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讲述你为父母或（外）祖父母做的事情
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1 教材原句：Yesterday was 21st October. It was Grandma’s 66th birthday.
仿写：（yesterday, my 11th birthday）
2 教材原句：We went to my grandparents’ house in the morning.
仿写：（took a family photo）
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Happy Double Ninth Festival
Today was ¹the Double Ninth Festival. It was a special day for old people. ¹In the morning, I went to my grandparents’ house with my mum and dad. I ²helped my grandparents clean the rooms and water the flowers. We also ²cooked dinner together in the kitchen. I ²made a thank-you card for them too. Grandpa was very happy and said, ³“You are a good boy!” I love my grandparents very much.
名师点评
①开篇点明节日背景,用时间状语“in the morning”自然引出事件,叙事清晰有条理。
②运用“helped”“cooked”“made”等动词,体现了本单元“为家人做力所能及的事”的主题,一般过去时使用准确。
③以直接引语“You are a good boy!”结束全文,生动呈现爷爷的肯定。
文章结构清晰,语言简洁,时态正确,是一篇符合六年级写作要求的优秀记叙文。
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班级举办“感恩家人,行动起来”主题征文活动,小星积极参与投稿。 假如你是小星,请你根据以下思维导图,写一篇英文短文投稿。
要求:1.包含思维导图中的所有内容,可适当进行想象;
2.使用一般过去时;
3.语句通顺,意思连贯,不少于6句话。

1. Yesterday was 12th April. It was my 11th birthday.
2. We took a family photo in the morning.
参考范文:
Last Saturday was my mum's birthday. It was a wonderful day. In the morning, I made a birthday card for her. I drew some flowers and a big heart on it. In the evening, my dad and I cooked dinner together. We also bought a small cake and some beautiful flowers. After dinner, my sister sang the birthday song.
My mum was very happy and said, “You are all so sweet!” I felt happy too. I love my mum very much.