主题写作专项 ＞＞练写作 答案D17
主题词网
优选词汇
事件 · birthday party · go on a picnic · illness · chores · family dinner
场景 · accident · travel · trip · journey · holiday
情感 · sad · sadness · excited · excitement · moved · touching
· happy · happiness · shocked · surprised · interested · joyful
行为 · discuss · argue · fight · react · encourage · forgive
· hug · offer · comfort · have a party · keep (...) in mind
写作实例
五月的第二个星期日为母亲节。你们学校下周将会举行一次名为“感恩母亲”的演讲比赛。假设你是九年级一班的李明,你将代表你们班参加这次演讲比赛。请根据以下要点写一篇演讲稿。演讲内容包括:
1.讲述一件发生在你和你的母亲之间的难忘的事情；→审时态①：一般过去时
2.你将如何感恩母亲；→审时态②：一般将来时
3.表达对母亲的感情。→审时态③：一般现在时
注意:1.语言通顺,行文连贯,条理清楚,书写规范；→审词数 审人称：第一、三人称
2.词数100左右,开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Hello, everyone! I'm Li Ming from Class 1, Grade 9. Today, my speech topic is love for my mother.


Thank you for listening.
写作支架

开头
讲述一件发生在自己和母亲之间的难忘的事情
My mother’s love is always around me, and one memory stays deeply in my heart.
When I was , I . I felt so terrible. My mother was so that she .（高分句式1）
She took good care of me .
中间
描述如何感恩母亲
My mother gives me all her love without .
To thank her, I’ll to lighten her burden. Her birthday is coming, and I plan to . I want her to know .（高分句式2）
结尾
表达对母亲的感情
I’m so lucky to . Mum, thank you for .
May you always be healthy and happy.
优秀范文
Hello, everyone! I'm Li Ming from Class 1, Grade 9. Today, my speech topic is love for my mother.
My mother’s love is always around me, and one memory stays deeply in my heart. When I was 10①, I had a high fever at midnight. I felt so terrible. My mother was so worried that she rushed me to the nearest hospital immediately①. She took good care of② me without rest during the whole night.
My mother gives me all her love without asking for anything in return②. To thank her, I’ll help with more housework to lighten her burden②. Her birthday is coming, and I plan to make a birthday card with my sincere wishes② on it. I want her to know how much I love her①.
I’m so lucky to have such a great mother. Mum, thank you for everything you’ve done for me①. May you always be healthy and happy.
Thank you for listening.
亮点评析
①使用了多种复合句(时间状语从句、结果状语从句、宾语从句和定语从句),使句子的逻辑更加清晰,且丰富了文章的句式结构。
②使用 take good care of、without asking for anything in return、lighten her burden、sincere wishes 进行描述,用词贴切,为文章增色不少。

优秀范文
Hello, everyone! I'm Li Ming from Class 1, Grade 9. Today, my speech topic is love for my mother.
My mother’s love is always around me, and one memory stays deeply in my heart. When I was 10, I had a high fever at midnight. I felt so terrible. My mother was so worried that she rushed me to the nearest hospital immediately. She took good care of me without rest during the whole night.
My mother gives me all her love without asking for anything in return. To thank her, I’ll help with more housework to lighten her burden. Her birthday is coming, and I plan to make a birthday card with my sincere wishes on it. I want her to know how much I love her.
I’m so lucky to have such a great mother. Mum, thank you for everything you’ve done for me. May you always be healthy and happy.
Thank you for listening.
亮点评析
①使用了多种复合句(时间状语从句、结果状语从句、宾语从句和定语从句),使句子的逻辑更加清晰,且丰富了文章的句式结构。
②使用 take good care of、without asking for anything in return、lighten her burden、sincere wishes 进行描述,用词贴切,为文章增色不少。