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请你根据下表给出的信息，写一篇介绍著名钢琴家郎朗的英语短文。
要求:1. 条理清楚，语句通顺;2. 100 词左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数。
Lang Lang is a famous Chinese pianist.
请你根据下表给出的信息，写一篇介绍著名钢琴家郎朗的英语短文。
要求:1. 条理清楚，语句通顺;2. 100 词左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数。
Lang Lang is a famous Chinese pianist.
He was born in a music family on 14 June 1982 in Shenyang, Liaoning Province. At the age of two, Lang Lang showed an interest in playing the piano when he was watching a cartoon and he started learning to play the piano at the age of three.
At five, he took part in a children piano contest and got first place. At nine, he went to Beijing to learn to play the piano.
He gives concerts all over the world every year. He has been presented with lots of international awards.
He is one of the greatest pianists in the 21st century!
答案
写作能力突破
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:本文是一篇人物介绍类说明文,介绍著名钢琴家郎朗。②时态:以一般过去时描述其成长经历,以一般现在时介绍其现在的成就与地位。③提示:写作要点已通过表格清晰列出,需按"个人信息—成长经历—主要成就"的顺序组织内容,可适当添加过渡词,使行文更流畅。
[写作步骤]
第一步,承接开头,介绍郎朗的基本信息(出生日期、出生地、家庭背景);第二步,按时间顺序,详细描述他的成长经历(从产生兴趣到拜师学习);第三步,介绍他在世界范围内的主要成就与获得的荣誉。
[词句积累]
①be born in 出生于 ②show an interest in 对……产生兴趣 ③take part in 参加 ④get first place 获得第一名 ⑤all over the world 全世界
One possible version:
Lang Lang is a famous Chinese pianist. He was born in a music family on 14 June 1982 in Shenyang, Liaoning Province. At the age of two, Lang Lang showed an interest in playing the piano when he was watching a cartoon and he started learning to play the piano at the age of three. At five, he took part in a children piano contest and got first place. At nine, he went to Beijing to learn to play the piano.
He gives concerts all over the world every year. He has been presented with lots of international awards. He is one of the greatest pianists in the 21st century!
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:本文是一篇人物介绍类说明文,介绍著名钢琴家郎朗。②时态:以一般过去时描述其成长经历,以一般现在时介绍其现在的成就与地位。③提示:写作要点已通过表格清晰列出,需按"个人信息—成长经历—主要成就"的顺序组织内容,可适当添加过渡词,使行文更流畅。
[写作步骤]
第一步,承接开头,介绍郎朗的基本信息(出生日期、出生地、家庭背景);第二步,按时间顺序,详细描述他的成长经历(从产生兴趣到拜师学习);第三步,介绍他在世界范围内的主要成就与获得的荣誉。
[词句积累]
①be born in 出生于 ②show an interest in 对……产生兴趣 ③take part in 参加 ④get first place 获得第一名 ⑤all over the world 全世界
One possible version:
Lang Lang is a famous Chinese pianist. He was born in a music family on 14 June 1982 in Shenyang, Liaoning Province. At the age of two, Lang Lang showed an interest in playing the piano when he was watching a cartoon and he started learning to play the piano at the age of three. At five, he took part in a children piano contest and got first place. At nine, he went to Beijing to learn to play the piano.
He gives concerts all over the world every year. He has been presented with lots of international awards. He is one of the greatest pianists in the 21st century!
解析
【分析】
拿到这道题首先要完成审题：明确这是人物介绍类的说明文，核心是介绍郎朗的生平与成就。先确定时态规则：描述过去的出生、成长经历用一般过去时，描述当下的事业成就、行业地位用一般现在时。接下来先把表格里所有信息点逐一列出来避免遗漏，之后按照「基础个人信息→按时间顺序梳理成长经历→介绍当前主要成就」的逻辑排布内容，用表示年龄的过渡短语串联不同阶段的经历，保证条理清晰，最后调整语句让表达通顺，控制总词数在100左右即可。
【解析】
1. 承接给定开头，首先介绍郎朗的基础信息：将出生日期、出生地、家庭背景整合到通顺的句子中，注意时间地点的表达顺序遵循从小到大的规则。
2. 按照2岁、3岁、5岁、9岁的时间顺序依次叙述成长经历，对应翻译每个要点，用上积累的固定短语比如show an interest in、take part in、get first place等，让表达更地道。
3. 最后介绍郎朗的事业成就与行业地位，注意时态切换：用一般现在时描述每年举办音乐会的常规行为，用现在完成时表述已经获得的奖项，最后点出他是21世纪最伟大的钢琴家之一收尾，保证所有要点全部覆盖。
【答案】
One possible version:
Lang Lang is a famous Chinese pianist. He was born in a music family on 14 June 1982 in Shenyang, Liaoning Province. At the age of two, Lang Lang showed an interest in playing the piano when he was watching a cartoon and he started learning to play the piano at the age of three. At five, he took part in a children piano contest and got first place. At nine, he went to Beijing to learn to play the piano.
He gives concerts all over the world every year. He has been presented with lots of international awards. He is one of the greatest pianists in the 21st century!
【知识点】
人物类英语写作，时态辨析运用，固定短语搭配
【点评】
本题属于基础的人物介绍写作题型，所有核心要点都通过表格明确给出，不需要学生自行拓展过多内容，只需要按照时间逻辑串联信息，注意区分过去经历和当下状态对应的不同时态，避免出现语法错误，就能写出符合要求的短文，学生还可以尝试用题目给出的高阶表达替换简单句式，进一步提升作文得分。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道题首先要完成审题：明确这是人物介绍类的说明文，核心是介绍郎朗的生平与成就。先确定时态规则：描述过去的出生、成长经历用一般过去时，描述当下的事业成就、行业地位用一般现在时。接下来先把表格里所有信息点逐一列出来避免遗漏，之后按照「基础个人信息→按时间顺序梳理成长经历→介绍当前主要成就」的逻辑排布内容，用表示年龄的过渡短语串联不同阶段的经历，保证条理清晰，最后调整语句让表达通顺，控制总词数在100左右即可。
【解析】
1. 承接给定开头，首先介绍郎朗的基础信息：将出生日期、出生地、家庭背景整合到通顺的句子中，注意时间地点的表达顺序遵循从小到大的规则。
2. 按照2岁、3岁、5岁、9岁的时间顺序依次叙述成长经历，对应翻译每个要点，用上积累的固定短语比如show an interest in、take part in、get first place等，让表达更地道。
3. 最后介绍郎朗的事业成就与行业地位，注意时态切换：用一般现在时描述每年举办音乐会的常规行为，用现在完成时表述已经获得的奖项，最后点出他是21世纪最伟大的钢琴家之一收尾，保证所有要点全部覆盖。
【答案】
One possible version:
Lang Lang is a famous Chinese pianist. He was born in a music family on 14 June 1982 in Shenyang, Liaoning Province. At the age of two, Lang Lang showed an interest in playing the piano when he was watching a cartoon and he started learning to play the piano at the age of three. At five, he took part in a children piano contest and got first place. At nine, he went to Beijing to learn to play the piano.
He gives concerts all over the world every year. He has been presented with lots of international awards. He is one of the greatest pianists in the 21st century!
【知识点】
人物类英语写作，时态辨析运用，固定短语搭配
【点评】
本题属于基础的人物介绍写作题型，所有核心要点都通过表格明确给出，不需要学生自行拓展过多内容，只需要按照时间逻辑串联信息，注意区分过去经历和当下状态对应的不同时态，避免出现语法错误，就能写出符合要求的短文，学生还可以尝试用题目给出的高阶表达替换简单句式，进一步提升作文得分。
【难度系数】
0.6
