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假如英语角这两周正围绕“新年计划”这一主题让同学们进行发言。上周你已经分享了你的第一条计划，请你根据以下提示，写一篇短文详细介绍其他三条计划，为本周的分享做准备。
My New Year’s Resolutions
1. Personal improvement
2. Improving my physical health
3. Improving my relationships with my family
4. Doing better at school
要求：包括提升中后三条计划，80词左右。
Hello, everyone! Last week I shared my first New Year’s resolution.
[审题指导]1. 体裁：说明文（介绍新年计划）
2. 人称：由于是介绍新年计划，以第一人称为主
3. 时态：主要使用一般将来时
[思路构建]
[精彩范文]
Hello, everyone! Last week I shared my first New Year’s resolution. Now I’d like to share my three other New Year’s resolutions with you.
The second resolution is about improving my physical health. I’m going to eat healthier food and get more exercise. I believe they’re good for my health.
The third resolution is about improving my relationships with my family. I’m going to spend more time with my family and help with the housework. Also, I’m going to cook meals for them on their birthdays. I’m sure that by doing so they will feel my love for them.
The last resolution is about how to do better at school. I’m going to take notes carefully and finish my homework on time. I think I can get better grades.
Well, these are all my New Year’s resolutions. What about yours?
高分点评:1. 思路清晰，采用“分—总”结构。
2. 一些短语的运用，比如：share...with, be good for, take notes, get better grades等，展示了作者扎实的基本功。
3. first, second, third, last表示顺序的单词，使文章衔接紧密。 4. 文中比较级，be going to句型的正确运用成为文章的加分点。
实战演练
最近，为了让同学们学会规划自己的未来，你班就“我的未来职业”进行了一次预测活动。下表是你们小组的预测情况，请根据表格内容写一篇英语短文。
要求:1. 请涵盖表格上所有信息；
2. 请补充说明为了实现你的职业规划你将有什么具体措施(至少两点);3. 注意使用正确的时态;
4. 词数80左右。
假如英语角这两周正围绕“新年计划”这一主题让同学们进行发言。上周你已经分享了你的第一条计划，请你根据以下提示，写一篇短文详细介绍其他三条计划，为本周的分享做准备。
My New Year’s Resolutions
1. Personal improvement
2. Improving my physical health
3. Improving my relationships with my family
4. Doing better at school
要求：包括提升中后三条计划，80词左右。
Hello, everyone! Last week I shared my first New Year’s resolution.
[审题指导]1. 体裁：说明文（介绍新年计划）
2. 人称：由于是介绍新年计划，以第一人称为主
3. 时态：主要使用一般将来时
[思路构建]
[精彩范文]
Hello, everyone! Last week I shared my first New Year’s resolution. Now I’d like to share my three other New Year’s resolutions with you.
The second resolution is about improving my physical health. I’m going to eat healthier food and get more exercise. I believe they’re good for my health.
The third resolution is about improving my relationships with my family. I’m going to spend more time with my family and help with the housework. Also, I’m going to cook meals for them on their birthdays. I’m sure that by doing so they will feel my love for them.
The last resolution is about how to do better at school. I’m going to take notes carefully and finish my homework on time. I think I can get better grades.
Well, these are all my New Year’s resolutions. What about yours?
高分点评:1. 思路清晰，采用“分—总”结构。
2. 一些短语的运用，比如：share...with, be good for, take notes, get better grades等，展示了作者扎实的基本功。
3. first, second, third, last表示顺序的单词，使文章衔接紧密。 4. 文中比较级，be going to句型的正确运用成为文章的加分点。
实战演练
最近，为了让同学们学会规划自己的未来，你班就“我的未来职业”进行了一次预测活动。下表是你们小组的预测情况，请根据表格内容写一篇英语短文。
要求:1. 请涵盖表格上所有信息；
2. 请补充说明为了实现你的职业规划你将有什么具体措施(至少两点);3. 注意使用正确的时态;
4. 词数80左右。
Recently we did a survey in our class in order to learn about students' dream jobs. Here is a report about my group members' ideas.
Mary wants to be a fashion designer because she likes beautiful clothes and is good at drawing. Tom is going to be a cook. He'd like to cook delicious food for others.
As for me, I want to be a policeman because I hope to protect the safety of people. In order to make my dream come true, I am going to study hard and do exercise every day. Hopefully everyone can achieve their dreams.
答案
创新表达—写作能力提升练
实战演练
Recently we did a survey in our class in order to learn about students' dream jobs. Here is a report about my group members' ideas.
Mary wants to be a fashion designer because she likes beautiful clothes and is good at drawing. Tom is going to be a cook. He'd like to cook delicious food for others.
As for me, I want to be a policeman because I hope to protect the safety of people. In order to make my dream come true, I am going to study hard and do exercise every day. Hopefully everyone can achieve their dreams.
【思路分析】第一段，表明写作主旨，即本文是关于组内成员对未来职业的想法的；第二段，介绍组员未来想从事的职业，并说明原因；第三段，介绍自己的职业理想和原因，以及为了实现理想，自己打算如何做。
实战演练
Recently we did a survey in our class in order to learn about students' dream jobs. Here is a report about my group members' ideas.
Mary wants to be a fashion designer because she likes beautiful clothes and is good at drawing. Tom is going to be a cook. He'd like to cook delicious food for others.
As for me, I want to be a policeman because I hope to protect the safety of people. In order to make my dream come true, I am going to study hard and do exercise every day. Hopefully everyone can achieve their dreams.
【思路分析】第一段，表明写作主旨，即本文是关于组内成员对未来职业的想法的；第二段，介绍组员未来想从事的职业，并说明原因；第三段，介绍自己的职业理想和原因，以及为了实现理想，自己打算如何做。
