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Ⅲ.书面表达
学校近期开展"健康安全成长周"活动,要求每位同学围绕"保持健康与自我防护"撰写一篇短文,分享自己的做法与感悟,用于班级主题班会交流。请结合日常学习生活场景,谈谈你是如何养成健康习惯、规避安全风险的,可适当加入具体经历或身边案例。要求短文80-120词,语句通顺,语法正确,逻辑清晰,适当使用连接词。
【核心词汇】
·健康类:balanced diet; regular exercise; enough sleep; keep fit; avoid junk food
·安全类:traffic rules; stay away from; in danger; protect oneself; first aid
·连接词:besides(并且); what's more; for example; in order to(为了); as a result(结果)
【实用句型】
1. In order to keep healthy, I usually eat more vegetables and fruit instead of junk food, and I exercise for 30 minutes every day.为了保持健康,我通常多吃蔬菜和水果,少吃垃圾食品,并且每天锻炼30分钟。
2. At school, I always walk on the right when going up and down stairs, and I never play games like running after others in the hallway.在学校,我上下楼梯总是靠右行,而且从不在走廊里玩追逐打闹这类危险的游戏。
3. At home, my parents often tell me to stay away from fire and sharp knives, and I learn to use electrical appliances safely.在家时,父母经常提醒我远离明火和锋利的刀具,此外我也学会了安全使用各类电器。
4. By doing these things, I can grow up healthily and safely. I hope everyone can pay attention to health and safety, too.通过做这些事,我能健康平安地成长。我希望每个人也能重视自己的健康与安全。
【俗语警句】
·An apple a day keeps the doctor away.一天一苹果,医生远离我。
·Health is the greatest wealth.健康是最大的财富。
·Happiness lies first of all in health.幸福首先在于健康。
·All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.只工作不玩耍,聪明孩子也变傻。
Stay Healthy and Keep Ourselves Safe
With the school's "Healthy and Safe Growth Week" going on, it's a good chance to share how I stay healthy and protect myself.
Health and safety are very important for our growth. Let's develop good habits and protect ourselves well.
学校近期开展"健康安全成长周"活动,要求每位同学围绕"保持健康与自我防护"撰写一篇短文,分享自己的做法与感悟,用于班级主题班会交流。请结合日常学习生活场景,谈谈你是如何养成健康习惯、规避安全风险的,可适当加入具体经历或身边案例。要求短文80-120词,语句通顺,语法正确,逻辑清晰,适当使用连接词。
【核心词汇】
·健康类:balanced diet; regular exercise; enough sleep; keep fit; avoid junk food
·安全类:traffic rules; stay away from; in danger; protect oneself; first aid
·连接词:besides(并且); what's more; for example; in order to(为了); as a result(结果)
【实用句型】
1. In order to keep healthy, I usually eat more vegetables and fruit instead of junk food, and I exercise for 30 minutes every day.为了保持健康,我通常多吃蔬菜和水果,少吃垃圾食品,并且每天锻炼30分钟。
2. At school, I always walk on the right when going up and down stairs, and I never play games like running after others in the hallway.在学校,我上下楼梯总是靠右行,而且从不在走廊里玩追逐打闹这类危险的游戏。
3. At home, my parents often tell me to stay away from fire and sharp knives, and I learn to use electrical appliances safely.在家时,父母经常提醒我远离明火和锋利的刀具,此外我也学会了安全使用各类电器。
4. By doing these things, I can grow up healthily and safely. I hope everyone can pay attention to health and safety, too.通过做这些事,我能健康平安地成长。我希望每个人也能重视自己的健康与安全。
【俗语警句】
·An apple a day keeps the doctor away.一天一苹果,医生远离我。
·Health is the greatest wealth.健康是最大的财富。
·Happiness lies first of all in health.幸福首先在于健康。
·All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.只工作不玩耍,聪明孩子也变傻。
Stay Healthy and Keep Ourselves Safe
With the school's "Healthy and Safe Growth Week" going on, it's a good chance to share how I stay healthy and protect myself.
In order to keep healthy, I eat a balanced diet-more vegetables and fruit instead of junk food. What's more, I exercise for 30 minutes every day, like walking after meals. I also get enough sleep and never stay up late. As the saying goes, "Health is the greatest wealth."
For safety, at school I always walk on the right when going up and down stairs, and I never play dangerous games in the hallway. At home, my parents tell me to stay away from fire and sharp knives, and I learn to use electrical appliances safely. When going out, I follow traffic rules strictly.
For safety, at school I always walk on the right when going up and down stairs, and I never play dangerous games in the hallway. At home, my parents tell me to stay away from fire and sharp knives, and I learn to use electrical appliances safely. When going out, I follow traffic rules strictly.
Health and safety are very important for our growth. Let's develop good habits and protect ourselves well.
答案
Ⅲ.One possible version:
Stay Healthy and Keep Ourselves Safe
With the school's "Healthy and Safe Growth Week" going on, it's a good
chance to share how I stay healthy and protect myself.
In order to keep healthy, I eat a balanced diet-more vegetables and fruit
instead of junk food. What's more, I exercise for 30 minutes every day, like
walking after meals. I also get enough sleep and never stay up late. As the
saying goes, "Health is the greatest wealth."
For safety, at school I always walk on the right when going up and down
stairs, and I never play dangerous games in the hallway. At home, my parents
tell me to stay away from fire and sharp knives, and I learn to use electrical
appliances safely. When going out, I follow traffic rules strictly.
Health and safety are very important for our growth. Let's develop good
habits and protect ourselves well.
Stay Healthy and Keep Ourselves Safe
With the school's "Healthy and Safe Growth Week" going on, it's a good
chance to share how I stay healthy and protect myself.
In order to keep healthy, I eat a balanced diet-more vegetables and fruit
instead of junk food. What's more, I exercise for 30 minutes every day, like
walking after meals. I also get enough sleep and never stay up late. As the
saying goes, "Health is the greatest wealth."
For safety, at school I always walk on the right when going up and down
stairs, and I never play dangerous games in the hallway. At home, my parents
tell me to stay away from fire and sharp knives, and I learn to use electrical
appliances safely. When going out, I follow traffic rules strictly.
Health and safety are very important for our growth. Let's develop good
habits and protect ourselves well.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先明确写作要求：主题是分享自身保持健康、做好自我防护的做法，题目已经给出文章的开头和结尾，只需要填充中间主体部分，字数要求80-120词。首先第一步梳理思维导图给出的结构，主体部分分为两大块：健康生活方式、安全防护措施。先写健康部分：可以用提示的"In order to"开头，依次把饮食、运动、作息三个维度的健康习惯写出来，用上给定的核心词汇，还可以加入提示的俗语增加亮点。第二步写安全部分，用过渡词引出，分别从校园、居家、出行三个日常场景对应写出自己的安全行为，覆盖所有提示要点，合理使用what's more这类给定的连接词让逻辑更通顺。最后写完通读检查，确认语法正确、字数符合要求，衔接好已有的开头和结尾即可。
【解析】
1. 承接给定开头，先展开健康习惯的描述：开篇用In order to keep healthy引出，依次介绍自己均衡饮食、远离垃圾食品，每日规律锻炼、饭后散步，保持充足睡眠不熬夜的做法，还可以加入给定的俗语"Health is the greatest wealth"丰富内容。
2. 用过渡语For safety引出安全防护部分，分别从三个日常场景展开：校园里上下楼梯守秩序、不玩危险游戏；居家时远离明火刀具、安全使用电器；出行时严格遵守交通规则，所有要点贴合学生日常，符合题目要求。
3. 通读全文，核对语法错误，确认所有给定的核心词汇、连接词都合理运用，字数控制在要求范围内，自然衔接题目给出的首尾句，保证整体逻辑连贯。
【答案】
One possible version:
Stay Healthy and Keep Ourselves Safe
With the school's "Healthy and Safe Growth Week" going on, it's a good chance to share how I stay healthy and protect myself.
In order to keep healthy, I eat a balanced diet-more vegetables and fruit instead of junk food. What's more, I exercise for 30 minutes every day, like walking after meals. I also get enough sleep and never stay up late. As the saying goes, "Health is the greatest wealth."
For safety, at school I always walk on the right when going up and down stairs, and I never play dangerous games in the hallway. At home, my parents tell me to stay away from fire and sharp knives, and I learn to use electrical appliances safely. When going out, I follow traffic rules strictly.
Health and safety are very important for our growth. Let's develop good habits and protect ourselves well.
【知识点】
提纲类英语写作
主题词汇运用
逻辑连接词使用
【点评】
本题属于半开放的提示类书面表达，已经给出了清晰的思维导图框架、核心词汇和参考句型，大幅降低了写作难度，学生只需要按照健康、安全两大模块的场景梳理要点，合理整合提示内容，就可以写出符合要求的短文，适当加入给定的俗语还能给文章增色，注意不要遗漏要点、控制字数即可。
【难度系数】
0.7
拿到这道书面表达题，首先明确写作要求：主题是分享自身保持健康、做好自我防护的做法，题目已经给出文章的开头和结尾，只需要填充中间主体部分，字数要求80-120词。首先第一步梳理思维导图给出的结构，主体部分分为两大块：健康生活方式、安全防护措施。先写健康部分：可以用提示的"In order to"开头，依次把饮食、运动、作息三个维度的健康习惯写出来，用上给定的核心词汇，还可以加入提示的俗语增加亮点。第二步写安全部分，用过渡词引出，分别从校园、居家、出行三个日常场景对应写出自己的安全行为，覆盖所有提示要点，合理使用what's more这类给定的连接词让逻辑更通顺。最后写完通读检查，确认语法正确、字数符合要求，衔接好已有的开头和结尾即可。
【解析】
1. 承接给定开头，先展开健康习惯的描述：开篇用In order to keep healthy引出，依次介绍自己均衡饮食、远离垃圾食品，每日规律锻炼、饭后散步，保持充足睡眠不熬夜的做法，还可以加入给定的俗语"Health is the greatest wealth"丰富内容。
2. 用过渡语For safety引出安全防护部分，分别从三个日常场景展开：校园里上下楼梯守秩序、不玩危险游戏；居家时远离明火刀具、安全使用电器；出行时严格遵守交通规则，所有要点贴合学生日常，符合题目要求。
3. 通读全文，核对语法错误，确认所有给定的核心词汇、连接词都合理运用，字数控制在要求范围内，自然衔接题目给出的首尾句，保证整体逻辑连贯。
【答案】
One possible version:
Stay Healthy and Keep Ourselves Safe
With the school's "Healthy and Safe Growth Week" going on, it's a good chance to share how I stay healthy and protect myself.
In order to keep healthy, I eat a balanced diet-more vegetables and fruit instead of junk food. What's more, I exercise for 30 minutes every day, like walking after meals. I also get enough sleep and never stay up late. As the saying goes, "Health is the greatest wealth."
For safety, at school I always walk on the right when going up and down stairs, and I never play dangerous games in the hallway. At home, my parents tell me to stay away from fire and sharp knives, and I learn to use electrical appliances safely. When going out, I follow traffic rules strictly.
Health and safety are very important for our growth. Let's develop good habits and protect ourselves well.
【知识点】
提纲类英语写作
主题词汇运用
逻辑连接词使用
【点评】
本题属于半开放的提示类书面表达，已经给出了清晰的思维导图框架、核心词汇和参考句型，大幅降低了写作难度，学生只需要按照健康、安全两大模块的场景梳理要点，合理整合提示内容，就可以写出符合要求的短文，适当加入给定的俗语还能给文章增色，注意不要遗漏要点、控制字数即可。
【难度系数】
0.7
