谋篇布局

习作演练
My School Trip
All the students and teachers in our school

习作演练
One possible version:
My School Trip
All the students and teachers in our school
went to an amusement park by bus for a trip on 1st
June. It was a fine day.
When we got there, we took many pictures at
the gate. Then I went to ride the roller coaster with
some of my friends. It was so exciting. At noon, we
had lunch at a restaurant. I thought the meal was not
very nice. So I didn't eat much. Luckily, the stores
here sold different kinds of things. They were very
interesting but expensive.
We spent a whole day there. We were tired,but
we still felt happy. We really had a wonderful day
and I will never forget it.

【分析】
这是一篇提纲引导式的英语记叙文写作，解题时我们可以顺着思维导图的三层结构逐步完成内容填充：
1. 先处理开篇部分：题目已经给出半句话，我们只需要按照提示补充完整旅行的时间、目的地、交通方式，还可以额外加一句天气描述让开篇更自然，注意叙事类文章描述过去发生的事，全部动词要使用一般过去式。
2. 再填充正文部分：按照提示的时间顺序框架，依次写抵达后的活动、自己参与的游玩项目、项目的感受、中午的就餐安排、自己对就餐的想法，还可以补充1-2个游乐园的小细节让内容更饱满，符合真实游玩的逻辑。
3. 最后完成结尾部分：按照提示的转折句式，写出游玩后的疲惫感，转折突出旅行的开心，最后点题说明这次旅行很难忘，收束全文。
【解析】
我们按照谋篇布局的要求分步完成写作：
步骤1：开篇补全，交代基础信息：顺着给出的开头，补充出行目的、交通方式、具体日期，额外说明当天天气晴朗，完成开篇内容。
步骤2：正文按时间线展开：
① 写抵达游乐园后大家先在门口拍照留念；
② 接着写自己和朋友去坐过山车，感受非常刺激；
③ 中午大家在附近餐馆就餐，自己觉得饭菜口味一般没吃太多，补充提到游乐园周边商店的商品很有趣但价格偏贵的小细节，丰富内容。
步骤3：结尾收尾，抒发感受：说明大家玩了一整天，虽然身体疲惫，但整体非常开心，这次旅行十分难忘，完成全文。
完整写作内容如下：
My School Trip
All the students and teachers in our school went to an amusement park by bus for a trip on 1st June. It was a fine day.
When we got there, we took many pictures at the gate. Then I went to ride the roller coaster with some of my friends. It was so exciting. At noon, we had lunch at a restaurant. I thought the meal was not very nice. So I didn't eat much. Luckily, the stores here sold different kinds of things. They were very interesting but expensive.
We spent a whole day there. We were tired,but we still felt happy. We really had a wonderful day and I will never forget it.
【答案】
One possible version:
My School Trip
All the students and teachers in our school went to an amusement park by bus for a trip on 1st June. It was a fine day.
When we got there, we took many pictures at the gate. Then I went to ride the roller coaster with some of my friends. It was so exciting. At noon, we had lunch at a restaurant. I thought the meal was not very nice. So I didn't eat much. Luckily, the stores here sold different kinds of things. They were very interesting but expensive.
We spent a whole day there. We were tired,but we still felt happy. We really had a wonderful day and I will never forget it.
【知识点】
一般过去时，记叙文写作，话题作文谋篇布局
【点评】
本篇范文完全贴合给出的思维导图框架，以时间为叙事主线逻辑清晰，所有提示给出的句式都自然融入行文，没有生硬拼凑的痕迹，时态统一使用一般过去时符合叙事要求，补充的小细节让内容真实饱满，难度适配初中低年级的写作要求，学生也可以替换游玩场景为农场、博物馆等，套用该结构完成同主题写作。
【难度系数】
0.7

创新实践
◆Step 1 Share your memorable(难忘的) day and complete the list below.
My Memorable Day

◆Step 2 Use the words and phrases in this unit to describe your memorable day.

Step 1
| Item | Detailed Information(具体信息) |
|---------------|-|
| Date | June 15th, 2023 |
| Place | City Zoo |
| Things | I went to the zoo with my classmates, fed giraffes, watched the elephant show and took many photos. |
| Feelings | I felt excited and happy all the time. |
| What to learn | We should be friendly to animals and protect them. |
Step 2
Last Saturday was June 15th. I had a really memorable day with my classmates. We went to the City Zoo. First, we fed the lovely giraffes with fresh leaves. Then we watched the wonderful elephant show. The elephants could do many funny things like playing soccer! We took quite a few nice photos there. I felt so excited and happy that day. I learned that animals are our friends, and we need to love and protect them.

本题要求分享难忘的一天，先完成信息清单，再用本单元的单词和短语描述这一天。填写清单需明确日期、地点、所做之事、内心感受以及学到的内容；描述短文要使用一般过去时，运用七年级下册所学的词汇与短语，保证语句通顺、符合要求。