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四、书面表达。(30 分)
假设你是李华，你的英国笔友彼得 (Peter) 来信询问你是否有过志愿服务经历。请你根据以下提示，给他回一封邮件，介绍你在养老院参加的志愿活动。
提示：
1. 何时开始做志愿者；
2. 列举志愿活动的内容 (至少 2 项)；
3. 你的感受和收获。
要求：
1. 词数 80～100；
2. 条理清晰，语句通顺，语法正确。
假设你是李华，你的英国笔友彼得 (Peter) 来信询问你是否有过志愿服务经历。请你根据以下提示，给他回一封邮件，介绍你在养老院参加的志愿活动。
提示：
1. 何时开始做志愿者；
2. 列举志愿活动的内容 (至少 2 项)；
3. 你的感受和收获。
要求：
1. 词数 80～100；
2. 条理清晰，语句通顺，语法正确。
Dear Peter,
I'm glad to receive your email. I'd like to share my volunteer experience with you. I started volunteering at a local nursing home last year.
Every weekend, I go there to help the elderly. I often chat with them about their daily life and listen to their interesting stories. Sometimes, I help them clean their rooms or walk around the garden. I also teach some of them how to use mobile phones to make video calls
with their families.
This experience has made me feel happy and meaningful. I've learnt to care for others and understand the needs of the elderly. It also tells me that small acts of kindness can bring
great joy to others.
Yours,
Li Hua
答案
Dear Peter,
I'm glad to receive your email. I'd like to share my volunteer experience with you. I started volunteering at a local nursing home last year.
Every weekend, I go there to help the elderly. I often chat with them about their daily life and listen to their interesting stories. Sometimes, I help them clean their rooms or walk around the garden. I also teach some of them how to use mobile phones to make video calls with their families.
This experience has made me feel happy and meaningful. I've learnt to care for others and understand the needs of the elderly. It also tells me that small acts of kindness can bring great joy to others.
Yours,
Li Hua
I'm glad to receive your email. I'd like to share my volunteer experience with you. I started volunteering at a local nursing home last year.
Every weekend, I go there to help the elderly. I often chat with them about their daily life and listen to their interesting stories. Sometimes, I help them clean their rooms or walk around the garden. I also teach some of them how to use mobile phones to make video calls with their families.
This experience has made me feel happy and meaningful. I've learnt to care for others and understand the needs of the elderly. It also tells me that small acts of kindness can bring great joy to others.
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先要明确核心要求是给笔友回邮件，完整覆盖题干给出的三个必填要点：说明做志愿的起始时间、列举至少2项志愿活动、分享自身感受收获。首先要先回忆英文邮件的标准格式，开篇先回应对方的来信，自然引出要分享的养老院志愿经历，之后依次展开三个要点，最后收尾，全程控制词数在80-100区间，写完后检查语法错误，确保所有提示点没有遗漏，语句通顺符合日常给好友写信的亲切语气。
【解析】
1. 确定写作基础：文体为私人英文邮件，使用第一人称叙事，语气自然亲切；时态搭配一般过去时（介绍开始做志愿的时间）和一般现在时（描述常规志愿活动、阐述个人收获）即可。
2. 搭建行文结构：
① 开篇部分：回应收到彼得的来信，点明要分享自己的志愿经历，直接说明自己从去年开始在当地养老院做志愿者，完成第一个要点。
② 主体部分：列举2项以上的具体志愿活动，比如陪老人聊天听他们的过往趣事、帮老人打扫房间、教老人用手机和家人打视频电话，满足活动数量要求。
③ 收尾部分：说明这段经历让自己感受到充实的快乐，学会了关爱他人，也明白了微小的善意也能给他人带去巨大的幸福感，完成感受收获的要点。
3. 最后调整语句衔接，核对词数符合要求，排查拼写和语法错误。
【答案】
Dear Peter,
I'm glad to receive your email. I'd like to share my volunteer experience with you. I started volunteering at a local nursing home last year.
Every weekend, I go there to help the elderly. I often chat with them about their daily life and listen to their interesting stories. Sometimes, I help them clean their rooms or walk around the garden. I also teach some of them how to use mobile phones to make video calls with their families.
This experience has made me feel happy and meaningful. I've learnt to care for others and understand the needs of the elderly. It also tells me that small acts of kindness can bring great joy to others.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英文邮件写作，志愿话题表达，时态综合运用
【点评】
这篇范文完全覆盖了题干所有提示要点，格式完全符合英文邮件的规范，行文逻辑清晰，从经历引入到活动列举再到个人感悟层层递进，用词地道准确，没有冗余表达，词数完全符合题目要求，是一篇标准的高分参考范文。同学们写作时可以参考该结构，优先保证所有题干提示点都被覆盖，再适当补充细节让内容更真实饱满。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道书面表达题，首先要明确核心要求是给笔友回邮件，完整覆盖题干给出的三个必填要点：说明做志愿的起始时间、列举至少2项志愿活动、分享自身感受收获。首先要先回忆英文邮件的标准格式，开篇先回应对方的来信，自然引出要分享的养老院志愿经历，之后依次展开三个要点，最后收尾，全程控制词数在80-100区间，写完后检查语法错误，确保所有提示点没有遗漏，语句通顺符合日常给好友写信的亲切语气。
【解析】
1. 确定写作基础：文体为私人英文邮件，使用第一人称叙事，语气自然亲切；时态搭配一般过去时（介绍开始做志愿的时间）和一般现在时（描述常规志愿活动、阐述个人收获）即可。
2. 搭建行文结构：
① 开篇部分：回应收到彼得的来信，点明要分享自己的志愿经历，直接说明自己从去年开始在当地养老院做志愿者，完成第一个要点。
② 主体部分：列举2项以上的具体志愿活动，比如陪老人聊天听他们的过往趣事、帮老人打扫房间、教老人用手机和家人打视频电话，满足活动数量要求。
③ 收尾部分：说明这段经历让自己感受到充实的快乐，学会了关爱他人，也明白了微小的善意也能给他人带去巨大的幸福感，完成感受收获的要点。
3. 最后调整语句衔接，核对词数符合要求，排查拼写和语法错误。
【答案】
Dear Peter,
I'm glad to receive your email. I'd like to share my volunteer experience with you. I started volunteering at a local nursing home last year.
Every weekend, I go there to help the elderly. I often chat with them about their daily life and listen to their interesting stories. Sometimes, I help them clean their rooms or walk around the garden. I also teach some of them how to use mobile phones to make video calls with their families.
This experience has made me feel happy and meaningful. I've learnt to care for others and understand the needs of the elderly. It also tells me that small acts of kindness can bring great joy to others.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英文邮件写作，志愿话题表达，时态综合运用
【点评】
这篇范文完全覆盖了题干所有提示要点，格式完全符合英文邮件的规范，行文逻辑清晰，从经历引入到活动列举再到个人感悟层层递进，用词地道准确，没有冗余表达，词数完全符合题目要求，是一篇标准的高分参考范文。同学们写作时可以参考该结构，优先保证所有题干提示点都被覆盖，再适当补充细节让内容更真实饱满。
【难度系数】
0.6
