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阅读,点亮人生。暑期将至,同学们都准备利用假期广泛阅读,开阔视野,提高阅读能力,养成阅读习惯,做个阅读小达人。假设你是李华,请根据下面提示,给你的好朋友Jake写一封邮件,向他推荐你最喜欢的一本书。
推荐书目:Journey to the West,Little Women, Treasure Island,Oliver Twist ,The Adventures of Tom Sawyer,Robinson Crusoe,Alice in Wonderland...
注意:
1.邮件须包含导图中的问题提示,请增加细节以使文章完整;
2.邮件中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称;
3.词数:80~100。开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数
Dear Jake,
Summer vacation is coming soon. It is the best time for us to read books.
Yours,
Li Hua
阅读,点亮人生。暑期将至,同学们都准备利用假期广泛阅读,开阔视野,提高阅读能力,养成阅读习惯,做个阅读小达人。假设你是李华,请根据下面提示,给你的好朋友Jake写一封邮件,向他推荐你最喜欢的一本书。
推荐书目:Journey to the West,Little Women, Treasure Island,Oliver Twist ,The Adventures of Tom Sawyer,Robinson Crusoe,Alice in Wonderland...
注意:
1.邮件须包含导图中的问题提示,请增加细节以使文章完整;
2.邮件中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称;
3.词数:80~100。开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数
Dear Jake,
Summer vacation is coming soon. It is the best time for us to read books.
My favourite book is The
Adventures of Tom Sawyer. It is written by Mark
Twain.
The book is about a smart boy, Tom Sawyer,
and his unusual childhood. Tom lives in a small town
on the Mississippi River in America. He takes some
unbelievable adventures with his friends. However,
he doesn't fear in the face of difficulties.
My father gave the book to me on my 11th
birthday. I have had it for two years since then. I
learnt a lot from Tom Sawyer. His story encourages
me to try hard to achieve my dream and never give
up. I will keep the book forever.
Adventures of Tom Sawyer. It is written by Mark
Twain.
The book is about a smart boy, Tom Sawyer,
and his unusual childhood. Tom lives in a small town
on the Mississippi River in America. He takes some
unbelievable adventures with his friends. However,
he doesn't fear in the face of difficulties.
My father gave the book to me on my 11th
birthday. I have had it for two years since then. I
learnt a lot from Tom Sawyer. His story encourages
me to try hard to achieve my dream and never give
up. I will keep the book forever.
Yours,
Li Hua
答案
One possible version:
Dear Jake,
Summer vacation is coming soon. It is the best
time for us to read books. My favourite book is The
Adventures of Tom Sawyer. It is written by Mark
Twain.
The book is about a smart boy, Tom Sawyer,
and his unusual childhood. Tom lives in a small town
on the Mississippi River in America. He takes some
unbelievable adventures with his friends. However,
he doesn't fear in the face of difficulties.
My father gave the book to me on my 11th
birthday. I have had it for two years since then. I
learnt a lot from Tom Sawyer. His story encourages
me to try hard to achieve my dream and never give
up. I will keep the book forever.
Yours,
Li Hua
Dear Jake,
Summer vacation is coming soon. It is the best
time for us to read books. My favourite book is The
Adventures of Tom Sawyer. It is written by Mark
Twain.
The book is about a smart boy, Tom Sawyer,
and his unusual childhood. Tom lives in a small town
on the Mississippi River in America. He takes some
unbelievable adventures with his friends. However,
he doesn't fear in the face of difficulties.
My father gave the book to me on my 11th
birthday. I have had it for two years since then. I
learnt a lot from Tom Sawyer. His story encourages
me to try hard to achieve my dream and never give
up. I will keep the book forever.
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
这是一篇给好友的英文推荐类邮件写作题，解题时首先要明确必须覆盖导图给出的全部5个核心问题：你最喜欢的书是哪本、你怎么得到这本书、你拥有它多久了、这本书讲了什么内容、你为什么喜欢它。首先从题干给出的推荐书目中选一本熟悉的作品，先点明书名，补充书籍的基础信息（比如作者），再介绍书籍的核心内容，之后说明书的来历和拥有时长，最后说明喜欢这本书的理由，全程注意不要出现真实姓名和学校信息，控制总词数在要求区间，语气贴合好友间交流的轻松感，合理补充细节让行文流畅自然。
【解析】
1. 开篇点题：直接点明自己最喜欢的书是《汤姆索亚历险记》，补充作者马克吐温的信息，让内容更饱满。
2. 介绍书籍内容：说明书的主角是聪明的男孩Tom Sawyer，讲述他在美国密西西比河畔小镇的冒险童年，突出他面对困难不畏惧的特质，完成“这本书是关于什么的”这个要点。
3. 说明书籍来历：点明这本书是爸爸在11岁生日时送的，完成“你怎么得到这本书”的要点。
4. 说明持有时长：写明从那时起已经拥有这本书两年了，用现在完成时表达时长，完成“你拥有它多久了”的要点。
5. 阐述喜爱理由：说明从书中学到了很多，Tom的故事鼓励自己为梦想努力、永不放弃，完成“你为什么喜欢它”的要点。
6. 整体衔接自然，没有多余信息，词数符合要求，没有出现真实个人信息，符合邮件写作规范。
【答案】
Dear Jake,
Summer vacation is coming soon. It is the best time for us to read books. My favourite book is The Adventures of Tom Sawyer. It is written by Mark Twain.
The book is about a smart boy, Tom Sawyer, and his unusual childhood. Tom lives in a small town on the Mississippi River in America. He takes some unbelievable adventures with his friends. However, he doesn't fear in the face of difficulties.
My father gave the book to me on my 11th birthday. I have had it for two years since then. I learnt a lot from Tom Sawyer. His story encourages me to try hard to achieve my dream and never give up. I will keep the book forever.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英文邮件写作
现在完成时
书籍推荐话题写作
【点评】
本篇范文完整覆盖了题干给出的全部5个提示要点，没有遗漏得分点，时态使用准确合理，介绍书籍内容、阐述喜爱理由时补充了合适的细节，行文连贯流畅，语气符合给好友写邮件的场景，词数完全符合题目要求，是一篇非常规范的同题范文。同学们写这类要点提示类作文时，要先把所有要求覆盖的要点列出来逐一对应完成，避免漏点失分。
【难度系数】
0.6
这是一篇给好友的英文推荐类邮件写作题，解题时首先要明确必须覆盖导图给出的全部5个核心问题：你最喜欢的书是哪本、你怎么得到这本书、你拥有它多久了、这本书讲了什么内容、你为什么喜欢它。首先从题干给出的推荐书目中选一本熟悉的作品，先点明书名，补充书籍的基础信息（比如作者），再介绍书籍的核心内容，之后说明书的来历和拥有时长，最后说明喜欢这本书的理由，全程注意不要出现真实姓名和学校信息，控制总词数在要求区间，语气贴合好友间交流的轻松感，合理补充细节让行文流畅自然。
【解析】
1. 开篇点题：直接点明自己最喜欢的书是《汤姆索亚历险记》，补充作者马克吐温的信息，让内容更饱满。
2. 介绍书籍内容：说明书的主角是聪明的男孩Tom Sawyer，讲述他在美国密西西比河畔小镇的冒险童年，突出他面对困难不畏惧的特质，完成“这本书是关于什么的”这个要点。
3. 说明书籍来历：点明这本书是爸爸在11岁生日时送的，完成“你怎么得到这本书”的要点。
4. 说明持有时长：写明从那时起已经拥有这本书两年了，用现在完成时表达时长，完成“你拥有它多久了”的要点。
5. 阐述喜爱理由：说明从书中学到了很多，Tom的故事鼓励自己为梦想努力、永不放弃，完成“你为什么喜欢它”的要点。
6. 整体衔接自然，没有多余信息，词数符合要求，没有出现真实个人信息，符合邮件写作规范。
【答案】
Dear Jake,
Summer vacation is coming soon. It is the best time for us to read books. My favourite book is The Adventures of Tom Sawyer. It is written by Mark Twain.
The book is about a smart boy, Tom Sawyer, and his unusual childhood. Tom lives in a small town on the Mississippi River in America. He takes some unbelievable adventures with his friends. However, he doesn't fear in the face of difficulties.
My father gave the book to me on my 11th birthday. I have had it for two years since then. I learnt a lot from Tom Sawyer. His story encourages me to try hard to achieve my dream and never give up. I will keep the book forever.
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
英文邮件写作
现在完成时
书籍推荐话题写作
【点评】
本篇范文完整覆盖了题干给出的全部5个提示要点，没有遗漏得分点，时态使用准确合理，介绍书籍内容、阐述喜爱理由时补充了合适的细节，行文连贯流畅，语气符合给好友写邮件的场景，词数完全符合题目要求，是一篇非常规范的同题范文。同学们写这类要点提示类作文时，要先把所有要求覆盖的要点列出来逐一对应完成，避免漏点失分。
【难度系数】
0.6
