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请根据下表提示，以“My dream community”为题用英语写一篇短文。
【要求】1. 文中不得使用真实姓名和校名。
2. 段落清楚，中心突出，意思连贯，书写规范。
3. 内容必须包括以上信息，可适当发挥。
4. 不少于100词，开头已给出，不计入总词数。
My dream community
Hello，I'm happy to tell you something about my dream community.
请根据下表提示，以“My dream community”为题用英语写一篇短文。
【要求】1. 文中不得使用真实姓名和校名。
2. 段落清楚，中心突出，意思连贯，书写规范。
3. 内容必须包括以上信息，可适当发挥。
4. 不少于100词，开头已给出，不计入总词数。
My dream community
Hello，I'm happy to tell you something about my dream community.
One possible version: My dream community is very big. But there aren't many people living there. There are lots of trees in the neighbourhood, so the air there is fresh. We have a big garden, a swimming pool and a playground. We can have a good time playing in those places. All my neighbours are nice and helpful. Some of them are volunteers with different skills. If we have any problems, they can help us. They also help old people do some shopping and clean their houses. If children have problems with their lessons, they will give them a helping hand. I will do some things for my community. I am going to pick up the rubbish in the community centre. If my neighbour is not good at English, I will help her/him with her/his English after school. My community will be a good place to live in.
答案
实战演练
One possible version:
My dream community
Hello, I'm happy to tell you something about my dream community. My dream community is very big. But there aren't many people living there. There are lots of trees in the neighbourhood, so the air there is fresh. We have a big garden, a swimming pool and a playground. We can have a good time playing in those places. All my neighbours are nice and helpful. Some of them are volunteers with different skills. If we have any problems, they can help us. They also help old people do some shopping and clean their houses. If children have problems with their lessons, they will give them a helping hand. I will do some things for my community. I am going to pick up the rubbish in the community centre. If my neighbour is not good at English, I will help her/him with her/his English after school. My community will be a good place to live in.
One possible version:
My dream community
Hello, I'm happy to tell you something about my dream community. My dream community is very big. But there aren't many people living there. There are lots of trees in the neighbourhood, so the air there is fresh. We have a big garden, a swimming pool and a playground. We can have a good time playing in those places. All my neighbours are nice and helpful. Some of them are volunteers with different skills. If we have any problems, they can help us. They also help old people do some shopping and clean their houses. If children have problems with their lessons, they will give them a helping hand. I will do some things for my community. I am going to pick up the rubbish in the community centre. If my neighbour is not good at English, I will help her/him with her/his English after school. My community will be a good place to live in.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题首先要先审题，明确主题是“My dream community（我理想中的社区）”，先把表格给出的所有必写要点梳理出来，再按照从整体到局部的逻辑排序：先介绍社区的整体基本概况，再依次介绍配套硬件设施、自然环境，之后描述邻里的人文氛围，最后写自己计划为社区做的事，收尾点题。写作时要确保所有提示要点都不遗漏，适当补充少量生活化细节让行文更流畅，注意描述社区特征用一般现在时，描述未来计划用一般将来时，满足不少于100词的要求，不出现真实校名姓名，保证段落清晰逻辑通顺即可完成写作。
【解析】
1. 承接题干给出的开头句，首先介绍理想社区的基础属性：社区面积很大，但居住的居民不多。
2. 接下来依次介绍社区的配套设施和自然环境：罗列花园、操场、游泳池，补充说明居民可以在这些场所休闲放松，再描述社区树木繁多、空气清新，居住体验舒适。
3. 之后介绍邻里相关内容：先总述邻居都友善热心，再点明部分邻居是拥有不同技能的志愿者，分别列举他们帮居民解决问题、帮老人购物打扫房屋、辅导孩子学习的具体行为，完整覆盖表格给出的要点。
4. 最后介绍自己打算为社区做的两件合理的事，比如捡拾社区垃圾、帮邻居辅导英语，最后收尾点题，点明这是非常适合居住的好地方，全文连贯流畅，满足所有写作要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
My dream community
Hello, I'm happy to tell you something about my dream community. My dream community is very big. But there aren't many people living there. There are lots of trees in the neighbourhood, so the air there is fresh. We have a big garden, a swimming pool and a playground. We can have a good time playing in those places. All my neighbours are nice and helpful. Some of them are volunteers with different skills. If we have any problems, they can help us. They also help old people do some shopping and clean their houses. If children have problems with their lessons, they will give them a helping hand. I will do some things for my community. I am going to pick up the rubbish in the community centre. If my neighbour is not good at English, I will help her/him with her/his English after school. My community will be a good place to live in.
【知识点】
英语话题写作，一般将来时，要点信息整合
【点评】
这篇参考范文完整覆盖了题干给出的全部提示要点，行文逻辑层层递进，从社区整体概况到硬件环境，再到人文氛围，最后落到个人的社区行动，过渡自然流畅，补充的细节让内容更生动，句式搭配合理，既有基础简单句也用条件状语从句丰富表达，完全符合题目的各项写作要求，是一篇质量很高的同话题参考范本。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道写作题首先要先审题，明确主题是“My dream community（我理想中的社区）”，先把表格给出的所有必写要点梳理出来，再按照从整体到局部的逻辑排序：先介绍社区的整体基本概况，再依次介绍配套硬件设施、自然环境，之后描述邻里的人文氛围，最后写自己计划为社区做的事，收尾点题。写作时要确保所有提示要点都不遗漏，适当补充少量生活化细节让行文更流畅，注意描述社区特征用一般现在时，描述未来计划用一般将来时，满足不少于100词的要求，不出现真实校名姓名，保证段落清晰逻辑通顺即可完成写作。
【解析】
1. 承接题干给出的开头句，首先介绍理想社区的基础属性：社区面积很大，但居住的居民不多。
2. 接下来依次介绍社区的配套设施和自然环境：罗列花园、操场、游泳池，补充说明居民可以在这些场所休闲放松，再描述社区树木繁多、空气清新，居住体验舒适。
3. 之后介绍邻里相关内容：先总述邻居都友善热心，再点明部分邻居是拥有不同技能的志愿者，分别列举他们帮居民解决问题、帮老人购物打扫房屋、辅导孩子学习的具体行为，完整覆盖表格给出的要点。
4. 最后介绍自己打算为社区做的两件合理的事，比如捡拾社区垃圾、帮邻居辅导英语，最后收尾点题，点明这是非常适合居住的好地方，全文连贯流畅，满足所有写作要求。
【答案】
One possible version:
My dream community
Hello, I'm happy to tell you something about my dream community. My dream community is very big. But there aren't many people living there. There are lots of trees in the neighbourhood, so the air there is fresh. We have a big garden, a swimming pool and a playground. We can have a good time playing in those places. All my neighbours are nice and helpful. Some of them are volunteers with different skills. If we have any problems, they can help us. They also help old people do some shopping and clean their houses. If children have problems with their lessons, they will give them a helping hand. I will do some things for my community. I am going to pick up the rubbish in the community centre. If my neighbour is not good at English, I will help her/him with her/his English after school. My community will be a good place to live in.
【知识点】
英语话题写作，一般将来时，要点信息整合
【点评】
这篇参考范文完整覆盖了题干给出的全部提示要点，行文逻辑层层递进，从社区整体概况到硬件环境，再到人文氛围，最后落到个人的社区行动，过渡自然流畅，补充的细节让内容更生动，句式搭配合理，既有基础简单句也用条件状语从句丰富表达，完全符合题目的各项写作要求，是一篇质量很高的同话题参考范本。
【难度系数】
0.7
