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线上旅行逐渐变得流行,有人认为它更安全便捷,也有人认为它无法替代真实旅行。你班本周即将开展主题为"Are Online Tours Better than Real Tours?"的辩论赛,请你选择一方观点(网络旅游更好/真实旅行更好),根据下面的写作要点,结合自身经历用英文写一篇短文。
注意:
1.短文须包含表格中所给信息,请增加细节以使文章完整；
2.文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称；
3.词数:80~100。
线上旅行逐渐变得流行,有人认为它更安全便捷,也有人认为它无法替代真实旅行。你班本周即将开展主题为"Are Online Tours Better than Real Tours?"的辩论赛,请你选择一方观点(网络旅游更好/真实旅行更好),根据下面的写作要点,结合自身经历用英文写一篇短文。
注意:
1.短文须包含表格中所给信息,请增加细节以使文章完整；
2.文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称；
3.词数:80~100。
答案
One possible version:
In my view,there's no doubt that real tours are
better than online tours.
We can use all five senses during real tours.
Once I went to the countryside,I could see the green
fields,hear the sound of birds,smell the fragrance of
wild flowers, touch the trees, and even taste the
fresh fruits. This kind of experience is impossible
with online tours. Also, real tours help us make
friends. On a group tour to a museum,I met people
with similar interests. We exchanged ideas and
became friends.
So,real tours offer unforgettable memories and
rich experiences that online tours can't have.
In my view,there's no doubt that real tours are
better than online tours.
We can use all five senses during real tours.
Once I went to the countryside,I could see the green
fields,hear the sound of birds,smell the fragrance of
wild flowers, touch the trees, and even taste the
fresh fruits. This kind of experience is impossible
with online tours. Also, real tours help us make
friends. On a group tour to a museum,I met people
with similar interests. We exchanged ideas and
became friends.
So,real tours offer unforgettable memories and
rich experiences that online tours can't have.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题，首先第一步先选定支持的立场，这里选择支持“真实旅行更好”的观点；第二步梳理题干要求的两个必写要点：一是真实旅行可以调动全部五感，二是真实旅行能帮助我们交友；第三步给每个要点补充贴合生活的个人经历，满足“结合自身经历”的要求，避免内容空洞；最后按照“开篇亮明观点-中间分述带细节的论据-结尾总结升华”的结构组织内容，全程注意不出现真实姓名和校名，控制总词数在80-100之间，保证逻辑通顺、语法正确。
【解析】
1. 首段开门见山，直接亮明核心立场，符合辩论赛立论清晰的表达要求。
2. 主体第一部分对应第一个给定要点：阐述真实旅行中可以动用全部五感，补充自己去乡村游玩的亲身经历，分别列举看绿野、听鸟鸣、闻花香、触树木、尝鲜果的细节，直观体现五感体验是线上旅行无法实现的。
3. 主体第二部分对应第二个给定要点：阐述真实旅行能帮助我们交友，补充自己组团逛博物馆结识同好、交流后成为朋友的经历，让论据更有说服力。
4. 尾段总结，点明真实旅行能提供线上旅行无法拥有的难忘回忆与丰富体验，呼应开篇立场，完成全文逻辑闭环。
【答案】
One possible version:
In my view,there's no doubt that real tours are better than online tours.
We can use all five senses during real tours. Once I went to the countryside,I could see the green fields,hear the sound of birds,smell the fragrance of wild flowers, touch the trees, and even taste the fresh fruits. This kind of experience is impossible with online tours. Also, real tours help us make friends. On a group tour to a museum,I met people with similar interests. We exchanged ideas and became friends.
So,real tours offer unforgettable memories and rich experiences that online tours can't have.
【知识点】
英语观点类写作，细节拓展技巧，五感相关表达
【点评】
这篇短文完全覆盖了题干给出的全部写作要点，补充的两处个人亲身经历贴合日常、说服力强，逻辑衔接流畅自然，没有出现违规的个人信息，词数符合要求，语言表达准确地道，非常契合辩论赛立论短文的场景要求。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道写作题，首先第一步先选定支持的立场，这里选择支持“真实旅行更好”的观点；第二步梳理题干要求的两个必写要点：一是真实旅行可以调动全部五感，二是真实旅行能帮助我们交友；第三步给每个要点补充贴合生活的个人经历，满足“结合自身经历”的要求，避免内容空洞；最后按照“开篇亮明观点-中间分述带细节的论据-结尾总结升华”的结构组织内容，全程注意不出现真实姓名和校名，控制总词数在80-100之间，保证逻辑通顺、语法正确。
【解析】
1. 首段开门见山，直接亮明核心立场，符合辩论赛立论清晰的表达要求。
2. 主体第一部分对应第一个给定要点：阐述真实旅行中可以动用全部五感，补充自己去乡村游玩的亲身经历，分别列举看绿野、听鸟鸣、闻花香、触树木、尝鲜果的细节，直观体现五感体验是线上旅行无法实现的。
3. 主体第二部分对应第二个给定要点：阐述真实旅行能帮助我们交友，补充自己组团逛博物馆结识同好、交流后成为朋友的经历，让论据更有说服力。
4. 尾段总结，点明真实旅行能提供线上旅行无法拥有的难忘回忆与丰富体验，呼应开篇立场，完成全文逻辑闭环。
【答案】
One possible version:
In my view,there's no doubt that real tours are better than online tours.
We can use all five senses during real tours. Once I went to the countryside,I could see the green fields,hear the sound of birds,smell the fragrance of wild flowers, touch the trees, and even taste the fresh fruits. This kind of experience is impossible with online tours. Also, real tours help us make friends. On a group tour to a museum,I met people with similar interests. We exchanged ideas and became friends.
So,real tours offer unforgettable memories and rich experiences that online tours can't have.
【知识点】
英语观点类写作，细节拓展技巧，五感相关表达
【点评】
这篇短文完全覆盖了题干给出的全部写作要点，补充的两处个人亲身经历贴合日常、说服力强，逻辑衔接流畅自然，没有出现违规的个人信息，词数符合要求，语言表达准确地道，非常契合辩论赛立论短文的场景要求。
【难度系数】
0.6
