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中秋节即将来临，你校拟举办一场英语征文比赛。请你以“The Mid-Autumn Festival”为话题，介绍该节日。词数90左右。
[高分范文]
There are many traditional festivals in China. ¹ The Mid-Autumn Festival is important.
The Mid-Autumn Festival falls on the 15th day of the 8th lunar month. It's a time for family members to get together. ¹ They eat mooncakes, shaped like the full moon ², during that night. They give the best wishes to their relatives who they love and miss. ² Besides ³, they share different kinds of fruits, and stay together to watch the moon.
I love the Mid-Autumn Festival. Because ³ it makes me relaxed during the holiday and ³ feel the warmth of my family.
[名师点评]
短文介绍了中秋节。
① there be结构、“It's + 名词短语+ for sb. + to do sth.”句式的使用体现了作者扎实的写作功底。
② 对分词短语作后置定语和定语从句句式的运用，体现了作者缜密的逻辑思维能力。
③ Besides、Because和and等词的使用，使文章衔接更加顺畅。
中秋节即将来临，你校拟举办一场英语征文比赛。请你以“The Mid-Autumn Festival”为话题，介绍该节日。词数90左右。
[高分范文]
There are many traditional festivals in China. ¹ The Mid-Autumn Festival is important.
The Mid-Autumn Festival falls on the 15th day of the 8th lunar month. It's a time for family members to get together. ¹ They eat mooncakes, shaped like the full moon ², during that night. They give the best wishes to their relatives who they love and miss. ² Besides ³, they share different kinds of fruits, and stay together to watch the moon.
I love the Mid-Autumn Festival. Because ³ it makes me relaxed during the holiday and ³ feel the warmth of my family.
[名师点评]
短文介绍了中秋节。
① there be结构、“It's + 名词短语+ for sb. + to do sth.”句式的使用体现了作者扎实的写作功底。
② 对分词短语作后置定语和定语从句句式的运用，体现了作者缜密的逻辑思维能力。
③ Besides、Because和and等词的使用，使文章衔接更加顺畅。
答案
The Mid-Autumn Festival
There are many traditional festivals in China. The Mid-Autumn Festival is very important to Chinese people.
It falls on the 15th day of the 8th lunar month. It's a time for family members to get together. People eat mooncakes shaped like the full moon at night, and send their best wishes to their beloved relatives. Besides, they share all kinds of fresh fruits, and stay together to watch the bright full moon.
I love the Mid-Autumn Festival, because it lets me feel the warm love of my family.
There are many traditional festivals in China. The Mid-Autumn Festival is very important to Chinese people.
It falls on the 15th day of the 8th lunar month. It's a time for family members to get together. People eat mooncakes shaped like the full moon at night, and send their best wishes to their beloved relatives. Besides, they share all kinds of fresh fruits, and stay together to watch the bright full moon.
I love the Mid-Autumn Festival, because it lets me feel the warm love of my family.
解析
【分析】
本题为英语话题写作题，要求围绕中秋节介绍节日，词数90左右。解题思路：1. 明确写作结构：开头引出中秋节的地位；中间介绍节日时间、核心习俗；结尾表达对节日的情感。2. 运用恰当的英语句式和衔接词，保证内容连贯，符合词数要求，准确传达节日相关信息。
【解析】
本题要求以“The Mid-Autumn Festival”为话题写90词左右的节日介绍短文，写作要点如下：① 开头点明中国传统节日众多，中秋节对中国人的重要性；② 中间说明节日时间（农历八月十五），核心习俗：家人团聚、食用形似满月的月饼、向亲友送祝福、分享水果、赏月；③ 结尾表达对节日的喜爱及原因。需使用合适的衔接词和句式，控制词数，确保内容完整、语句通顺。
【答案】
The Mid-Autumn Festival
There are many traditional festivals in China. The Mid-Autumn Festival is very important to Chinese people.
It falls on the 15th day of the 8th lunar month. It's a time for family members to get together. People eat mooncakes shaped like the full moon at night, and send their best wishes to their beloved relatives. Besides, they share all kinds of fresh fruits, and stay together to watch the bright full moon.
I love the Mid-Autumn Festival, because it lets me feel the warm love of my family.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、节日话题英语表达、英语句式运用
【点评】
该范文紧扣题目要求，清晰介绍了中秋节的时间、核心习俗，结构完整，语句通顺，运用了恰当的衔接词和句式，准确传达了节日的文化内涵，符合英语写作的规范要求，是一篇优秀的节日介绍短文。
【难度系数】
0.4
本题为英语话题写作题，要求围绕中秋节介绍节日，词数90左右。解题思路：1. 明确写作结构：开头引出中秋节的地位；中间介绍节日时间、核心习俗；结尾表达对节日的情感。2. 运用恰当的英语句式和衔接词，保证内容连贯，符合词数要求，准确传达节日相关信息。
【解析】
本题要求以“The Mid-Autumn Festival”为话题写90词左右的节日介绍短文，写作要点如下：① 开头点明中国传统节日众多，中秋节对中国人的重要性；② 中间说明节日时间（农历八月十五），核心习俗：家人团聚、食用形似满月的月饼、向亲友送祝福、分享水果、赏月；③ 结尾表达对节日的喜爱及原因。需使用合适的衔接词和句式，控制词数，确保内容完整、语句通顺。
【答案】
The Mid-Autumn Festival
There are many traditional festivals in China. The Mid-Autumn Festival is very important to Chinese people.
It falls on the 15th day of the 8th lunar month. It's a time for family members to get together. People eat mooncakes shaped like the full moon at night, and send their best wishes to their beloved relatives. Besides, they share all kinds of fresh fruits, and stay together to watch the bright full moon.
I love the Mid-Autumn Festival, because it lets me feel the warm love of my family.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、节日话题英语表达、英语句式运用
【点评】
该范文紧扣题目要求，清晰介绍了中秋节的时间、核心习俗，结构完整，语句通顺，运用了恰当的衔接词和句式，准确传达了节日的文化内涵，符合英语写作的规范要求，是一篇优秀的节日介绍短文。
【难度系数】
0.4
素材积累＞＞
[开头句]
1. Different countries have their own festivals and holidays. （交代背景）
2. As you asked me about the festivals in China, let me introduce some important ones to you. （说明意图）
[中间句]
1. It falls in January or February. （说明时间）
2. Eating zongzi is a must during the festival. （介绍习俗）
[结尾句]
1. Traditional Chinese festivals can not only bring people much fun, but also make them realise the importance of the home and the family. （总结意义）
2. I feel like I am back home. （表达感受）
[名言警句]
1. May many fortunes find their way to you! 祝你财运亨通！
2. No matter where they are, people come home to celebrate the festival with their families. 无论身处何方，人们都要回家和家人共度佳节。
写作演练＞＞
假如你是David,你的笔友John写信向你询问中国的传统节日。请你写一封回信,向他介绍元宵节和春节。
要求:语句连贯,不少于90词。
[思路点拨]
1. 时态:以一般现在时为主;2. 人称:以第三人称为主;3. 写作时:第一部分开篇点题,引出节日;第二部分详细介绍节日时间、意义及庆祝方式;第三部分表达期待。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
(更多精彩作文素材见"强基手册")
[开头句]
1. Different countries have their own festivals and holidays. （交代背景）
2. As you asked me about the festivals in China, let me introduce some important ones to you. （说明意图）
[中间句]
1. It falls in January or February. （说明时间）
2. Eating zongzi is a must during the festival. （介绍习俗）
[结尾句]
1. Traditional Chinese festivals can not only bring people much fun, but also make them realise the importance of the home and the family. （总结意义）
2. I feel like I am back home. （表达感受）
[名言警句]
1. May many fortunes find their way to you! 祝你财运亨通！
2. No matter where they are, people come home to celebrate the festival with their families. 无论身处何方，人们都要回家和家人共度佳节。
写作演练＞＞
假如你是David,你的笔友John写信向你询问中国的传统节日。请你写一封回信,向他介绍元宵节和春节。
要求:语句连贯,不少于90词。
[思路点拨]
1. 时态:以一般现在时为主;2. 人称:以第三人称为主;3. 写作时:第一部分开篇点题,引出节日;第二部分详细介绍节日时间、意义及庆祝方式;第三部分表达期待。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
(更多精彩作文素材见"强基手册")
答案
One possible version:
Dear John,
Glad to receive your letter. As you asked me about the festivals in China, let me introduce some important ones to you.
The Lantern Festival falls on the 15th day of the 1st lunar month. The traditional food of it is yuanxiao. People celebrate the festival to pray for health and happiness for the whole year. During the festival, we watch lantern shows and dragon dances.
The Spring Festival is the most important festival in China. People celebrate it to welcome the beginning of a new year. It usually comes in January or February. All family members will try their best to get home and have a big dinner together. After dinner, they watch the Spring Festival Gala on TV.
Can you tell me something about the festivals in your country? I'm looking forward to hearing from you.
David
Dear John,
Glad to receive your letter. As you asked me about the festivals in China, let me introduce some important ones to you.
The Lantern Festival falls on the 15th day of the 1st lunar month. The traditional food of it is yuanxiao. People celebrate the festival to pray for health and happiness for the whole year. During the festival, we watch lantern shows and dragon dances.
The Spring Festival is the most important festival in China. People celebrate it to welcome the beginning of a new year. It usually comes in January or February. All family members will try their best to get home and have a big dinner together. After dinner, they watch the Spring Festival Gala on TV.
Can you tell me something about the festivals in your country? I'm looking forward to hearing from you.
David
解析
【分析】
本题要求以David的身份给笔友John写回信，介绍中国的元宵节和春节，需遵循书信格式，分三部分写作：第一部分开篇点明回信意图，引出要介绍的节日；第二部分分别详细说明元宵节和春节的时间、庆祝目的及活动；第三部分表达对对方回信的期待。写作时以一般现在时为主，语句连贯，满足不少于90词的要求。
【解析】
1. 书信格式：开头称呼Dear John，结尾署名David；
2. 开篇：用指定语句说明要向John介绍中国的传统节日；
3. 介绍元宵节：说明时间为正月十五，庆祝目的是祈求健康幸福，活动包括看灯展、舞龙；
4. 介绍春节：说明时间在1-2月，庆祝目的是迎接新年，活动包括家人团聚吃年夜饭、看春晚；
5. 结尾：表达期待收到John的回信，确保语句连贯，符合字数要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear John,
Glad to receive your letter. As you asked me about the festivals in China, let me introduce some important ones to you.
The Lantern Festival falls on the 15th day of the 1st lunar month. The traditional food of it is yuanxiao. People celebrate the festival to pray for health and happiness for the whole year. During the festival, we watch lantern shows and dragon dances.
The Spring Festival is the most important festival in China. People celebrate it to welcome the beginning of a new year. It usually comes in January or February. All family members will try their best to get home and have a big dinner together. After dinner, they watch the Spring Festival Gala on TV.
Can you tell me something about the festivals in your country? I'm looking forward to hearing from you.
David
【知识点】
英语书信写作、中国传统节日英语表达、一般现在时
【点评】
本文严格遵循题目要求，结构清晰，内容完整，准确介绍了两个中国传统节日的关键信息，语言通顺，符合书信格式，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】
0.3
本题要求以David的身份给笔友John写回信，介绍中国的元宵节和春节，需遵循书信格式，分三部分写作：第一部分开篇点明回信意图，引出要介绍的节日；第二部分分别详细说明元宵节和春节的时间、庆祝目的及活动；第三部分表达对对方回信的期待。写作时以一般现在时为主，语句连贯，满足不少于90词的要求。
【解析】
1. 书信格式：开头称呼Dear John，结尾署名David；
2. 开篇：用指定语句说明要向John介绍中国的传统节日；
3. 介绍元宵节：说明时间为正月十五，庆祝目的是祈求健康幸福，活动包括看灯展、舞龙；
4. 介绍春节：说明时间在1-2月，庆祝目的是迎接新年，活动包括家人团聚吃年夜饭、看春晚；
5. 结尾：表达期待收到John的回信，确保语句连贯，符合字数要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
Dear John,
Glad to receive your letter. As you asked me about the festivals in China, let me introduce some important ones to you.
The Lantern Festival falls on the 15th day of the 1st lunar month. The traditional food of it is yuanxiao. People celebrate the festival to pray for health and happiness for the whole year. During the festival, we watch lantern shows and dragon dances.
The Spring Festival is the most important festival in China. People celebrate it to welcome the beginning of a new year. It usually comes in January or February. All family members will try their best to get home and have a big dinner together. After dinner, they watch the Spring Festival Gala on TV.
Can you tell me something about the festivals in your country? I'm looking forward to hearing from you.
David
【知识点】
英语书信写作、中国传统节日英语表达、一般现在时
【点评】
本文严格遵循题目要求，结构清晰，内容完整，准确介绍了两个中国传统节日的关键信息，语言通顺，符合书信格式，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】
0.3
