书面表达
假如你是李华,上周你们学校举行了一场为需要帮助的学生筹款的爱心义卖活动,请你给你的加拿大笔友 Alex 写一封邮件,分享一下这次活动的过程和你的感受。

注意:
1. 邮件内容须包含所有提示信息,请增加细节以使文章完整;
2. 邮件中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称;
3. 词数 80~100。(邮件的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数)
Dear Alex,
How is everything going? These days, we found that there were some students in need around us.
How do you like this activity? Hope to hear from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
假如你是李华,上周你们学校举行了一场为需要帮助的学生筹款的爱心义卖活动,请你给你的加拿大笔友 Alex 写一封邮件,分享一下这次活动的过程和你的感受。
注意:
1. 邮件内容须包含所有提示信息,请增加细节以使文章完整;
2. 邮件中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称;
3. 词数 80~100。(邮件的开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数)
Dear Alex,
How is everything going? These days, we found that there were some students in need around us.
So our school held a charity sale last week to raise money for them on the school playground. Our teacher gave a speech,and then we collected many old things such as old books,toys and handicrafts to sell. I sold my storybooks and a model plane. Many students and teachers came to buy things. Everyone was happy to help. In the end,we raised a lot of money. It was a meaningful activity. I felt great to help others by doing something small. It also made me know the importance of help.
How do you like this activity? Hope to hear from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
答案
One possible version:
Dear Alex,
How is everything going? These days,we found that there were some students in need around us.
So our school held a charity sale last week to raise money for them on the school playground. Our teacher gave a speech,and then we collected many old things such as old books,toys and handicrafts to sell. I sold my storybooks and a model plane. Many students and teachers came to buy things. Everyone was happy to help. In the end,we raised a lot of money. It was a meaningful activity. I felt great to help others by doing something small. It also made me know the importance of help.
How do you like this activity? Hope to hear from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
Dear Alex,
How is everything going? These days,we found that there were some students in need around us.
So our school held a charity sale last week to raise money for them on the school playground. Our teacher gave a speech,and then we collected many old things such as old books,toys and handicrafts to sell. I sold my storybooks and a model plane. Many students and teachers came to buy things. Everyone was happy to help. In the end,we raised a lot of money. It was a meaningful activity. I felt great to help others by doing something small. It also made me know the importance of help.
How do you like this activity? Hope to hear from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】本题要求以李华的身份给笔友Alex写邮件分享爱心义卖活动,需涵盖思维导图的所有信息:时间(last week)、地点(school playground)、活动(give a speech、collect old things)及补充细节,还要表达个人感受,同时符合邮件格式和词数要求。写作时先承接开头引出活动,再按顺序描述活动过程,最后点明感受,确保所有要点都被覆盖,适当添加细节让内容完整。
【解析】首先承接开头引出活动:So our school held a charity sale last week to raise money for them on the school playground. 接着描述活动流程:Our teacher gave a speech, and then we collected many old things such as old books, toys and handicrafts to sell. 补充个人参与:I sold my storybooks and a model plane. 再写活动结果:Many students and teachers came to buy things, and we raised a lot of money. 最后表达感受:It was a meaningful activity. I felt great to help others by doing something small. It also made me know the importance of help. 确保所有要点都覆盖,符合词数要求。
【答案】Dear Alex,
How is everything going? These days,we found that there were some students in need around us.
So our school held a charity sale last week to raise money for them on the school playground. Our teacher gave a speech,and then we collected many old things such as old books,toys and handicrafts to sell. I sold my storybooks and a model plane. Many students and teachers came to buy things. Everyone was happy to help. In the end,we raised a lot of money. It was a meaningful activity. I felt great to help others by doing something small. It also made me know the importance of help.
How do you like this activity? Hope to hear from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】英语邮件写作、书面表达
【点评】本题以思维导图为提示,考查学生整合信息、运用英语进行书面表达的能力,要求涵盖所有给定要点并适当拓展细节,符合初中英语写作的考查要求,难度适中。
【难度系数】0.5
【解析】首先承接开头引出活动:So our school held a charity sale last week to raise money for them on the school playground. 接着描述活动流程:Our teacher gave a speech, and then we collected many old things such as old books, toys and handicrafts to sell. 补充个人参与:I sold my storybooks and a model plane. 再写活动结果:Many students and teachers came to buy things, and we raised a lot of money. 最后表达感受:It was a meaningful activity. I felt great to help others by doing something small. It also made me know the importance of help. 确保所有要点都覆盖,符合词数要求。
【答案】Dear Alex,
How is everything going? These days,we found that there were some students in need around us.
So our school held a charity sale last week to raise money for them on the school playground. Our teacher gave a speech,and then we collected many old things such as old books,toys and handicrafts to sell. I sold my storybooks and a model plane. Many students and teachers came to buy things. Everyone was happy to help. In the end,we raised a lot of money. It was a meaningful activity. I felt great to help others by doing something small. It also made me know the importance of help.
How do you like this activity? Hope to hear from you soon!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】英语邮件写作、书面表达
【点评】本题以思维导图为提示,考查学生整合信息、运用英语进行书面表达的能力,要求涵盖所有给定要点并适当拓展细节,符合初中英语写作的考查要求,难度适中。
【难度系数】0.5
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