佳作赏析
[经典例题]
假设你是李华,你的笔友戴维(David)发来电子邮件。他想了解中国文化,向你询问关于中国节日的事情。请你将端午节介绍给戴维。
提示:1. 时间:农历五月初五;活动:赛龙舟;传统食物:粽子。2. 意义:纪念伟大诗人屈原。3. 欢迎戴维来到中国了解更多的中国节日。
要求:1. 包含提示中所有要点,可适当发挥。2. 邮件中不能出现学生的真实姓名和校名。3. 词数不少于70。已给出部分(画直线部分)不计入总词数。
[高分范文]
Dear David,
I'm glad to get your email. Let me tell you something about the Dragon Boat Festival.
① The Dragon Boat Festival is one of the most important traditional festivals of China. It falls on the fifth day of the fifth month in the lunar calendar. Chinese people celebrate this festival to remember the great poet, Qu Yuan. He jumped into the river to show his love for his country. ② At the festival, people make and eat delicious zongzi. People also have the dragon boat races in some areas. I like the festival.
③ Welcome to China to know more about Chinese festivals, such as the Mid-Autumn Festival, the Spring Festival and so on.
Yours,
Li Hua
[名师点评]
文章结构完整,条理性强,详细地介绍了端午节的时间、相关活动、意义等,此外还欢迎了笔友来中国了解更多节日。
① 恰当运用 one of the most important traditional festivals 介绍端午节的重要性。
② 用动词短语 make and eat delicious zongzi 和 have the dragon boat races 生动形象地介绍了端午节的活动。
③ 用 Welcome to、know more about、such as、and so on 等短语突出文化自信,欢迎对方来中国了解更多的中国传统文化。
素材积累
[开头句]
1. There are many traditional festivals in China.
2. My favourite festival is the Spring Festival.
[中间句]
1. We have dragon boat races.
2. It usually lasts for 15 days.
[结尾句]
1. I love celebrating New Year.
2. I hope you can come to celebrate it with us.
3. How interesting the festival is!
[名言警句]
1. A new heart for a New Year, always!
新年新心,永远如此!
2. Wish us a long life so as to share the beauty of this graceful moonlight, even though we are miles apart.
但愿人长久,千里共婵娟。
写作演练
[小试身手]
中国传统节日是我们中华民族悠久历史与丰富文化的组成部分,请以“An unforgettable festival”为题,写一篇80词左右的英语短文分享你曾经度过的一个难忘的节日。
提示:1. What is your unforgettable festival? 2. Why is this festival unforgettable to you? 3. What is your feeling?
[思路点拨]
① 时态:以一般过去时为主。② 人称:第一人称、第三人称。③ 首先介绍最难忘的节日是什么,然后具体阐述节日活动,最后表明自己的感受。
[写作提纲]
要点描述
第一段 I had an unforgettable...
第二段 My parents prepared for... I tried my best to...
第三段 I was happy because...
[妙笔生花]
An unforgettable festival
____
____
____
____
____
____
____
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(更多精彩作文素材见“背记手册”)
特训
[经典例题]
假设你是李华,你的笔友戴维(David)发来电子邮件。他想了解中国文化,向你询问关于中国节日的事情。请你将端午节介绍给戴维。
提示:1. 时间:农历五月初五;活动:赛龙舟;传统食物:粽子。2. 意义:纪念伟大诗人屈原。3. 欢迎戴维来到中国了解更多的中国节日。
要求:1. 包含提示中所有要点,可适当发挥。2. 邮件中不能出现学生的真实姓名和校名。3. 词数不少于70。已给出部分(画直线部分)不计入总词数。
[高分范文]
Dear David,
I'm glad to get your email. Let me tell you something about the Dragon Boat Festival.
① The Dragon Boat Festival is one of the most important traditional festivals of China. It falls on the fifth day of the fifth month in the lunar calendar. Chinese people celebrate this festival to remember the great poet, Qu Yuan. He jumped into the river to show his love for his country. ② At the festival, people make and eat delicious zongzi. People also have the dragon boat races in some areas. I like the festival.
③ Welcome to China to know more about Chinese festivals, such as the Mid-Autumn Festival, the Spring Festival and so on.
Yours,
Li Hua
[名师点评]
文章结构完整,条理性强,详细地介绍了端午节的时间、相关活动、意义等,此外还欢迎了笔友来中国了解更多节日。
① 恰当运用 one of the most important traditional festivals 介绍端午节的重要性。
② 用动词短语 make and eat delicious zongzi 和 have the dragon boat races 生动形象地介绍了端午节的活动。
③ 用 Welcome to、know more about、such as、and so on 等短语突出文化自信,欢迎对方来中国了解更多的中国传统文化。
素材积累
[开头句]
1. There are many traditional festivals in China.
2. My favourite festival is the Spring Festival.
[中间句]
1. We have dragon boat races.
2. It usually lasts for 15 days.
[结尾句]
1. I love celebrating New Year.
2. I hope you can come to celebrate it with us.
3. How interesting the festival is!
[名言警句]
1. A new heart for a New Year, always!
新年新心,永远如此!
2. Wish us a long life so as to share the beauty of this graceful moonlight, even though we are miles apart.
但愿人长久,千里共婵娟。
写作演练
[小试身手]
中国传统节日是我们中华民族悠久历史与丰富文化的组成部分,请以“An unforgettable festival”为题,写一篇80词左右的英语短文分享你曾经度过的一个难忘的节日。
提示:1. What is your unforgettable festival? 2. Why is this festival unforgettable to you? 3. What is your feeling?
[思路点拨]
① 时态:以一般过去时为主。② 人称:第一人称、第三人称。③ 首先介绍最难忘的节日是什么,然后具体阐述节日活动,最后表明自己的感受。
[写作提纲]
要点描述
第一段 I had an unforgettable...
第二段 My parents prepared for... I tried my best to...
第三段 I was happy because...
[妙笔生花]
An unforgettable festival
____
____
____
____
____
____
____
____
(更多精彩作文素材见“背记手册”)
特训
答案
One possible version:
An unforgettable festival
My favourite festival is the Spring Festival. And I had an unforgettable one last year.
My parents prepared for the festival together. Mum bought new clothes for me and cooked much delicious food. My father cleaned and decorated the house. I tried my best to learn how to make jiaozi. At first, I didn't do it well. But my grandma taught me carefully. Then I kept practising and I made it!
I was happy because I could make jiaozi by myself!
An unforgettable festival
My favourite festival is the Spring Festival. And I had an unforgettable one last year.
My parents prepared for the festival together. Mum bought new clothes for me and cooked much delicious food. My father cleaned and decorated the house. I tried my best to learn how to make jiaozi. At first, I didn't do it well. But my grandma taught me carefully. Then I kept practising and I made it!
I was happy because I could make jiaozi by myself!
