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假设你是安迪(Andy)，请你根据提示，写一封邮件给你的好朋友约翰(John)，向他介绍你的学校。
要求:1. 覆盖要点,内容完整,可适当发挥。2. 不少于80词,已给出部分不计入总词数。
假设你是安迪(Andy)，请你根据提示，写一封邮件给你的好朋友约翰(John)，向他介绍你的学校。
要求:1. 覆盖要点,内容完整,可适当发挥。2. 不少于80词,已给出部分不计入总词数。
答案
Dear John,
Long time no see. I'd like to tell you something about my new school, Moonlight Middle School.
Our school has 3 grades, and there are 27 classes in all. There are 120 teachers here, and all of them are very kind to us. We have a big library with many different kinds of books. We can read books there or borrow books to take home after class. There is also a large playground, my classmates and I often play sports and have a good time there after school. My school is very nice, I love it so much.
Welcome to visit my school when you are free!
Yours,
Andy
Long time no see. I'd like to tell you something about my new school, Moonlight Middle School.
Our school has 3 grades, and there are 27 classes in all. There are 120 teachers here, and all of them are very kind to us. We have a big library with many different kinds of books. We can read books there or borrow books to take home after class. There is also a large playground, my classmates and I often play sports and have a good time there after school. My school is very nice, I love it so much.
Welcome to visit my school when you are free!
Yours,
Andy
解析
【分析】
这是一封介绍学校的英文邮件，写作思路如下：首先遵循英文书信格式，开头问候并点明写信目的；接着依次覆盖题目给出的三个核心要点：学校的年级与班级数量、老师的数量及特点、学校的特色场所（图书馆、操场），并适当补充合理细节让内容更丰富；最后结尾发出邀请，表达对学校的喜爱，满足词数要求。
【解析】
按照英文邮件的规范结构写作：1. 开头段：问候后引出介绍学校的主题；2. 主体段：分别介绍3个年级共27个班、120位友善的老师，补充图书馆可读书借书、操场可运动的细节；3. 结尾段：发出来访邀请，最后落款。
【答案】
Dear John,
Long time no see. I'd like to tell you something about my new school, Moonlight Middle School.
Our school has 3 grades, and there are 27 classes in all. There are 120 teachers here, and all of them are very kind to us. We have a big library with many different kinds of books. We can read books there or borrow books to take home after class. There is also a large playground, my classmates and I often play sports and have a good time there after school. My school is very nice, I love it so much.
Welcome to visit my school when you are free!
Yours,
Andy
【知识点】
英文书信写作、要点整合、英语表达运用
【点评】
范文格式规范，完整覆盖所有给定要点，补充的细节合理自然，语言流畅，符合初中英语写作要求，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
这是一封介绍学校的英文邮件，写作思路如下：首先遵循英文书信格式，开头问候并点明写信目的；接着依次覆盖题目给出的三个核心要点：学校的年级与班级数量、老师的数量及特点、学校的特色场所（图书馆、操场），并适当补充合理细节让内容更丰富；最后结尾发出邀请，表达对学校的喜爱，满足词数要求。
【解析】
按照英文邮件的规范结构写作：1. 开头段：问候后引出介绍学校的主题；2. 主体段：分别介绍3个年级共27个班、120位友善的老师，补充图书馆可读书借书、操场可运动的细节；3. 结尾段：发出来访邀请，最后落款。
【答案】
Dear John,
Long time no see. I'd like to tell you something about my new school, Moonlight Middle School.
Our school has 3 grades, and there are 27 classes in all. There are 120 teachers here, and all of them are very kind to us. We have a big library with many different kinds of books. We can read books there or borrow books to take home after class. There is also a large playground, my classmates and I often play sports and have a good time there after school. My school is very nice, I love it so much.
Welcome to visit my school when you are free!
Yours,
Andy
【知识点】
英文书信写作、要点整合、英语表达运用
【点评】
范文格式规范，完整覆盖所有给定要点，补充的细节合理自然，语言流畅，符合初中英语写作要求，是一篇优秀的范文。
【难度系数】
0.6
[名师点评]
文章主题明确，行文流畅，先介绍自己所在的学校，包括年级和班级的数量，接着提到学校的一些场所以及老师，最后表达对学校的喜爱。文章层次分明，逻辑性强。
① 开门见山，点明主题，介绍自己现在所就读的学校。
② 运用 thousands of、“borrow ... from”、In fact 和 on the internet 等短语，增强了文章的表现力，使描述更具体生动。
③ 短语 be kind to 表达了老师对学生的关爱之情，体现出作者对学校的喜爱之情。
素材积累＞＞
[开头句]
1. I am at a new school now too. （个人现状）
2. I want to tell you about my new school. （内容目的）
3. I study at Sunshine Middle School. （所在学校）
4. The school is old, but I like it. （个人感受）
[中间句]
1. My school is big and clean. （学校环境）
2. There are five classroom buildings. （校园设施）
3. They show school news and stories about star students and teachers—our role models. （设施用途）
4. The library is the perfect place for you to enjoy a wonderful book and some quiet time! （设施评价）
[结尾句]
1. Come and enjoy your school life here. （邀请来访）
2. I love my school very much. （情感表达）
3. I am happy to be a student here. （个人感受）
4. I can learn a lot and have a good time at school. （校园收获）
[名言警句]
1. A school is a second home.
学校是第二个家。
2. A good school lights up our future.
好学校照亮我们的未来。
3. School is not just about learning facts, but about shaping the character.
上学不仅仅是学习事实，更是塑造品格。
写作演练＞＞
假设你是戴维(David)，你校育才中学正在进行以“My school”为主题的征文活动。请你根据要点提示的内容，写一篇70词左右的英语短文介绍你的学校。
要点:1. What is your school like? 2. What are your favourite places? Why? 3. How do you find your school?
[思路点拨]
① 时态:一般现在时。② 人称:以第三人称为主。③ 首先介绍学校概况，接着描述自己喜欢的场所和具体原因，最后对学校进行评价。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
（更多精彩作文素材见“强基手册”）
文章主题明确，行文流畅，先介绍自己所在的学校，包括年级和班级的数量，接着提到学校的一些场所以及老师，最后表达对学校的喜爱。文章层次分明，逻辑性强。
① 开门见山，点明主题，介绍自己现在所就读的学校。
② 运用 thousands of、“borrow ... from”、In fact 和 on the internet 等短语，增强了文章的表现力，使描述更具体生动。
③ 短语 be kind to 表达了老师对学生的关爱之情，体现出作者对学校的喜爱之情。
素材积累＞＞
[开头句]
1. I am at a new school now too. （个人现状）
2. I want to tell you about my new school. （内容目的）
3. I study at Sunshine Middle School. （所在学校）
4. The school is old, but I like it. （个人感受）
[中间句]
1. My school is big and clean. （学校环境）
2. There are five classroom buildings. （校园设施）
3. They show school news and stories about star students and teachers—our role models. （设施用途）
4. The library is the perfect place for you to enjoy a wonderful book and some quiet time! （设施评价）
[结尾句]
1. Come and enjoy your school life here. （邀请来访）
2. I love my school very much. （情感表达）
3. I am happy to be a student here. （个人感受）
4. I can learn a lot and have a good time at school. （校园收获）
[名言警句]
1. A school is a second home.
学校是第二个家。
2. A good school lights up our future.
好学校照亮我们的未来。
3. School is not just about learning facts, but about shaping the character.
上学不仅仅是学习事实，更是塑造品格。
写作演练＞＞
假设你是戴维(David)，你校育才中学正在进行以“My school”为主题的征文活动。请你根据要点提示的内容，写一篇70词左右的英语短文介绍你的学校。
要点:1. What is your school like? 2. What are your favourite places? Why? 3. How do you find your school?
[思路点拨]
① 时态:一般现在时。② 人称:以第三人称为主。③ 首先介绍学校概况，接着描述自己喜欢的场所和具体原因，最后对学校进行评价。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
（更多精彩作文素材见“强基手册”）
答案
写作专训
One possible version:
I am David, a Grade 7 student at Yucai Middle School. My school is big and clean. There are five classroom buildings. My classroom is on the first floor.
My favourite places are the playground and the hall. After school, I like to play ball games in the playground with my classmates. We can have meetings in our school hall, and some events take place there.
My school is great. I like it very much.
One possible version:
I am David, a Grade 7 student at Yucai Middle School. My school is big and clean. There are five classroom buildings. My classroom is on the first floor.
My favourite places are the playground and the hall. After school, I like to play ball games in the playground with my classmates. We can have meetings in our school hall, and some events take place there.
My school is great. I like it very much.
解析
【分析】
本题是七年级英语写作题，要求以David的身份写一篇70词左右的“My school”征文。解题思路：首先明确写作核心要点：介绍学校概况、说明喜欢的场所及原因、评价学校；确定时态为一般现在时，人称用第一人称；按照给定的三段结构展开：第一段点明身份与学校基本情况，第二段阐述喜欢的场所及原因，第三段表达对学校的评价与喜爱；最后确保语句通顺、覆盖所有要点、符合词数要求。
【解析】
1. 确定写作基础：文体为记叙文，时态用一般现在时，人称以第一人称（David的自述）为主。
2. 第一段：开篇点明身份（I am David, a Grade 7 student at...），介绍学校基本特征（如big and clean，有教学楼等）。
3. 第二段：列出喜欢的场所（playground、hall），分别说明原因：课后在操场和同学打球，礼堂用于开会和举办活动。
4. 第三段：总结对学校的评价（great），表达喜爱之情（I like it very much）。
5. 调整语句，确保词数约70，逻辑连贯，符合征文要求。
【答案】
I am David, a Grade 7 student at Yucai Middle School. My school is big and clean. There are five classroom buildings. My classroom is on the first floor. My favourite places are the playground and the hall. After school, I like to play ball games in the playground with my classmates. We can have meetings in our school hall, and some events take place there. My school is great. I like it very much.
【知识点】
英语短文写作、一般现在时运用、要点表达
【点评】
本题围绕“My school”主题设置写作任务，给出明确的要点与结构，帮助学生梳理写作逻辑，考查初中低年级学生的英语整合表达能力，符合七年级英语写作的基础训练要求，能有效提升学生的书面表达能力。
【难度系数】
0.5
本题是七年级英语写作题，要求以David的身份写一篇70词左右的“My school”征文。解题思路：首先明确写作核心要点：介绍学校概况、说明喜欢的场所及原因、评价学校；确定时态为一般现在时，人称用第一人称；按照给定的三段结构展开：第一段点明身份与学校基本情况，第二段阐述喜欢的场所及原因，第三段表达对学校的评价与喜爱；最后确保语句通顺、覆盖所有要点、符合词数要求。
【解析】
1. 确定写作基础：文体为记叙文，时态用一般现在时，人称以第一人称（David的自述）为主。
2. 第一段：开篇点明身份（I am David, a Grade 7 student at...），介绍学校基本特征（如big and clean，有教学楼等）。
3. 第二段：列出喜欢的场所（playground、hall），分别说明原因：课后在操场和同学打球，礼堂用于开会和举办活动。
4. 第三段：总结对学校的评价（great），表达喜爱之情（I like it very much）。
5. 调整语句，确保词数约70，逻辑连贯，符合征文要求。
【答案】
I am David, a Grade 7 student at Yucai Middle School. My school is big and clean. There are five classroom buildings. My classroom is on the first floor. My favourite places are the playground and the hall. After school, I like to play ball games in the playground with my classmates. We can have meetings in our school hall, and some events take place there. My school is great. I like it very much.
【知识点】
英语短文写作、一般现在时运用、要点表达
【点评】
本题围绕“My school”主题设置写作任务，给出明确的要点与结构，帮助学生梳理写作逻辑，考查初中低年级学生的英语整合表达能力，符合七年级英语写作的基础训练要求，能有效提升学生的书面表达能力。
【难度系数】
0.5
