句型介绍学校设施，语言简洁流畅，情感真挚，符合题目要求，是优秀的应用文写作范例。
【难度系数】0.6
【解析】按照英文书信格式分三段写作：第一段开头，感谢Mike的邮件，引出介绍学校的内容；第二段运用there be句型和方位介词（in the front of, in the middle of, on the right/left of, behind, next to），按方位依次介绍学校各设施的位置；第三段表达对学校的喜爱，询问对方学校情况，控制词数符合要求。
【答案】Dear Mike,
Thanks for your email. To answer your question, my school is great! There are many great modern buildings in our school.
The school gate is in the front of my school. There is a garden in the middle of the school yard. Some beautiful flowers are in it. The art building is on the right of the garden and the science building is on its left. The classroom building is behind the garden. There are 30 classrooms in it. My classroom is on the third floor. There's a large sports field next to the art building. All the students go there and do exercises together in the morning.
I love my school and it's a good place for us to learn.
How about your school?
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】英语书信写作、方位介词、there be句型
【点评】这篇范文结构清晰，严格遵循英文书信格式，方位表达准确恰当，合理运用there be句型介绍学校设施，语言简洁流畅，情感真挚，符合题目要求，是优秀的应用文写作范例。
【难度系数】0.6
素材积累 ＞＞
[开头句]
1. To answer your question, my new school is great! （总体评价）
2. There are many modern buildings. （设施概况）
3. I'd like to tell you about my school. （开篇引入）
[中间句]
1. The dining hall is across from the sports field. （位置布局）
2. It's my favourite place because there are many kinds of food. （表达喜爱）
[结尾句]
1. How about your school? （互动反问）
2. What a nice school! I love my school. （抒发情感）
3. I love my school because it is like my second home. （抒发情感）
[名言警句]
A school is a building which has four walls with tomorrow inside.
学校是一座四面围墙的建筑，里面装着明天。
写作演练 ＞＞
下周英语口语课的主题是“My favourite place at school”，请根据下面提示，写一篇英语短文。
提示：1. What is your favourite place at school? 2. Where is your favourite place at school? 3. How is your favourite place at school? 4. Why is it your favourite place at school?
要求：1. 文章需要包含提示的全部信息；2. 不少于60词。
[思路点拨]
1. 思路：① 重点介绍你在学校最喜爱的地方；② 从位置及喜欢的原因等几个方面着手，让文章层次分明，逻辑性强。2. 时态：一般现在时。3. 人称：以第三人称为主。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
（更多精彩作文素材见“强基手册”）
[开头句]
1. To answer your question, my new school is great! （总体评价）
2. There are many modern buildings. （设施概况）
3. I'd like to tell you about my school. （开篇引入）
[中间句]
1. The dining hall is across from the sports field. （位置布局）
2. It's my favourite place because there are many kinds of food. （表达喜爱）
[结尾句]
1. How about your school? （互动反问）
2. What a nice school! I love my school. （抒发情感）
3. I love my school because it is like my second home. （抒发情感）
[名言警句]
A school is a building which has four walls with tomorrow inside.
学校是一座四面围墙的建筑，里面装着明天。
写作演练 ＞＞
下周英语口语课的主题是“My favourite place at school”，请根据下面提示，写一篇英语短文。
提示：1. What is your favourite place at school? 2. Where is your favourite place at school? 3. How is your favourite place at school? 4. Why is it your favourite place at school?
要求：1. 文章需要包含提示的全部信息；2. 不少于60词。
[思路点拨]
1. 思路：① 重点介绍你在学校最喜爱的地方；② 从位置及喜欢的原因等几个方面着手，让文章层次分明，逻辑性强。2. 时态：一般现在时。3. 人称：以第三人称为主。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
（更多精彩作文素材见“强基手册”）
答案
One possible version:
There are many nice places in our school. My favourite place at school is the school library. It is between the art building and the science building. The school library is a building with two floors. It is a quiet and clean place. Many students like reading there. I love reading too. I often go there after school. It is my favourite place because I can learn a lot there.
There are many nice places in our school. My favourite place at school is the school library. It is between the art building and the science building. The school library is a building with two floors. It is a quiet and clean place. Many students like reading there. I love reading too. I often go there after school. It is my favourite place because I can learn a lot there.
解析
【分析】
本题为英语话题写作题，主题是“My favourite place at school”，需围绕“最喜欢的校园地点”展开写作。解题思路：首先点明最喜欢的校园地点；接着详细介绍该地点的位置、环境及自己常做的事；最后说明喜欢它的原因。写作时需用一般现在时，包含所有提示信息，语句通顺，符合字数要求。
【解析】
写作步骤：
1. 点明主题：直接说明最喜欢的校园地点是学校图书馆；
2. 详细介绍：说明其位置（在艺术楼和科学楼之间）、环境（安静干净），以及自己常去的时间（放学后）；
3. 说明原因：阐述喜欢图书馆是因为能学到很多知识。
需注意时态为一般现在时，人称以第一人称为主，确保内容完整、逻辑清晰。
【答案】
One possible version:
There are many nice places in our school. My favourite place at school is the school library. It is between the art building and the science building. The school library is a building with two floors. It is a quiet and clean place. Many students like reading there. I love reading too. I often go there after school. It is my favourite place because I can learn a lot there.
【知识点】
英语短文写作，一般现在时运用，地点描述
【点评】
本题贴近学生校园生活，话题明确，结构清晰，要求学生围绕提示完成写作，能有效考查学生的英语表达能力，是初中英语常见的基础写作题型。
【难度系数】
0.6
本题为英语话题写作题，主题是“My favourite place at school”，需围绕“最喜欢的校园地点”展开写作。解题思路：首先点明最喜欢的校园地点；接着详细介绍该地点的位置、环境及自己常做的事；最后说明喜欢它的原因。写作时需用一般现在时，包含所有提示信息，语句通顺，符合字数要求。
【解析】
写作步骤：
1. 点明主题：直接说明最喜欢的校园地点是学校图书馆；
2. 详细介绍：说明其位置（在艺术楼和科学楼之间）、环境（安静干净），以及自己常去的时间（放学后）；
3. 说明原因：阐述喜欢图书馆是因为能学到很多知识。
需注意时态为一般现在时，人称以第一人称为主，确保内容完整、逻辑清晰。
【答案】
One possible version:
There are many nice places in our school. My favourite place at school is the school library. It is between the art building and the science building. The school library is a building with two floors. It is a quiet and clean place. Many students like reading there. I love reading too. I often go there after school. It is my favourite place because I can learn a lot there.
【知识点】
英语短文写作，一般现在时运用，地点描述
【点评】
本题贴近学生校园生活，话题明确，结构清晰，要求学生围绕提示完成写作，能有效考查学生的英语表达能力，是初中英语常见的基础写作题型。
【难度系数】
0.6
