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七、书面表达
每个人在成长过程中都会遇到烦恼和压力。近日,你校对所有学生进行了一次关于压力来源的调查,调查结果如下。请你以"Learn to smile to stress"为主题写一篇英语短文,概述调查的结果,并针对表中的任意一种压力给出几条合理建议。
Everyone will have trouble or stress in the process of growing up. Recently, our school has carried out a survey to find out why students are stressed. The results are as follows.
每个人在成长过程中都会遇到烦恼和压力。近日,你校对所有学生进行了一次关于压力来源的调查,调查结果如下。请你以"Learn to smile to stress"为主题写一篇英语短文,概述调查的结果,并针对表中的任意一种压力给出几条合理建议。
Everyone will have trouble or stress in the process of growing up. Recently, our school has carried out a survey to find out why students are stressed. The results are as follows.
答案
Everyone will have trouble or stress in the process of growing up. Recently, our school
has carried out a survey to find out why students are stressed. The results are as follows.
5% of the students have trouble dealing with the relationship between teachers and
students. 12% of the students find it difficult to get along with their parents. 51% of the
students have friendship problems. And without doubt, most of the students are stressed
because of study, with the percentage going up to 60%.
I think there're some ways to reduce stress. For example, if you are stressed because
of study, ask your teachers for help. They will offer you some good suggestions on
achieving a balance between your schoolwork and life. You can also wear clothes in green or
yellow to cheer yourself up.
has carried out a survey to find out why students are stressed. The results are as follows.
5% of the students have trouble dealing with the relationship between teachers and
students. 12% of the students find it difficult to get along with their parents. 51% of the
students have friendship problems. And without doubt, most of the students are stressed
because of study, with the percentage going up to 60%.
I think there're some ways to reduce stress. For example, if you are stressed because
of study, ask your teachers for help. They will offer you some good suggestions on
achieving a balance between your schoolwork and life. You can also wear clothes in green or
yellow to cheer yourself up.
解析
【分析】
首先要明确本次书面表达的主题是“Learn to smile to stress”，任务分为两部分：一是准确概述调查结果，二是针对其中一种压力给出合理建议。
1. 审题阶段：先抓住图表中的核心数据，明确四个压力来源的占比，要注意数据表述的准确性和逻辑性，可选择从占比低到高的顺序介绍，让内容条理清晰。
2. 内容组织：承接题目给出的开头，先完整呈现调查数据，将每个压力来源的占比和对应的问题清晰说明；然后选择一个熟悉的压力类型，比如占比最高的学习压力，给出具体、可行的建议，建议要贴合学生实际，具有可操作性。
3. 语言表达：使用符合英语书面表达的句型，比如描述数据的“...% of the students...”，提出建议的“if you..., you can...”等，保证语句通顺，语法正确。
【解析】
1. 调查结果表述：按照占比从低到高的顺序，依次阐述师生关系（5%）、亲子关系（12%）、友谊问题（51%）、学习压力（60%），用准确的英语句型描述每个群体的压力情况，清晰传达图表信息。
2. 建议部分：选择学习压力作为切入点，先提出有减压方法，再列举具体建议：向老师求助以获取学业和生活平衡的建议；穿绿色或黄色的衣服让自己振作起来，建议贴合学生生活，语言表达自然流畅。
3. 整体结构：承接题目开头，先完成调查结果的概述，再过渡到建议部分，结构完整，符合题目要求。
【答案】
Everyone will have trouble or stress in the process of growing up. Recently, our school
has carried out a survey to find out why students are stressed. The results are as follows.
5% of the students have trouble dealing with the relationship between teachers and
students. 12% of the students find it difficult to get along with their parents. 51% of the
students have friendship problems. And without doubt, most of the students are stressed
because of study, with the percentage going up to 60%.
I think there're some ways to reduce stress. For example, if you are stressed because
of study, ask your teachers for help. They will offer you some good suggestions on
achieving a balance between your schoolwork and life. You can also wear clothes in green or
yellow to cheer yourself up.
【知识点】
1. 图表类书面表达
2. 英语建议句型
3. 数据描述句型
【点评】
本文结构清晰，先准确概述了学生压力来源的调查结果，数据表述准确、逻辑有序；随后针对学习压力给出了具体可行的建议，内容贴合学生实际，语言表达流畅自然，符合书面表达的要求，很好地完成了题目任务。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先要明确本次书面表达的主题是“Learn to smile to stress”，任务分为两部分：一是准确概述调查结果，二是针对其中一种压力给出合理建议。
1. 审题阶段：先抓住图表中的核心数据，明确四个压力来源的占比，要注意数据表述的准确性和逻辑性，可选择从占比低到高的顺序介绍，让内容条理清晰。
2. 内容组织：承接题目给出的开头，先完整呈现调查数据，将每个压力来源的占比和对应的问题清晰说明；然后选择一个熟悉的压力类型，比如占比最高的学习压力，给出具体、可行的建议，建议要贴合学生实际，具有可操作性。
3. 语言表达：使用符合英语书面表达的句型，比如描述数据的“...% of the students...”，提出建议的“if you..., you can...”等，保证语句通顺，语法正确。
【解析】
1. 调查结果表述：按照占比从低到高的顺序，依次阐述师生关系（5%）、亲子关系（12%）、友谊问题（51%）、学习压力（60%），用准确的英语句型描述每个群体的压力情况，清晰传达图表信息。
2. 建议部分：选择学习压力作为切入点，先提出有减压方法，再列举具体建议：向老师求助以获取学业和生活平衡的建议；穿绿色或黄色的衣服让自己振作起来，建议贴合学生生活，语言表达自然流畅。
3. 整体结构：承接题目开头，先完成调查结果的概述，再过渡到建议部分，结构完整，符合题目要求。
【答案】
Everyone will have trouble or stress in the process of growing up. Recently, our school
has carried out a survey to find out why students are stressed. The results are as follows.
5% of the students have trouble dealing with the relationship between teachers and
students. 12% of the students find it difficult to get along with their parents. 51% of the
students have friendship problems. And without doubt, most of the students are stressed
because of study, with the percentage going up to 60%.
I think there're some ways to reduce stress. For example, if you are stressed because
of study, ask your teachers for help. They will offer you some good suggestions on
achieving a balance between your schoolwork and life. You can also wear clothes in green or
yellow to cheer yourself up.
【知识点】
1. 图表类书面表达
2. 英语建议句型
3. 数据描述句型
【点评】
本文结构清晰，先准确概述了学生压力来源的调查结果，数据表述准确、逻辑有序；随后针对学习压力给出了具体可行的建议，内容贴合学生实际，语言表达流畅自然，符合书面表达的要求，很好地完成了题目任务。
【难度系数】
0.6
