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假如你是Tony,你希望加入你们学校的音乐社团。请你根据提示,给社团负责人Mr Brown写一封电子邮件,表达你想要加入这个社团的愿望。70词左右。
提示:1. 个人简介;2. 在音乐方面的才能、特长;3. 联系方式。
[高分范文]
Dear Mr Brown,
I'm writing this email to you because I want to join the music club①.
My name is Tony. I'm 12 years old. I'm in Class 4. I am interested in music.② I can play the piano and I am good at playing the guitar. I often sing and dance at my friends'
parties.③ Can I join your club?④
Please call me at 25×××96, and my email address is tony@email. com.⑤ I hope to get your reply⑥ soon.
Best wishes!
Tony
[名师点评]
① because引导的原因状语从句的运用 点明了作者写电子邮件的目的。
② 用简单句简洁地介绍了自己的情况。
③ 巧妙地运用并列句介绍了自己在音乐方面的才能及特长。
④ 运用can引导的一般疑问句,表达了作者想加入音乐社团的愿望。
⑤ 运用祈使句,给出了作者的联系方式。
⑥ 对动词不定式作宾语的运用,表达了作者期望得到对方回复的愿望。展现了作者良好的写作功底。
假如你是Tony,你希望加入你们学校的音乐社团。请你根据提示,给社团负责人Mr Brown写一封电子邮件,表达你想要加入这个社团的愿望。70词左右。
提示:1. 个人简介;2. 在音乐方面的才能、特长;3. 联系方式。
[高分范文]
Dear Mr Brown,
I'm writing this email to you because I want to join the music club①.
My name is Tony. I'm 12 years old. I'm in Class 4. I am interested in music.② I can play the piano and I am good at playing the guitar. I often sing and dance at my friends'
parties.③ Can I join your club?④Please call me at 25×××96, and my email address is tony@email. com.⑤ I hope to get your reply⑥ soon.
Best wishes!
Tony
[名师点评]
① because引导的原因状语从句的运用 点明了作者写电子邮件的目的。
② 用简单句简洁地介绍了自己的情况。
③ 巧妙地运用并列句介绍了自己在音乐方面的才能及特长。
④ 运用can引导的一般疑问句,表达了作者想加入音乐社团的愿望。
⑤ 运用祈使句,给出了作者的联系方式。
⑥ 对动词不定式作宾语的运用,表达了作者期望得到对方回复的愿望。展现了作者良好的写作功底。
答案
Dear Mr Brown,
I'm writing this email to you because I want to join the music club.
My name is Tony. I'm 12 years old. I'm in Class 4. I am interested in music. I can play the piano and I am good at playing the guitar. I often sing and dance at my friends' parties. Can I join your club?
Please call me at 25×××96, and my email address is tony@email.com. I hope to get your reply soon.
Best wishes!
Tony
I'm writing this email to you because I want to join the music club.
My name is Tony. I'm 12 years old. I'm in Class 4. I am interested in music. I can play the piano and I am good at playing the guitar. I often sing and dance at my friends' parties. Can I join your club?
Please call me at 25×××96, and my email address is tony@email.com. I hope to get your reply soon.
Best wishes!
Tony
解析
【分析】本题要求以Tony的身份给音乐社团负责人Mr Brown写一封申请加入音乐社团的电子邮件，需包含个人简介、音乐方面的才能特长、联系方式三个核心要点。写作时应先通过原因状语从句点明写信目的，再依次介绍个人基本情况、音乐相关能力，最后给出联系方式并表达期待回复，同时注意遵循英文书信格式，使用合适句式让语句通顺自然。
【解析】范文严格贴合写作要求：开头用because引导的原因状语从句直接点明写信目的（申请加入音乐社团）；接着用简单句清晰介绍姓名、年龄、班级等个人基本情况，再用并列句说明音乐兴趣及特长（会弹钢琴、擅长吉他，常在朋友聚会唱歌跳舞）；随后用can引导的一般疑问句明确表达加入愿望；最后用祈使句给出联系方式，以动词不定式作宾语表达期待回复，整体结构清晰，要点齐全，语言简洁，符合70词左右的要求。
【答案】Dear Mr Brown,
I'm writing this email to you because I want to join the music club.
My name is Tony. I'm 12 years old. I'm in Class 4. I am interested in music. I can play the piano and I am good at playing the guitar. I often sing and dance at my friends' parties. Can I join your club?
Please call me at 25×××96, and my email address is tony@email.com. I hope to get your reply soon.
Best wishes!
Tony
【知识点】英语书信写作、原因状语从句、动词不定式作宾语
【点评】这篇范文紧扣题目要求，要点完整，句式丰富多样，语言简洁流畅，格式规范，清晰传达了加入音乐社团的意愿，是一篇符合要求的优秀写作范例。
【难度系数】0.5
【解析】范文严格贴合写作要求：开头用because引导的原因状语从句直接点明写信目的（申请加入音乐社团）；接着用简单句清晰介绍姓名、年龄、班级等个人基本情况，再用并列句说明音乐兴趣及特长（会弹钢琴、擅长吉他，常在朋友聚会唱歌跳舞）；随后用can引导的一般疑问句明确表达加入愿望；最后用祈使句给出联系方式，以动词不定式作宾语表达期待回复，整体结构清晰，要点齐全，语言简洁，符合70词左右的要求。
【答案】Dear Mr Brown,
I'm writing this email to you because I want to join the music club.
My name is Tony. I'm 12 years old. I'm in Class 4. I am interested in music. I can play the piano and I am good at playing the guitar. I often sing and dance at my friends' parties. Can I join your club?
Please call me at 25×××96, and my email address is tony@email.com. I hope to get your reply soon.
Best wishes!
Tony
【知识点】英语书信写作、原因状语从句、动词不定式作宾语
【点评】这篇范文紧扣题目要求，要点完整，句式丰富多样，语言简洁流畅，格式规范，清晰传达了加入音乐社团的意愿，是一篇符合要求的优秀写作范例。
【难度系数】0.5
