[佳作赏析]
[经典例题]
假设你是李萍,你打算在学校刚创办的英语角做一个自我介绍,请你写一篇发言稿。
内容要点:1. 李萍,13岁,七年级(5)班,来自南京。2. 喜欢听音乐和绘画,擅长英语和唱歌。3. 家庭幸福,家中有六口人(祖父母、父母和妹妹),父母都是老师,家人都爱交友。
注意:1. 文中不得透露个人真实姓名和学校名称。2. 要点齐全,意思连贯,可适当拓展。3. 词数70左右,已给出部分(画直线部分)不计入总词数。
[高分范文]
Hello, everybody! My name is Li Ping.
① I'm in Class 5, Grade 7. I am 13 years old. I come from Nanjing. ② I like English very much and I am good at it. I am good at singing too. I want to be a good singer. My hobbies are listening to music and drawing.
There are six people in my family—my grandparents, my parents, my sister and me. I have a happy family. My parents are teachers. We all love making friends with others.
③ Do you want to be my friend?
[名师点评]
文章内容完整,简单平实,符合在英语角作自我介绍的场景,能让听众通过逻辑清晰的自我介绍快速了解基本信息。
① 熟练地运用单元目标短语“Class ... Grade ...”“... years old”和 come from,表述自然、流畅。
② 用“like ... very much”、be good at、“My hobbies are ...”等表达灵活地介绍爱好和擅长的事情。
③ 用一般疑问句与听众互动,感染性极强。
[经典例题]
假设你是李萍,你打算在学校刚创办的英语角做一个自我介绍,请你写一篇发言稿。
内容要点:1. 李萍,13岁,七年级(5)班,来自南京。2. 喜欢听音乐和绘画,擅长英语和唱歌。3. 家庭幸福,家中有六口人(祖父母、父母和妹妹),父母都是老师,家人都爱交友。
注意:1. 文中不得透露个人真实姓名和学校名称。2. 要点齐全,意思连贯,可适当拓展。3. 词数70左右,已给出部分(画直线部分)不计入总词数。
[高分范文]
Hello, everybody! My name is Li Ping.
① I'm in Class 5, Grade 7. I am 13 years old. I come from Nanjing. ② I like English very much and I am good at it. I am good at singing too. I want to be a good singer. My hobbies are listening to music and drawing.
There are six people in my family—my grandparents, my parents, my sister and me. I have a happy family. My parents are teachers. We all love making friends with others.
③ Do you want to be my friend?
[名师点评]
文章内容完整,简单平实,符合在英语角作自我介绍的场景,能让听众通过逻辑清晰的自我介绍快速了解基本信息。
① 熟练地运用单元目标短语“Class ... Grade ...”“... years old”和 come from,表述自然、流畅。
② 用“like ... very much”、be good at、“My hobbies are ...”等表达灵活地介绍爱好和擅长的事情。
③ 用一般疑问句与听众互动,感染性极强。
答案
参考范文:
Hello, everybody! My name is Li Ping.
I'm in Class 5, Grade 7. I am 13 years old. I come from Nanjing. I like English very much and I am good at it. I am good at singing too. My hobbies are listening to music and drawing.
There are six people in my family: my grandparents, my parents, my sister and I. I have a happy family. My parents are both teachers. All my family love making friends with others.
Do you want to be my friend?
Hello, everybody! My name is Li Ping.
I'm in Class 5, Grade 7. I am 13 years old. I come from Nanjing. I like English very much and I am good at it. I am good at singing too. My hobbies are listening to music and drawing.
There are six people in my family: my grandparents, my parents, my sister and I. I have a happy family. My parents are both teachers. All my family love making friends with others.
Do you want to be my friend?
解析
本题是七年级英语场景类写作题,要求为学校新创办的英语角写自我介绍发言稿,写作需注意:1. 覆盖全部给出的要点信息,不要遗漏班级、年龄、籍贯、爱好特长、家庭相关内容;2. 多用本单元核心短语如Class ... Grade ...、... years old、come from、be good at等,符合七年级的词汇语法难度;3. 符合英语角的交流场景,结尾可以用互动语句拉近和听众的距离,词数控制在70左右,不要透露真实校名和额外隐私信息,保证语句通顺连贯。
写作演练
[小试身手]
假设你是肖华,请根据表格内容,以“This is me!”为题,写一篇70词左右的英语短文介绍你自己。

[思路点拨]
① 时态:一般现在时。② 人称:以第一人称为主。③ 开头直接引出自我介绍,主体部分按照一定的顺序依次介绍,结尾介绍同学情况。
[写作提纲]

[妙笔生花]
This is me!
(更多精彩作文素材见“背记手册”)
[小试身手]
假设你是肖华,请根据表格内容,以“This is me!”为题,写一篇70词左右的英语短文介绍你自己。
[思路点拨]
① 时态:一般现在时。② 人称:以第一人称为主。③ 开头直接引出自我介绍,主体部分按照一定的顺序依次介绍,结尾介绍同学情况。
[写作提纲]
[妙笔生花]
This is me!
Hi, everyone. My name is Xiao Hua. I am 13 years old. I come from Taizhou. I study at Sunshine Middle School. I'm in Class 2, Grade 7. I am tall and thin. I have short hair. I wear glasses.
My hobbies are playing basketball and drawing. I often play basketball with my friends in my spare time. I am good at running. I don't do well in Chinese because it is difficult for me.
My classmates are friendly. My best friend is Nancy. How happy I am!
(更多精彩作文素材见“背记手册”)
答案
One possible version:
This is me!
Hi, everyone. My name is Xiao Hua. I am 13 years old. I come from Taizhou. I study at Sunshine Middle School. I'm in Class 2, Grade 7. I am tall and thin. I have short hair. I wear glasses.
My hobbies are playing basketball and drawing. I often play basketball with my friends in my spare time. I am good at running. I don't do well in Chinese because it is difficult for me.
My classmates are friendly. My best friend is Nancy. How happy I am!
This is me!
Hi, everyone. My name is Xiao Hua. I am 13 years old. I come from Taizhou. I study at Sunshine Middle School. I'm in Class 2, Grade 7. I am tall and thin. I have short hair. I wear glasses.
My hobbies are playing basketball and drawing. I often play basketball with my friends in my spare time. I am good at running. I don't do well in Chinese because it is difficult for me.
My classmates are friendly. My best friend is Nancy. How happy I am!
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