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学校向中学生开展“了解家乡事，厚植家乡情，用世界语言描述家乡”的英语征文比赛。请根据图示，以“My charming hometown”为题，写一篇短文介绍你的家乡。
要求：1. 短文必须包括图示中的所有要点。
2. 90词左右。
[思路点拨] 1. 文体：记叙文。2. 时态：一般现在时。3. 人称：以第三人称为主。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
My charming hometown
学校向中学生开展“了解家乡事，厚植家乡情，用世界语言描述家乡”的英语征文比赛。请根据图示，以“My charming hometown”为题，写一篇短文介绍你的家乡。
要求：1. 短文必须包括图示中的所有要点。
2. 90词左右。
[思路点拨] 1. 文体：记叙文。2. 时态：一般现在时。3. 人称：以第三人称为主。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
My charming hometown
I would like to tell you something about my hometown Suqian. Located in the north of Jiangsu Province, Suqian covers an area of about 8,500 square kilometres.
The weather here is neither too hot nor too cold. There are a lot of green trees and colourful flowers. In Suqian, there are many interesting places to visit, such as Santai Mountain National Forest Park and Luoma Lake. At the same time, people can enjoy local delicious food as well.
The warm community and friendly people make it a wonderful place to live in. I am proud to live here and welcome you all to Suqian.
答案
One possible version:
My charming hometown
I would like to tell you something about my hometown Suqian. Located in the north of Jiangsu Province, Suqian covers an area of about 8,500 square kilometres.
The weather here is neither too hot nor too cold. There are a lot of green trees and colourful flowers. In Suqian, there are many interesting places to visit, such as Santai Mountain National Forest Park and Luoma Lake. At the same time, people can enjoy local delicious food as well.
The warm community and friendly people make it a wonderful place to live in. I am proud to live here and welcome you all to Suqian.
My charming hometown
I would like to tell you something about my hometown Suqian. Located in the north of Jiangsu Province, Suqian covers an area of about 8,500 square kilometres.
The weather here is neither too hot nor too cold. There are a lot of green trees and colourful flowers. In Suqian, there are many interesting places to visit, such as Santai Mountain National Forest Park and Luoma Lake. At the same time, people can enjoy local delicious food as well.
The warm community and friendly people make it a wonderful place to live in. I am proud to live here and welcome you all to Suqian.
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道写作题，先明确核心要求：用英语向他人介绍家乡，覆盖所有要点，词数控制在90词左右，使用一般现在时。第一步先梳理写作逻辑：开篇先点明家乡名称，交代基础的地理区位、面积信息，让读者先建立基础认知；第二步填充主体内容，依次介绍家乡的气候、生态环境、特色景点、本土美食，把家乡的游玩特色讲清楚；最后收尾落脚到人文氛围，表达自己对家乡的自豪感，向读者发出邀请，全程保持时态统一，句式搭配合理，不遗漏任何要点即可完成符合要求的短文。
【解析】
1. 开篇段：开门见山引出介绍对象，用"I would like to tell you something about my hometown Suqian."直接点题，随后用过去分词作状语的结构补充家乡的地理位置和占地面积，丰富句式，避免表达单调。
2. 主体段：先介绍家乡宜人的气候特征，再描述本地绿植花卉多的生态优势，接着列举两处代表性景点凸显旅游特色，最后补充本地美食的特点，完整覆盖自然、游玩、美食类的所有要点。
3. 收尾段：点明家乡居民友好、社区氛围温暖的人文优势，说明家乡是宜居的好地方，最后抒发自身的自豪感，向读者发出到访邀请，完成全文的情感升华。
全文时态统一为一般现在时，总词数符合90词左右的要求，没有语法错误，逻辑流畅。
【答案】
My charming hometown
I would like to tell you something about my hometown Suqian. Located in the north of Jiangsu Province, Suqian covers an area of about 8,500 square kilometres.
The weather here is neither too hot nor too cold. There are a lot of green trees and colourful flowers. In Suqian, there are many interesting places to visit, such as Santai Mountain National Forest Park and Luoma Lake. At the same time, people can enjoy local delicious food as well.
The warm community and friendly people make it a wonderful place to live in. I am proud to live here and welcome you all to Suqian.
【知识点】
家乡话题写作，一般现在时，英语短文谋篇
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖了题目要求的所有写作要点，内容从地理概况、自然环境、特色景点美食到人文氛围层层递进，逻辑清晰，句式搭配丰富，既有简单句也有高级非谓语结构，词数符合90词左右的要求，情感真挚，完美契合本次“用世界语言介绍家乡”的征文主题。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先拿到这道写作题，先明确核心要求：用英语向他人介绍家乡，覆盖所有要点，词数控制在90词左右，使用一般现在时。第一步先梳理写作逻辑：开篇先点明家乡名称，交代基础的地理区位、面积信息，让读者先建立基础认知；第二步填充主体内容，依次介绍家乡的气候、生态环境、特色景点、本土美食，把家乡的游玩特色讲清楚；最后收尾落脚到人文氛围，表达自己对家乡的自豪感，向读者发出邀请，全程保持时态统一，句式搭配合理，不遗漏任何要点即可完成符合要求的短文。
【解析】
1. 开篇段：开门见山引出介绍对象，用"I would like to tell you something about my hometown Suqian."直接点题，随后用过去分词作状语的结构补充家乡的地理位置和占地面积，丰富句式，避免表达单调。
2. 主体段：先介绍家乡宜人的气候特征，再描述本地绿植花卉多的生态优势，接着列举两处代表性景点凸显旅游特色，最后补充本地美食的特点，完整覆盖自然、游玩、美食类的所有要点。
3. 收尾段：点明家乡居民友好、社区氛围温暖的人文优势，说明家乡是宜居的好地方，最后抒发自身的自豪感，向读者发出到访邀请，完成全文的情感升华。
全文时态统一为一般现在时，总词数符合90词左右的要求，没有语法错误，逻辑流畅。
【答案】
My charming hometown
I would like to tell you something about my hometown Suqian. Located in the north of Jiangsu Province, Suqian covers an area of about 8,500 square kilometres.
The weather here is neither too hot nor too cold. There are a lot of green trees and colourful flowers. In Suqian, there are many interesting places to visit, such as Santai Mountain National Forest Park and Luoma Lake. At the same time, people can enjoy local delicious food as well.
The warm community and friendly people make it a wonderful place to live in. I am proud to live here and welcome you all to Suqian.
【知识点】
家乡话题写作，一般现在时，英语短文谋篇
【点评】
本篇范文完全覆盖了题目要求的所有写作要点，内容从地理概况、自然环境、特色景点美食到人文氛围层层递进，逻辑清晰，句式搭配丰富，既有简单句也有高级非谓语结构，词数符合90词左右的要求，情感真挚，完美契合本次“用世界语言介绍家乡”的征文主题。
【难度系数】
0.6
