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三、书面表达
请根据下面的内容要点提示,用英语写一篇短文。
内容提示:1.北京动物园的大熊猫端端,现在三岁,来自四川;
2.端端黑白相间,长着一双大眼睛;漂亮可爱,但有点儿害羞;
3.它喜欢吃竹子,会爬树,经常在白天睡觉;
4.大熊猫的数量很少,我们需要好好保护它们。
要求:60词左右。
请根据下面的内容要点提示,用英语写一篇短文。
内容提示:1.北京动物园的大熊猫端端,现在三岁,来自四川;
2.端端黑白相间,长着一双大眼睛;漂亮可爱,但有点儿害羞;
3.它喜欢吃竹子,会爬树,经常在白天睡觉;
4.大熊猫的数量很少,我们需要好好保护它们。
要求:60词左右。
答案
One possible version:
Duanduan, a three-year-old panda, is from Si-
chuan. Now it lives in Beijing Zoo.
Duanduan is black and white with two big
eyes. It looks beautiful and cute. But sometimes it
is kind of shy. It likes eating bamboos a lot. And it
can climb the tree. Duanduan is also a little lazy.
It often sleeps in the daytime. But sometimes it is
playful.
Pandas are our friends. However, the number
of pandas is small now. I think we need to be
friendly to them and we should protect them.
Duanduan, a three-year-old panda, is from Si-
chuan. Now it lives in Beijing Zoo.
Duanduan is black and white with two big
eyes. It looks beautiful and cute. But sometimes it
is kind of shy. It likes eating bamboos a lot. And it
can climb the tree. Duanduan is also a little lazy.
It often sleeps in the daytime. But sometimes it is
playful.
Pandas are our friends. However, the number
of pandas is small now. I think we need to be
friendly to them and we should protect them.
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道书面表达题，第一步先审题，明确写作核心是介绍大熊猫端端，要求60词左右，需要完整覆盖题干给出的4个内容要点，不能遗漏。接下来梳理写作思路：1. 开篇先介绍端端的基础身份，对应要点1，点明它的年龄、籍贯和现居住地点；2. 接着描写端端的外貌和性格特点，对应要点2，把黑白皮毛、大眼睛、可爱害羞的特征清晰表述；3. 之后介绍它的生活习性，对应要点3，写出它的饮食、技能和日常作息；4. 最后收尾升华，对应要点4，点明大熊猫现存数量少，引出保护大熊猫的呼吁。写作时注意选用简单准确的常用词汇，保证语句通顺，没有语法错误，控制总词数符合要求即可。
【解析】
按照梳理的写作结构逐步完成内容：
1. 开篇引入：整合要点1信息，写出端端的基本背景：Duanduan, a three-year-old panda, is from Sichuan. Now it lives in Beijing Zoo.
2. 外貌性格描写：整合要点2信息，用简单的形容词描述外观和性格：Duanduan is black and white with two big eyes. It looks beautiful and cute. But sometimes it is kind of shy.
3. 生活习性介绍：整合要点3信息，表述它的饮食、能力和作息：It likes eating bamboos a lot. And it can climb the tree. It often sleeps in the daytime.
4. 结尾主题升华：整合要点4信息，点明现状发出呼吁：However, the number of pandas is small now. We should be friendly to them and protect them.
最后调整语句的衔接流畅度，检查所有要点都已覆盖，修正语法小错误，调整词数到60左右就完成写作。
【答案】
One possible version:
Duanduan, a three-year-old panda, is from Si-chuan. Now it lives in Beijing Zoo.
Duanduan is black and white with two big eyes. It looks beautiful and cute. But sometimes it is kind of shy. It likes eating bamboos a lot. And it can climb the tree. Duanduan is also a little lazy. It often sleeps in the daytime. But sometimes it is playful.
Pandas are our friends. However, the number of pandas is small now. I think we need to be friendly to them and we should protect them.
【知识点】
1. 动物介绍类写作
2. 事物特征描述
3. 常用英语短语
【点评】
本题属于基础类的提示性书面表达，所有写作要点都已明确给出，不需要学生额外构思复杂内容，只需要将给出的信息用通顺正确的英语表达出来，注意规避主谓一致、名词单复数这类基础语法错误，覆盖全部要点就能拿到高分，适合低年级学生练习基础写作能力。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先拿到这道书面表达题，第一步先审题，明确写作核心是介绍大熊猫端端，要求60词左右，需要完整覆盖题干给出的4个内容要点，不能遗漏。接下来梳理写作思路：1. 开篇先介绍端端的基础身份，对应要点1，点明它的年龄、籍贯和现居住地点；2. 接着描写端端的外貌和性格特点，对应要点2，把黑白皮毛、大眼睛、可爱害羞的特征清晰表述；3. 之后介绍它的生活习性，对应要点3，写出它的饮食、技能和日常作息；4. 最后收尾升华，对应要点4，点明大熊猫现存数量少，引出保护大熊猫的呼吁。写作时注意选用简单准确的常用词汇，保证语句通顺，没有语法错误，控制总词数符合要求即可。
【解析】
按照梳理的写作结构逐步完成内容：
1. 开篇引入：整合要点1信息，写出端端的基本背景：Duanduan, a three-year-old panda, is from Sichuan. Now it lives in Beijing Zoo.
2. 外貌性格描写：整合要点2信息，用简单的形容词描述外观和性格：Duanduan is black and white with two big eyes. It looks beautiful and cute. But sometimes it is kind of shy.
3. 生活习性介绍：整合要点3信息，表述它的饮食、能力和作息：It likes eating bamboos a lot. And it can climb the tree. It often sleeps in the daytime.
4. 结尾主题升华：整合要点4信息，点明现状发出呼吁：However, the number of pandas is small now. We should be friendly to them and protect them.
最后调整语句的衔接流畅度，检查所有要点都已覆盖，修正语法小错误，调整词数到60左右就完成写作。
【答案】
One possible version:
Duanduan, a three-year-old panda, is from Si-chuan. Now it lives in Beijing Zoo.
Duanduan is black and white with two big eyes. It looks beautiful and cute. But sometimes it is kind of shy. It likes eating bamboos a lot. And it can climb the tree. Duanduan is also a little lazy. It often sleeps in the daytime. But sometimes it is playful.
Pandas are our friends. However, the number of pandas is small now. I think we need to be friendly to them and we should protect them.
【知识点】
1. 动物介绍类写作
2. 事物特征描述
3. 常用英语短语
【点评】
本题属于基础类的提示性书面表达，所有写作要点都已明确给出，不需要学生额外构思复杂内容，只需要将给出的信息用通顺正确的英语表达出来，注意规避主谓一致、名词单复数这类基础语法错误，覆盖全部要点就能拿到高分，适合低年级学生练习基础写作能力。
【难度系数】
0.7
