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朋友可以一起面对困难,一起分享快乐。请你以“My Best Friend”为题写一篇80—100词的英语短文,介绍你最好的朋友。内容包括:
1.你的朋友的外貌和品质;
2.你们是如何成为朋友的;
3.你的朋友是如何帮助你的。
审题指导:
1.体裁:记叙文 2.时态:以一般现在时为主 3.人称:以第一和第三人称为主
写作框架:
12 英语 八年级 上册 译林版
优秀范文:
My Best Friend
I have lots of friends, but Sandy is my best friend.
Sandy is a little bit① taller than me. She has long hair and bright smiling eyes. She is caring and helpful.
I met her at a sports club about four years ago. I didn't do well in② maths before. Sandy was good at maths, so I asked her for help③. She often helped me solve some difficult problems patiently and told me some good ways of studying. We became good friends as time went on④. When something worries me, she always tries to help me. ⑤
I'm lucky to have Sandy as my best friend. I hope we'll be best friends forever.
亮点词块
①a little bit 有点儿
②do well in 擅长
③ask sb. for help 向某人求助
④as time goes on 随着时间的推移
高分句子
⑤When something worries me, she always tries to help me. 每当我有烦心事时,她总是尽力帮助我。(When 引导时间状语从句)
朋友可以一起面对困难,一起分享快乐。请你以“My Best Friend”为题写一篇80—100词的英语短文,介绍你最好的朋友。内容包括:
1.你的朋友的外貌和品质;
2.你们是如何成为朋友的;
3.你的朋友是如何帮助你的。
审题指导:
1.体裁:记叙文 2.时态:以一般现在时为主 3.人称:以第一和第三人称为主
写作框架:
12 英语 八年级 上册 译林版
优秀范文:
My Best Friend
I have lots of friends, but Sandy is my best friend.
Sandy is a little bit① taller than me. She has long hair and bright smiling eyes. She is caring and helpful.
I met her at a sports club about four years ago. I didn't do well in② maths before. Sandy was good at maths, so I asked her for help③. She often helped me solve some difficult problems patiently and told me some good ways of studying. We became good friends as time went on④. When something worries me, she always tries to help me. ⑤
I'm lucky to have Sandy as my best friend. I hope we'll be best friends forever.
亮点词块
①a little bit 有点儿
②do well in 擅长
③ask sb. for help 向某人求助
④as time goes on 随着时间的推移
高分句子
⑤When something worries me, she always tries to help me. 每当我有烦心事时,她总是尽力帮助我。(When 引导时间状语从句)
答案
My Best Friend
I have lots of friends, but Sandy is my best friend.
Sandy is a little bit taller than me. She has long hair and bright smiling eyes. She is caring and helpful.
I met her at a sports club about four years ago. I didn't do well in maths before. Sandy was good at maths, so I asked her for help. She often helped me solve some difficult problems patiently and told me some good ways of studying. We became good friends as time went on. When something worries me, she always tries to help me.
I'm lucky to have Sandy as my best friend. I hope we'll be best friends forever.
I have lots of friends, but Sandy is my best friend.
Sandy is a little bit taller than me. She has long hair and bright smiling eyes. She is caring and helpful.
I met her at a sports club about four years ago. I didn't do well in maths before. Sandy was good at maths, so I asked her for help. She often helped me solve some difficult problems patiently and told me some good ways of studying. We became good friends as time went on. When something worries me, she always tries to help me.
I'm lucky to have Sandy as my best friend. I hope we'll be best friends forever.
解析
【分析】本题要求以“My Best Friend”为题写80-100词的英语记叙文，需紧扣三个核心内容：朋友的外貌与品质、成为朋友的经历、朋友的帮助。写作时需注意：1. 时态以一般现在时为主，结合过去时描述成为朋友的过往；2. 人称用第一人称“我”和第三人称“她（朋友）”；3. 运用给定的亮点词块和高分句型，确保内容完整、结构清晰，符合八年级英语写作要求。
【解析】写作步骤：1. 开头点明最好的朋友是Sandy；2. 描述朋友的外貌（比我高一点，长发、明亮的笑眼）和品质（关心人、乐于助人）；3. 讲述成为朋友的契机：四年前在运动俱乐部相遇，我数学不好向她求助，她耐心帮我解题、讲学习方法，慢慢成为好友；4. 结尾表达拥有这个朋友的幸运，希望永远是好友。严格控制词数，运用指定亮点词块和句型，符合要求。
【答案】My Best Friend
I have lots of friends, but Sandy is my best friend.
Sandy is a little bit taller than me. She has long hair and bright smiling eyes. She is caring and helpful.
I met her at a sports club about four years ago. I didn't do well in maths before. Sandy was good at maths, so I asked her for help. She often helped me solve some difficult problems patiently and told me some good ways of studying. We became good friends as time went on. When something worries me, she always tries to help me.
I'm lucky to have Sandy as my best friend. I hope we'll be best friends forever.
【知识点】英语记叙文写作、英语常用短语运用、英语时间状语从句
【点评】范文紧扣题目要求，结构清晰，内容完整覆盖三个要点，运用指定亮点词块和高分句型，语言符合八年级学生水平，词数恰当，是优秀的英语写作范例。
【难度系数】0.7
【解析】写作步骤：1. 开头点明最好的朋友是Sandy；2. 描述朋友的外貌（比我高一点，长发、明亮的笑眼）和品质（关心人、乐于助人）；3. 讲述成为朋友的契机：四年前在运动俱乐部相遇，我数学不好向她求助，她耐心帮我解题、讲学习方法，慢慢成为好友；4. 结尾表达拥有这个朋友的幸运，希望永远是好友。严格控制词数，运用指定亮点词块和句型，符合要求。
【答案】My Best Friend
I have lots of friends, but Sandy is my best friend.
Sandy is a little bit taller than me. She has long hair and bright smiling eyes. She is caring and helpful.
I met her at a sports club about four years ago. I didn't do well in maths before. Sandy was good at maths, so I asked her for help. She often helped me solve some difficult problems patiently and told me some good ways of studying. We became good friends as time went on. When something worries me, she always tries to help me.
I'm lucky to have Sandy as my best friend. I hope we'll be best friends forever.
【知识点】英语记叙文写作、英语常用短语运用、英语时间状语从句
【点评】范文紧扣题目要求，结构清晰，内容完整覆盖三个要点，运用指定亮点词块和高分句型，语言符合八年级学生水平，词数恰当，是优秀的英语写作范例。
【难度系数】0.7
