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三、提升题 书面表达。
学校英语杂志社正在开展以“Changes”为主题的征文活动。请你根据以下写作要点提示，写一篇短文投稿，先描述你小学时的生活(衣食住行等方面)，再说说你现在生活中的变化，最后谈谈这些变化对你产生的影响以及你对这些变化的看法。
写作要点:
1. What was your life like in the past?
2. How has it changed now?
3. What do you think of these changes?
要求:
1. 短文应包括所有的写作要点，条理清晰，行文连贯，可适当发挥；
2. 短文中不能出现真实的人名、校名、地名等信息；
3. 词数 80—120，短文开头已给出，不计入总词数。
Life is always changing.
学校英语杂志社正在开展以“Changes”为主题的征文活动。请你根据以下写作要点提示，写一篇短文投稿，先描述你小学时的生活(衣食住行等方面)，再说说你现在生活中的变化，最后谈谈这些变化对你产生的影响以及你对这些变化的看法。
写作要点:
1. What was your life like in the past?
2. How has it changed now?
3. What do you think of these changes?
要求:
1. 短文应包括所有的写作要点，条理清晰，行文连贯，可适当发挥；
2. 短文中不能出现真实的人名、校名、地名等信息；
3. 词数 80—120，短文开头已给出，不计入总词数。
Life is always changing.
答案
Life is always changing. Great changes have taken place in my life over the past years.
When I was in primary school, I lived in a small old house. The neighbourhood was not very clean. I usually walked to school. I ate simple food and wore old clothes. My life was easy but not convenient.
Now I live in a big, bright flat. My community is clean and beautiful with many trees and flowers. The streets are wide. I can take the bus to school. I have nicer clothes to wear and healthy food to eat. I also learn to plan my time well.
I think these changes are great. They make my life better and help me grow. I really enjoy my new life.
When I was in primary school, I lived in a small old house. The neighbourhood was not very clean. I usually walked to school. I ate simple food and wore old clothes. My life was easy but not convenient.
Now I live in a big, bright flat. My community is clean and beautiful with many trees and flowers. The streets are wide. I can take the bus to school. I have nicer clothes to wear and healthy food to eat. I also learn to plan my time well.
I think these changes are great. They make my life better and help me grow. I really enjoy my new life.
解析
【分析】
本次书面表达需围绕主题“Changes”完成征文，核心是覆盖三个写作要点：1. 用一般过去时描述小学时的生活（从住、行、衣食等具体方面展开）；2. 对应过去的方面，用一般现在时/现在完成时说明现在的变化；3. 表达对这些变化的看法。需衔接给定开头，避免真实信息，控制词数80-120，确保内容连贯、条理清晰。
【解析】
首先衔接给定开头，用一般过去时描述小学时的生活细节：住小旧房子、步行上学、饮食简单、穿旧衣，点明当时生活易但不便；接着用一般现在时写现在的变化：住明亮公寓、社区干净美观、乘公交上学、衣食更优质，还学会规划时间；最后表达看法，认为变化很棒，让生活更好、助力成长，符合征文要求。
【答案】
Life is always changing. Great changes have taken place in my life over the past years.
When I was in primary school, I lived in a small old house. The neighbourhood was not very clean. I usually walked to school. I ate simple food and wore old clothes. My life was easy but not convenient.
Now I live in a big, bright flat. My community is clean and beautiful with many trees and flowers. The streets are wide. I can take the bus to school. I have nicer clothes to wear and healthy food to eat. I also learn to plan my time well.
I think these changes are great. They make my life better and help me grow. I really enjoy my new life.
【知识点】
英语话题写作、时态运用、生活类话题表达
【点评】
该作文紧扣“Changes”主题，完整覆盖所有写作要点，时态使用准确恰当，内容具体充实，条理清晰，行文连贯，表达了积极的情感态度，符合征文要求，是一篇优秀的书面表达。
【难度系数】
0.4
本次书面表达需围绕主题“Changes”完成征文，核心是覆盖三个写作要点：1. 用一般过去时描述小学时的生活（从住、行、衣食等具体方面展开）；2. 对应过去的方面，用一般现在时/现在完成时说明现在的变化；3. 表达对这些变化的看法。需衔接给定开头，避免真实信息，控制词数80-120，确保内容连贯、条理清晰。
【解析】
首先衔接给定开头，用一般过去时描述小学时的生活细节：住小旧房子、步行上学、饮食简单、穿旧衣，点明当时生活易但不便；接着用一般现在时写现在的变化：住明亮公寓、社区干净美观、乘公交上学、衣食更优质，还学会规划时间；最后表达看法，认为变化很棒，让生活更好、助力成长，符合征文要求。
【答案】
Life is always changing. Great changes have taken place in my life over the past years.
When I was in primary school, I lived in a small old house. The neighbourhood was not very clean. I usually walked to school. I ate simple food and wore old clothes. My life was easy but not convenient.
Now I live in a big, bright flat. My community is clean and beautiful with many trees and flowers. The streets are wide. I can take the bus to school. I have nicer clothes to wear and healthy food to eat. I also learn to plan my time well.
I think these changes are great. They make my life better and help me grow. I really enjoy my new life.
【知识点】
英语话题写作、时态运用、生活类话题表达
【点评】
该作文紧扣“Changes”主题，完整覆盖所有写作要点，时态使用准确恰当，内容具体充实，条理清晰，行文连贯，表达了积极的情感态度，符合征文要求，是一篇优秀的书面表达。
【难度系数】
0.4
