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Ⅲ.写作任务
假设你是李华，某英文网站正在举行“A Person I Admire”的征文活动，请你写一篇短文参加此活动。谈谈你最敬佩的人是谁，他/她是什么样的人，以及你敬佩他/她的原因。
提示词语:outstanding;be committed to(投身于……);stick to
要求:1.短文应包括所有写作要点,可适当发挥;
2.词数:80-120词。
◆思路点拨
◆词句积累
1.引出主题
我最敬佩的人是屠呦呦——一位令人尊敬、才华出众的中国科学家。
2.具体阐述
①
她始终义无反顾地投身于医学研究。
②
我由衷地敬佩她做出的巨大贡献和高尚的品格。
③
尽管她在实验中遭遇了无数艰难险阻,却从未灰心丧气或轻易放弃。
3.总结升华
从她身上,我学会了坚持梦想,勇于和困难做斗争。
◆自我创作
A Person I Admire
◆自我评价
请你简单描述自己作品的亮点和不足:
假设你是李华，某英文网站正在举行“A Person I Admire”的征文活动，请你写一篇短文参加此活动。谈谈你最敬佩的人是谁，他/她是什么样的人，以及你敬佩他/她的原因。
提示词语:outstanding;be committed to(投身于……);stick to
要求:1.短文应包括所有写作要点,可适当发挥;
2.词数:80-120词。
◆思路点拨
◆词句积累
1.引出主题
我最敬佩的人是屠呦呦——一位令人尊敬、才华出众的中国科学家。
2.具体阐述
①
她始终义无反顾地投身于医学研究。
②
我由衷地敬佩她做出的巨大贡献和高尚的品格。
③
尽管她在实验中遭遇了无数艰难险阻,却从未灰心丧气或轻易放弃。
3.总结升华
从她身上,我学会了坚持梦想,勇于和困难做斗争。
◆自我创作
A Person I Admire
◆自我评价
请你简单描述自己作品的亮点和不足:
答案
【词句积累】
1. The person I admire most is Tu Youyou, a respectable and outstanding Chinese scientist.
2. ①She has always been committed to medical research without hesitation.
②I deeply respect her for her great contributions and noble spirits.
③Though she met countless hardships in experiments, she never lost heart or gave up easily.
3. From her, I learn to stick to my dreams and keep fighting against difficulties.
【自我创作】
One possible version:
A Person I Admire
The person I admire most is Tu Youyou, a respectable and outstanding Chinese scientist.
She is gentle, diligent and strong-willed. She has always been committed to medical research without hesitation.
I deeply respect her for her great contributions and noble spirits. She successfully discovered artemisinin, which has saved millions of lives all over the world. She even won the Nobel Prize in Medicine in 2015. Though she met countless hardships in experiments, she never lost heart or gave up easily.
From her, I learn to stick to my dreams and keep fighting against difficulties. I will take her as my role model and strive to become a useful person in the future.
1. The person I admire most is Tu Youyou, a respectable and outstanding Chinese scientist.
2. ①She has always been committed to medical research without hesitation.
②I deeply respect her for her great contributions and noble spirits.
③Though she met countless hardships in experiments, she never lost heart or gave up easily.
3. From her, I learn to stick to my dreams and keep fighting against difficulties.
【自我创作】
One possible version:
A Person I Admire
The person I admire most is Tu Youyou, a respectable and outstanding Chinese scientist.
She is gentle, diligent and strong-willed. She has always been committed to medical research without hesitation.
I deeply respect her for her great contributions and noble spirits. She successfully discovered artemisinin, which has saved millions of lives all over the world. She even won the Nobel Prize in Medicine in 2015. Though she met countless hardships in experiments, she never lost heart or gave up easily.
From her, I learn to stick to my dreams and keep fighting against difficulties. I will take her as my role model and strive to become a useful person in the future.
解析
【分析】
本次写作任务为英文征文“A Person I Admire”，需包含三个核心要点：敬佩的人物、人物特点、敬佩原因，且要用到提示词outstanding、be committed to、stick to。解题思路：1. 确定写作对象为屠呦呦，其事迹明确且符合要求；2. 采用“总-分-总”结构：开头引出敬佩的人及身份，中间阐述人物品质（投身研究、遇困难不放弃）与贡献，结尾写自身感悟；3. 确保覆盖所有要点，使用提示词，控制词数在80-120之间，语句通顺。
【解析】
1. 开头：用提示词outstanding点明屠呦呦的身份，引出主题；2. 中间：用be committed to描述她投身医学研究的态度，用stick to体现她面对实验困难不放弃的品质，补充其核心贡献（发现青蒿素、获诺贝尔医学奖）；3. 结尾：结合自身感悟，呼应主题，完成征文。全程符合词数要求，内容完整，语言连贯。
【答案】
A Person I Admire
The person I admire most is Tu Youyou, a respectable and outstanding Chinese scientist.
She is gentle, diligent and strong-willed. She has always been committed to medical research without hesitation.
I deeply respect her for her great contributions and noble spirits. She successfully discovered artemisinin, which has saved millions of lives all over the world. She even won the Nobel Prize in Medicine in 2015. Though she met countless hardships in experiments, she never lost heart or gave up easily.
From her, I learn to stick to my dreams and keep fighting against difficulties. I will take her as my role model and strive to become a useful person in the future.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、人物介绍类写作、提示词运用
【点评】
范文紧扣征文主题，涵盖所有写作要点，准确使用了指定提示词语，结构清晰严谨，内容充实且结合了屠呦呦的真实事迹，语言流畅自然，符合词数要求，是一篇符合征文要求的优秀作品。
【难度系数】
0.6
本次写作任务为英文征文“A Person I Admire”，需包含三个核心要点：敬佩的人物、人物特点、敬佩原因，且要用到提示词outstanding、be committed to、stick to。解题思路：1. 确定写作对象为屠呦呦，其事迹明确且符合要求；2. 采用“总-分-总”结构：开头引出敬佩的人及身份，中间阐述人物品质（投身研究、遇困难不放弃）与贡献，结尾写自身感悟；3. 确保覆盖所有要点，使用提示词，控制词数在80-120之间，语句通顺。
【解析】
1. 开头：用提示词outstanding点明屠呦呦的身份，引出主题；2. 中间：用be committed to描述她投身医学研究的态度，用stick to体现她面对实验困难不放弃的品质，补充其核心贡献（发现青蒿素、获诺贝尔医学奖）；3. 结尾：结合自身感悟，呼应主题，完成征文。全程符合词数要求，内容完整，语言连贯。
【答案】
A Person I Admire
The person I admire most is Tu Youyou, a respectable and outstanding Chinese scientist.
She is gentle, diligent and strong-willed. She has always been committed to medical research without hesitation.
I deeply respect her for her great contributions and noble spirits. She successfully discovered artemisinin, which has saved millions of lives all over the world. She even won the Nobel Prize in Medicine in 2015. Though she met countless hardships in experiments, she never lost heart or gave up easily.
From her, I learn to stick to my dreams and keep fighting against difficulties. I will take her as my role model and strive to become a useful person in the future.
【知识点】
英语应用文写作、人物介绍类写作、提示词运用
【点评】
范文紧扣征文主题，涵盖所有写作要点，准确使用了指定提示词语，结构清晰严谨，内容充实且结合了屠呦呦的真实事迹，语言流畅自然，符合词数要求，是一篇符合征文要求的优秀作品。
【难度系数】
0.6
