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六、书面表达
本周英语角的主题是“My pet”,每个成员都要写一篇短文介绍
自己的宠物。假设你是安迪,请你根据下面的材料,以“My pet dog”
为题写一篇80个词左右的短文。
My pet dog
I'm Andy. I keep a dog at home.
本周英语角的主题是“My pet”,每个成员都要写一篇短文介绍
自己的宠物。假设你是安迪,请你根据下面的材料,以“My pet dog”
为题写一篇80个词左右的短文。
My pet dog
I'm Andy. I keep a dog at home.
答案
六、One possible version:
My pet dog
I'm Andy. I keep a dog at home. He is my best friend.
I call him Paul. Paul is a yellow dog. He weighs about 10kg. He is 18 months old. Paul looks
healthy and strong. Paul is clever. He can do many tricks. And he likes playing with my basketball best.
He also enjoys walking with me after supper. I feed him three times a day. He likes eating bones very
much.
I love my Paul so much. I will look after him till his end.
My pet dog
I'm Andy. I keep a dog at home. He is my best friend.
I call him Paul. Paul is a yellow dog. He weighs about 10kg. He is 18 months old. Paul looks
healthy and strong. Paul is clever. He can do many tricks. And he likes playing with my basketball best.
He also enjoys walking with me after supper. I feed him three times a day. He likes eating bones very
much.
I love my Paul so much. I will look after him till his end.
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道题先明确写作要求：身份是安迪，题目为My pet dog，词数要求80词左右，核心信息全部由给出的表格提供。解题思路第一步：先梳理表格里的所有要点，避免遗漏：宠物名字Paul、年龄18个月、体重10千克、外貌是黄色、强壮、最爱的食物是骨头、最爱的活动是玩篮球、和主人散步。第二步：搭建行文逻辑，承接题目给出的开头句，先点明宠物是自己的好朋友，再依次介绍它的基础身份信息，接着介绍它的饮食喜好和日常喜欢的活动，最后收尾表达自己对宠物的喜爱，以及会好好照顾它的心意。第三步：把零散的要点用通顺的英语语句串联，适当补充少量合理的衔接内容，调整语句让行文流畅，检查语法错误，控制词数符合要求即可。
【解析】
1. 承接题干给出的开篇内容，先补充总起句点明宠物的定位：He is my best friend.
2. 依次整合基础信息：介绍名字I call him Paul，接着说明年龄Paul is 18 months old，体重He weighs about 10kg，外貌He is yellow and looks very strong。
3. 整合喜好相关信息：先介绍它最爱的食物He likes eating bones very much，再介绍它的日常活动爱好And he likes playing with my basketball best. He also enjoys walking with me after supper。
4. 最后补充收尾句，表达自己对宠物的喜爱和照顾它的心意，调整所有语句的语序和衔接，保证语法正确，所有要点都覆盖，词数符合80词左右的要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
My pet dog
I'm Andy. I keep a dog at home. He is my best friend.
I call him Paul. Paul is a yellow dog. He weighs about 10kg. He is 18 months old. Paul looks healthy and strong. Paul is clever. He can do many tricks. And he likes playing with my basketball best. He also enjoys walking with me after supper. I feed him three times a day. He likes eating bones very much.
I love my Paul so much. I will look after him till his end.
【知识点】
英语书面表达，信息提取整合，话题词汇运用
【点评】
本题属于表格提示类的基础写作题，所有核心写作要点都已明确给出，不需要学生进行大量的内容原创，只需要将零散的表格信息按照合理的叙事逻辑串联成通顺的英文文段，适当添加少量衔接内容让行文自然流畅，注意语法和人称的正确性，不遗漏要点即可完成写作，适合锻炼学生介绍身边事物的写作能力。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先拿到这道题先明确写作要求：身份是安迪，题目为My pet dog，词数要求80词左右，核心信息全部由给出的表格提供。解题思路第一步：先梳理表格里的所有要点，避免遗漏：宠物名字Paul、年龄18个月、体重10千克、外貌是黄色、强壮、最爱的食物是骨头、最爱的活动是玩篮球、和主人散步。第二步：搭建行文逻辑，承接题目给出的开头句，先点明宠物是自己的好朋友，再依次介绍它的基础身份信息，接着介绍它的饮食喜好和日常喜欢的活动，最后收尾表达自己对宠物的喜爱，以及会好好照顾它的心意。第三步：把零散的要点用通顺的英语语句串联，适当补充少量合理的衔接内容，调整语句让行文流畅，检查语法错误，控制词数符合要求即可。
【解析】
1. 承接题干给出的开篇内容，先补充总起句点明宠物的定位：He is my best friend.
2. 依次整合基础信息：介绍名字I call him Paul，接着说明年龄Paul is 18 months old，体重He weighs about 10kg，外貌He is yellow and looks very strong。
3. 整合喜好相关信息：先介绍它最爱的食物He likes eating bones very much，再介绍它的日常活动爱好And he likes playing with my basketball best. He also enjoys walking with me after supper。
4. 最后补充收尾句，表达自己对宠物的喜爱和照顾它的心意，调整所有语句的语序和衔接，保证语法正确，所有要点都覆盖，词数符合80词左右的要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
My pet dog
I'm Andy. I keep a dog at home. He is my best friend.
I call him Paul. Paul is a yellow dog. He weighs about 10kg. He is 18 months old. Paul looks healthy and strong. Paul is clever. He can do many tricks. And he likes playing with my basketball best. He also enjoys walking with me after supper. I feed him three times a day. He likes eating bones very much.
I love my Paul so much. I will look after him till his end.
【知识点】
英语书面表达，信息提取整合，话题词汇运用
【点评】
本题属于表格提示类的基础写作题，所有核心写作要点都已明确给出，不需要学生进行大量的内容原创，只需要将零散的表格信息按照合理的叙事逻辑串联成通顺的英文文段，适当添加少量衔接内容让行文自然流畅，注意语法和人称的正确性，不遗漏要点即可完成写作，适合锻炼学生介绍身边事物的写作能力。
【难度系数】
0.7
