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76.英语课上,老师正在组织以“一次校园劳动实践给你带来的体验”为主题的演讲活动。假如你是李华,请根据下表你校上周校园劳动日的信息写一篇短文在班上分享。
要求:(1)文中必须包含图表中所有内容要点,可适当发挥;
(2)不得出现个人真实姓名和校名;
(3)词数80左右,开头已给出,不计入总词数。
Hello, my friends!
I am very happy to share my labour experience with you here. Last week,
要求:(1)文中必须包含图表中所有内容要点,可适当发挥;
(2)不得出现个人真实姓名和校名;
(3)词数80左右,开头已给出,不计入总词数。
Hello, my friends!
I am very happy to share my labour experience with you here. Last week,
our school held a Labour Day. We took part in planting trees. It was really a happy memory.
It was a hot day. We got together and went to the field. We needed to dig some holes and put the trees in, but the trees were too heavy to carry. So I tried to give a hand to my classmates. We worked together and planted trees carefully. Soon, we finished the planting activity.
It was a day full of gains and happiness. Plato once said, "Happiness springs from doing good and helping others." When I received my classmates' thanks, I felt really happy.
It was a hot day. We got together and went to the field. We needed to dig some holes and put the trees in, but the trees were too heavy to carry. So I tried to give a hand to my classmates. We worked together and planted trees carefully. Soon, we finished the planting activity.
It was a day full of gains and happiness. Plato once said, "Happiness springs from doing good and helping others." When I received my classmates' thanks, I felt really happy.
答案
76. One possible version:
Hello, my friends!
I am very happy to share my labour experience with you here. Last week, our school held a Labour Day. We took part in planting trees. It was really a happy memory.
It was a hot day. We got together and went to the field. We needed to dig some holes and put the trees in, but the trees were too heavy to carry. So I tried to give a hand to my classmates. We worked together and planted trees carefully. Soon, we finished the planting activity.
It was a day full of gains and happiness. Plato once said, "Happiness springs from doing good and helping others." When I received my classmates' thanks, I felt really happy.
Hello, my friends!
I am very happy to share my labour experience with you here. Last week, our school held a Labour Day. We took part in planting trees. It was really a happy memory.
It was a hot day. We got together and went to the field. We needed to dig some holes and put the trees in, but the trees were too heavy to carry. So I tried to give a hand to my classmates. We worked together and planted trees carefully. Soon, we finished the planting activity.
It was a day full of gains and happiness. Plato once said, "Happiness springs from doing good and helping others." When I received my classmates' thanks, I felt really happy.
解析
【分析】
本题为英语要点式写作题，主题是分享校园劳动日的体验。解题思路：首先，结合开头句补充上周校园劳动日的活动，选择参考词汇中的“planted trees”对应“做了什么”的要点；其次，补充活动细节体现过程，融入合作内容；最后，表达感受与原因，使用参考词汇“full of gains”，说明感受源于帮助同学、合作完成任务，覆盖所有要求要点，控制词数，避免真实信息。
【解析】
1. 衔接开头：用“Last week, our school held a Labour Day. We took part in planting trees.”点明劳动日的活动，对应“What did you do?”的要点；
2. 补充活动过程：描述种树的细节（天气热、树太重、和同学合作帮忙），体现活动真实性；
3. 表达感受与原因：用“full of gains”说明收获，结合“帮助同学收到感谢”的细节，对应“What's your feeling or opinion?”和“Why do you think so?”的要点；
4. 确保包含所有要求，适当发挥，词数符合80左右要求，无个人真实信息。
【答案】
Hello, my friends!
I am very happy to share my labour experience with you here. Last week, our school held a Labour Day. We took part in planting trees. It was really a happy memory.
It was a hot day. We got together and went to the field. We needed to dig some holes and put the trees in, but the trees were too heavy to carry. So I tried to give a hand to my classmates. We worked together and planted trees carefully. Soon, we finished the planting activity.
It was a day full of gains and happiness. Plato once said, "Happiness springs from doing good and helping others." When I received my classmates' thanks, I felt really happy.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、要点式写作
【点评】
本文紧扣主题，覆盖所有要求要点，细节充实，情感真实自然，语言通顺流畅，适当引用名言提升表达亮点，符合初中英语写作要求，是优秀范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
本题为英语要点式写作题，主题是分享校园劳动日的体验。解题思路：首先，结合开头句补充上周校园劳动日的活动，选择参考词汇中的“planted trees”对应“做了什么”的要点；其次，补充活动细节体现过程，融入合作内容；最后，表达感受与原因，使用参考词汇“full of gains”，说明感受源于帮助同学、合作完成任务，覆盖所有要求要点，控制词数，避免真实信息。
【解析】
1. 衔接开头：用“Last week, our school held a Labour Day. We took part in planting trees.”点明劳动日的活动，对应“What did you do?”的要点；
2. 补充活动过程：描述种树的细节（天气热、树太重、和同学合作帮忙），体现活动真实性；
3. 表达感受与原因：用“full of gains”说明收获，结合“帮助同学收到感谢”的细节，对应“What's your feeling or opinion?”和“Why do you think so?”的要点；
4. 确保包含所有要求，适当发挥，词数符合80左右要求，无个人真实信息。
【答案】
Hello, my friends!
I am very happy to share my labour experience with you here. Last week, our school held a Labour Day. We took part in planting trees. It was really a happy memory.
It was a hot day. We got together and went to the field. We needed to dig some holes and put the trees in, but the trees were too heavy to carry. So I tried to give a hand to my classmates. We worked together and planted trees carefully. Soon, we finished the planting activity.
It was a day full of gains and happiness. Plato once said, "Happiness springs from doing good and helping others." When I received my classmates' thanks, I felt really happy.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、要点式写作
【点评】
本文紧扣主题，覆盖所有要求要点，细节充实，情感真实自然，语言通顺流畅，适当引用名言提升表达亮点，符合初中英语写作要求，是优秀范文。
【难度系数】
0.5
