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三、提升题 书面表达。
校报正在开展以“我心中的榜样”为主题的征文活动。请你根据以下写作要点提示，写一篇短文投稿，先描述你最敬佩的人，再说说你敬佩这个人的原因，最后谈谈这个人对你产生的影响。
写作要点：
1. Who do you admire?
2. Why do you admire him / her?
3. How does he / she inspire you?
要求：
1. 短文应包括所有的写作要点，条理清晰，行文连贯，可适当发挥；
2. 短文中不能出现真实的人名、校名、地名等信息；
3. 词数80—120，短文开头已给出，不计入总词数。
Inspiring people show us the way forward.
校报正在开展以“我心中的榜样”为主题的征文活动。请你根据以下写作要点提示，写一篇短文投稿，先描述你最敬佩的人，再说说你敬佩这个人的原因，最后谈谈这个人对你产生的影响。
写作要点：
1. Who do you admire?
2. Why do you admire him / her?
3. How does he / she inspire you?
要求：
1. 短文应包括所有的写作要点，条理清晰，行文连贯，可适当发挥；
2. 短文中不能出现真实的人名、校名、地名等信息；
3. 词数80—120，短文开头已给出，不计入总词数。
Inspiring people show us the way forward.
As for me, the person I admire the most is my English teacher.
She is not only knowledgeable but also very patient.
Every day, she prepares lessons carefully and explains difficult points clearly.
Whenever we have problems in learning English, she always spends time helping us solve them.
What moves me most is that she never gives up on any student.
She often encourages us to keep practising, even when we make slow progress.
Her love for teaching deeply inspires me.
She teaches me that learning a language needs hard work.
Her patience also teaches me to be kind and helpful to others.
I will try my best to study hard and make my teacher proud.
答案
As for me, the person I admire the most is my English teacher.
She is not only knowledgeable but also very patient. Every day, she prepares lessons carefully and explains difficult points clearly. Whenever we have problems in learning English, she always spends time helping us solve them. What moves me most is that she never gives up on any student. She often encourages us to keep practising, even when we make slow progress.
Her love for teaching deeply inspires me. She teaches me that learning a language needs hard work. Her patience also teaches me to be kind and helpful to others. I will try my best to study hard and make my teacher proud.
She is not only knowledgeable but also very patient. Every day, she prepares lessons carefully and explains difficult points clearly. Whenever we have problems in learning English, she always spends time helping us solve them. What moves me most is that she never gives up on any student. She often encourages us to keep practising, even when we make slow progress.
Her love for teaching deeply inspires me. She teaches me that learning a language needs hard work. Her patience also teaches me to be kind and helpful to others. I will try my best to study hard and make my teacher proud.
解析
【分析】
本题为以“我心中的榜样”为主题的书面表达题，需覆盖三个核心写作要点：①明确敬佩的人物；②阐述敬佩该人物的原因；③说明该人物对自己的影响。开头已给定，写作时需承接开头，围绕要点展开，注意不出现真实人名、校名等信息，词数控制在80-120，行文连贯、条理清晰。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，点明敬佩对象：As for me, the person I admire the most is my English teacher.
2. 阐述敬佩原因：从老师的专业能力与责任心切入，写其备课认真、讲解清晰，耐心帮助学生、不放弃任何学生的品质。
3. 说明人物对自己的影响：点明老师教会自己学习需努力、待人要友善的道理。
4. 收尾表达决心：呼应主题，表达自己会努力学习不辜负老师的期望。
【答案】
As for me, the person I admire the most is my English teacher.
She is not only knowledgeable but also very patient. Every day, she prepares lessons carefully and explains difficult points clearly. Whenever we have problems in learning English, she always spends time helping us solve them. What moves me most is that she never gives up on any student. She often encourages us to keep practising, even when we make slow progress.
Her love for teaching deeply inspires me. She teaches me that learning a language needs hard work. Her patience also teaches me to be kind and helpful to others. I will try my best to study hard and make my teacher proud.
【知识点】
英语书面表达、话题作文、要点式写作
【点评】
本文紧扣“我心中的榜样”主题，完整覆盖所有写作要点，内容具体充实，情感真挚自然，语言流畅连贯，符合词数要求，是一篇符合征文要求的优秀短文。
【难度系数】
0.6
本题为以“我心中的榜样”为主题的书面表达题，需覆盖三个核心写作要点：①明确敬佩的人物；②阐述敬佩该人物的原因；③说明该人物对自己的影响。开头已给定，写作时需承接开头，围绕要点展开，注意不出现真实人名、校名等信息，词数控制在80-120，行文连贯、条理清晰。
【解析】
1. 承接开头，点明敬佩对象：As for me, the person I admire the most is my English teacher.
2. 阐述敬佩原因：从老师的专业能力与责任心切入，写其备课认真、讲解清晰，耐心帮助学生、不放弃任何学生的品质。
3. 说明人物对自己的影响：点明老师教会自己学习需努力、待人要友善的道理。
4. 收尾表达决心：呼应主题，表达自己会努力学习不辜负老师的期望。
【答案】
As for me, the person I admire the most is my English teacher.
She is not only knowledgeable but also very patient. Every day, she prepares lessons carefully and explains difficult points clearly. Whenever we have problems in learning English, she always spends time helping us solve them. What moves me most is that she never gives up on any student. She often encourages us to keep practising, even when we make slow progress.
Her love for teaching deeply inspires me. She teaches me that learning a language needs hard work. Her patience also teaches me to be kind and helpful to others. I will try my best to study hard and make my teacher proud.
【知识点】
英语书面表达、话题作文、要点式写作
【点评】
本文紧扣“我心中的榜样”主题，完整覆盖所有写作要点，内容具体充实，情感真挚自然，语言流畅连贯，符合词数要求，是一篇符合征文要求的优秀短文。
【难度系数】
0.6
