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我国近几年来各个领域都发生了巨大的变化并取得了伟大的成就。请你以"Amazing China"为题,从中学生的角度介绍你身边的变化。词数80~100。
参考词汇:free breakfast,shared bikes,high-speed train,underground,community service,life quality
Amazing China
I'm very proud of my country—China!
Actually,our lives have changed a lot in recent years.
我国近几年来各个领域都发生了巨大的变化并取得了伟大的成就。请你以"Amazing China"为题,从中学生的角度介绍你身边的变化。词数80~100。
参考词汇:free breakfast,shared bikes,high-speed train,underground,community service,life quality
Amazing China
I'm very proud of my country—China!
Actually,our lives have changed a lot in recent years.
答案
One possible version:
Amazing China
I'm very proud of my country—China!
Actually, our lives have changed a lot in recent
years.
First, there are some shared bikes around us.
They're very helpful and convenient for us to go to
places not too far away. Secondly, lots of restaurants
offer the elderly and disabled people free breakfast.
Besides, the government provide textbooks for all
the primary and junior middle school students for
free. Thirdly, you can see high-speed trains and the
underground everywhere in China. Moreover, all
kinds of community services are good for Chinese
people, including medical treatment, education and
other parts of our lives. Thanks to the government,
people are living a better life.
How amazing China is! We're proud of our
country.
Amazing China
I'm very proud of my country—China!
Actually, our lives have changed a lot in recent
years.
First, there are some shared bikes around us.
They're very helpful and convenient for us to go to
places not too far away. Secondly, lots of restaurants
offer the elderly and disabled people free breakfast.
Besides, the government provide textbooks for all
the primary and junior middle school students for
free. Thirdly, you can see high-speed trains and the
underground everywhere in China. Moreover, all
kinds of community services are good for Chinese
people, including medical treatment, education and
other parts of our lives. Thanks to the government,
people are living a better life.
How amazing China is! We're proud of our
country.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题首先要明确核心要求：主题为"Amazing China"，以中学生视角介绍身边的社会变化，词数控制在80~100，还要合理使用题干给出的参考词汇。首先我们可以顺着已给出的开头句，按照从日常出行到民生福利的逻辑分层展开：先写自己日常能接触到的出行相关变化，自然融入共享单车、高铁、地铁这类词汇，再延伸到便民福利，把免费早餐、社区服务等内容加进去，最后收尾抒发自豪感呼应主题，全程注意语句通顺，不要出现语法错误，控制总词数符合要求即可。
【解析】
1. 行文逻辑搭建：使用First、Secondly、Besides这类逻辑连接词串联内容，让文章条理清晰，符合初中英语写作的评分偏好。
2. 内容填充：先从短途出行切入，介绍共享单车上带来的便利，再延伸到高铁、地铁普及让跨城和市内出行都更便捷；之后介绍民生福利，提到面向特殊群体的免费早餐、义务教育免书本费的政策，再点明各类社区服务落地，整体提升了居民生活质量，所有参考词汇都自然融入内容中。
3. 收尾呼应：最后用简短的语句总结当下的美好生活，抒发对祖国的自豪感，回扣"Amazing China"的主题，检查词数、语法，调整语句让表达流畅自然。
【答案】
One possible version:
Amazing China
I'm very proud of my country—China!
Actually, our lives have changed a lot in recent years.
First, there are some shared bikes around us. They're very helpful and convenient for us to go to places not too far away. Secondly, lots of restaurants offer the elderly and disabled people free breakfast. Besides, the government provide textbooks for all the primary and junior middle school students for free. Thirdly, you can see high-speed trains and the underground everywhere in China. Moreover, all kinds of community services are good for Chinese people, including medical treatment, education and other parts of our lives. Thanks to the government, people are living a better life.
How amazing China is! We're proud of our country.
【知识点】
英语话题写作，逻辑衔接词运用，社会热点表达
【点评】
本篇范文完全贴合题干要求，以中学生的真实生活体验为切入点，将题干给出的所有参考词汇自然融入行文，分层清晰逻辑通顺，首尾呼应主题，词数符合规定范围，没有语法错误，情感表达真挚自然，是一篇标准的初中优秀写作范文，学生也可以结合自己身边的真实见闻调整内容，进一步提升内容的真实感。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道写作题首先要明确核心要求：主题为"Amazing China"，以中学生视角介绍身边的社会变化，词数控制在80~100，还要合理使用题干给出的参考词汇。首先我们可以顺着已给出的开头句，按照从日常出行到民生福利的逻辑分层展开：先写自己日常能接触到的出行相关变化，自然融入共享单车、高铁、地铁这类词汇，再延伸到便民福利，把免费早餐、社区服务等内容加进去，最后收尾抒发自豪感呼应主题，全程注意语句通顺，不要出现语法错误，控制总词数符合要求即可。
【解析】
1. 行文逻辑搭建：使用First、Secondly、Besides这类逻辑连接词串联内容，让文章条理清晰，符合初中英语写作的评分偏好。
2. 内容填充：先从短途出行切入，介绍共享单车上带来的便利，再延伸到高铁、地铁普及让跨城和市内出行都更便捷；之后介绍民生福利，提到面向特殊群体的免费早餐、义务教育免书本费的政策，再点明各类社区服务落地，整体提升了居民生活质量，所有参考词汇都自然融入内容中。
3. 收尾呼应：最后用简短的语句总结当下的美好生活，抒发对祖国的自豪感，回扣"Amazing China"的主题，检查词数、语法，调整语句让表达流畅自然。
【答案】
One possible version:
Amazing China
I'm very proud of my country—China!
Actually, our lives have changed a lot in recent years.
First, there are some shared bikes around us. They're very helpful and convenient for us to go to places not too far away. Secondly, lots of restaurants offer the elderly and disabled people free breakfast. Besides, the government provide textbooks for all the primary and junior middle school students for free. Thirdly, you can see high-speed trains and the underground everywhere in China. Moreover, all kinds of community services are good for Chinese people, including medical treatment, education and other parts of our lives. Thanks to the government, people are living a better life.
How amazing China is! We're proud of our country.
【知识点】
英语话题写作，逻辑衔接词运用，社会热点表达
【点评】
本篇范文完全贴合题干要求，以中学生的真实生活体验为切入点，将题干给出的所有参考词汇自然融入行文，分层清晰逻辑通顺，首尾呼应主题，词数符合规定范围，没有语法错误，情感表达真挚自然，是一篇标准的初中优秀写作范文，学生也可以结合自己身边的真实见闻调整内容，进一步提升内容的真实感。
【难度系数】
0.6
