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[经典例题]
假设你是安迪(Andy),请你根据下面的提示,写一封邮件给你的好朋友约翰(John),向他介绍你的学校。
要求:1. 覆盖要点,内容完整,可适当发挥。2. 不少于70词,已给出部分(画直线部分)不计入总词数。
[高分范文]
Dear John, Thanks for your last email.
① Now I study at Moonlight Middle School. The school is big. It has 3 grades and 27 classes. There are many nice places in the school. ② The library has thousands of books. We can borrow them from the library. In fact, the reading room is not big, but we can read newspapers and magazines on the internet there. After school, I like to play ball games in the playground with my classmates.
There are 120 teachers in the school. ③ They are all kind to us. I love my school.
Yours, Andy
[名师点评]
文章主题明确,行文流畅,先介绍自己所在的学校,包括年级和班级的数量,接着提到学校的一些场所以及老师,最后表达对学校的喜爱。文章层次分明,逻辑性强。
[经典例题]
假设你是安迪(Andy),请你根据下面的提示,写一封邮件给你的好朋友约翰(John),向他介绍你的学校。
要求:1. 覆盖要点,内容完整,可适当发挥。2. 不少于70词,已给出部分(画直线部分)不计入总词数。
[高分范文]
Dear John, Thanks for your last email.
① Now I study at Moonlight Middle School. The school is big. It has 3 grades and 27 classes. There are many nice places in the school. ② The library has thousands of books. We can borrow them from the library. In fact, the reading room is not big, but we can read newspapers and magazines on the internet there. After school, I like to play ball games in the playground with my classmates.
There are 120 teachers in the school. ③ They are all kind to us. I love my school.
Yours, Andy
[名师点评]
文章主题明确,行文流畅,先介绍自己所在的学校,包括年级和班级的数量,接着提到学校的一些场所以及老师,最后表达对学校的喜爱。文章层次分明,逻辑性强。
答案
Dear John,
Thanks for your last email.
Now I study at Moonlight Middle School. The school is big and nice. It has 3 grades and 27 classes. There are many great places in the school. The library has thousands of different books. We can borrow all kinds of books we like from the library. The reading room is quiet, and we can also read newspapers and magazines or look up information on the internet there. After school, I love to play ball games with my classmates on the large playground, and we always have lots of fun.
There are 120 teachers in the school. They are all kind to us. I love my school very much.
Yours,
Andy
Thanks for your last email.
Now I study at Moonlight Middle School. The school is big and nice. It has 3 grades and 27 classes. There are many great places in the school. The library has thousands of different books. We can borrow all kinds of books we like from the library. The reading room is quiet, and we can also read newspapers and magazines or look up information on the internet there. After school, I love to play ball games with my classmates on the large playground, and we always have lots of fun.
There are 120 teachers in the school. They are all kind to us. I love my school very much.
Yours,
Andy
解析
本题要求以安迪的身份给好友约翰写一封介绍自己学校的邮件，写作注意要点：1. 完整覆盖所有提示信息：说明学校的年级和班级总数、120位友善的教师、学校的图书馆和操场等特色场所，可适当补充合理细节；2. 邮件格式规范，使用七年级已掌握的词汇和短语，如thousands of、borrow sth from sp、be kind to sb等，保证词数不少于70，行文逻辑清晰，按照先介绍学校基本规模、再介绍校内特色场所、最后介绍教师并抒发对学校的喜爱的顺序展开即可。
写作演练
[小试身手]
假设你是戴维(David),你校育才中学正在进行以“My school”为主题的征文活动。请你根据要点提示的内容,写一篇70词左右的英语短文介绍你的学校。
要点:1. What is your school like?
2. What are your favourite places? Why?
3. How do you find your school?
[思路点拨]
①时态:一般现在时。②人称:第一人称和第三人称。③首先介绍学校概况,接着描述自己喜欢的场所和具体原因,最后对学校进行评价。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
（更多精彩作文素材见“背记手册”）
[小试身手]
假设你是戴维(David),你校育才中学正在进行以“My school”为主题的征文活动。请你根据要点提示的内容,写一篇70词左右的英语短文介绍你的学校。
要点:1. What is your school like?
2. What are your favourite places? Why?
3. How do you find your school?
[思路点拨]
①时态:一般现在时。②人称:第一人称和第三人称。③首先介绍学校概况,接着描述自己喜欢的场所和具体原因,最后对学校进行评价。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
（更多精彩作文素材见“背记手册”）
答案
One possible version:
I am David, a Grade 7 student at Yucai Middle School. My school is big and clean. There are five classroom buildings. My classroom is on the first floor.
My favourite places are the playground and the hall. After school, I like to play ball games in the playground with my classmates. We can have meetings in our school hall, and some events take place there.
My school is great. I like it very much.
I am David, a Grade 7 student at Yucai Middle School. My school is big and clean. There are five classroom buildings. My classroom is on the first floor.
My favourite places are the playground and the hall. After school, I like to play ball games in the playground with my classmates. We can have meetings in our school hall, and some events take place there.
My school is great. I like it very much.
