佳作赏析
[经典例题]
为了更好地开展课后活动，班主任向全班同学征求改进的意见。假设你是李言，请你代表全班同学给班主任写一封信，提出一些改进的意见。内容如下：
1. 每月开展一次篮球训练；
2. 增加传统文化相关内容；
3. 建立兴趣小组，如绘画或音乐等。
要求：
1. 表达清楚，语句通顺，意思连贯；
2. 短文必须包括所有的信息，适当增加细节内容；
3. 词数不少于90，已给出部分(画直线部分)不计入总词数。
[高分范文]
Dear Class Teacher,
① I am writing this letter to make suggestions on the after-class activities in our class.
② First, I would like to suggest adding more sports-related activities. For example, we could have basketball training once a month. ③ This can not only build our physical strength but also cultivate teamwork spirit. Moreover, it will be great to organize some cultural events, like a Chinese poetry recitation competition. This way, we can enrich our knowledge about traditional culture. Finally, I have a suggestion for setting up interest groups according to students' hobbies, such as a painting group or a music group.
④ I hope you will find my suggestions useful and helpful.
Best wishes, Li Yan

Dear Class Teacher,
I am writing this letter to make suggestions on the after-class activities in our class.
First, I would like to suggest adding more sports-related activities. For example, we could have basketball training once a month. This can not only build our physical strength but also cultivate teamwork spirit. Moreover, it will be great to organize some cultural events, like a Chinese poetry recitation competition. This way, we can enrich our knowledge about traditional culture. Finally, I have a suggestion for setting up interest groups according to students' hobbies, such as a painting group or a music group. We can choose to join the group we like to develop our own skills in our spare time.
I hope you will find my suggestions useful and helpful.
Best wishes,
Li Yan

这是一篇写给班主任的建议信，写作时需注意：1. 使用礼貌得体的语气，符合学生向老师提建议的语境；2. 用First、Moreover、Finally等逻辑连接词串联内容，完整覆盖三个核心要求：每月开展一次篮球训练、增加传统文化相关活动、建立绘画或音乐类兴趣小组，同时补充每个建议的实际益处作为细节，让行文连贯充实；3. 满足词数要求，符合书信的基础格式规范。