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江阴，北倚长江，是长江孕育出来的一颗璀璨明珠。随着沪宁高铁顺利开通，越来越多的人来江阴游玩。为更好地向外国友人展示江阴的朝气与热情，请以“Welcome to Jiangyin”为题，根据表格提示，写一篇短文，邀请他们走进江阴，游霞客故里，品吴越文化。
|Where is Jiangyin?
How is the environment?|What are the people in Jiangyin like?|
|----|----|
|What places can visitors go to?
What can they do there?|Your hope.|
【要求】1. 短文须根据表格自拟，要求语句通顺、意思连贯、符合题意。
2. 词数 80 左右。
Welcome to Jiangyin
江阴，北倚长江，是长江孕育出来的一颗璀璨明珠。随着沪宁高铁顺利开通，越来越多的人来江阴游玩。为更好地向外国友人展示江阴的朝气与热情，请以“Welcome to Jiangyin”为题，根据表格提示，写一篇短文，邀请他们走进江阴，游霞客故里，品吴越文化。
|Where is Jiangyin?
How is the environment?|What are the people in Jiangyin like?|
|----|----|
|What places can visitors go to?
What can they do there?|Your hope.|
【要求】1. 短文须根据表格自拟，要求语句通顺、意思连贯、符合题意。
2. 词数 80 左右。
Welcome to Jiangyin
I'm Li Hua from Jiangyin. Welcome to my hometown.
It is in the south of the Yangtze River. It is big and clean. Every day, I can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing.
People in Jiangyin are very friendly. They are also helpful. They are willing to help each other any time.
There are many places to visit. Zhongshan Park is a good place to row boats and fly kites.
You can also go to Waitan to enjoy the beautiful Yangtze River.
Jiangyin is a wonderful city. I hope you can come and visit soon.
答案
One possible version
Welcome to Jiangyin
I'm Li Hua from Jiangyin. Welcome to my hometown.
It is in the south of the Yangtze River. It is big and clean. Every day, I can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing. People in Jiangyin are very friendly. They are also helpful. They are willing to help each other any time.
There are many places to visit. Zhongshan Park is a good place to row boats and fly kites. You can also go to Waitan to enjoy the beautiful Yangtze River.
Jiangyin is a wonderful city. I hope you can come and visit soon.
Welcome to Jiangyin
I'm Li Hua from Jiangyin. Welcome to my hometown.
It is in the south of the Yangtze River. It is big and clean. Every day, I can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing. People in Jiangyin are very friendly. They are also helpful. They are willing to help each other any time.
There are many places to visit. Zhongshan Park is a good place to row boats and fly kites. You can also go to Waitan to enjoy the beautiful Yangtze River.
Jiangyin is a wonderful city. I hope you can come and visit soon.
解析
【分析】
这是一篇地点介绍类的英语应用文写作，解题时首先要梳理题干给出的所有必填要点：①江阴的地理位置 ②江阴的环境状况 ③江阴当地居民的性格特点 ④游客可前往的游玩地点以及对应的活动 ⑤表达邀约的希望。首先开篇做简单自我介绍引出欢迎主题，之后按照从地理环境到人文风貌再到游玩推荐的逻辑顺序依次填充要点，最后收尾发出邀约，全程注意语句通顺，控制总词数在80左右，贴合向外国友人介绍城市的热情语气即可。
【解析】
写作可按照以下步骤完成：
1. 开篇引入：简单自我介绍，直接点题发出欢迎，快速切入主题。
2. 介绍基础信息：先说明江阴地处长江南岸，接着描述城市干净整洁、鸟语花香的宜居环境，覆盖前两个要点。
3. 介绍人文特点：点明江阴市民友善、乐于助人的特质，完成第三个要点的表述。
4. 游玩推荐：列举特色游玩地点，分别说明对应的游玩活动，覆盖景点和对应活动的两个要点。
5. 收尾点题：夸赞江阴是宜居的好城市，表达希望游客尽快来访的心愿，完成最后一个要点，最后通读全文检查语法错误、核对所有要点无遗漏，调整语句让行文流畅自然。
【答案】
Welcome to Jiangyin
I'm Li Hua from Jiangyin. Welcome to my hometown.
It is in the south of the Yangtze River. It is big and clean. Every day, I can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing. People in Jiangyin are very friendly. They are also helpful. They are willing to help each other any time.
There are many places to visit. Zhongshan Park is a good place to row boats and fly kites. You can also go to Waitan to enjoy the beautiful Yangtze River.
Jiangyin is a wonderful city. I hope you can come and visit soon.
【知识点】
地点类英语写作，要点整合表达
【点评】
本篇短文完全覆盖了题干给出的全部提示要点，行文逻辑清晰，从城市基础信息到人文风貌再到游玩推荐层层递进，语言简单流畅，语气热情友好，完全符合向外国友人介绍江阴的写作要求，词数符合题干80词左右的规定，是一篇合格的高分范文。
【难度系数】
0.7
这是一篇地点介绍类的英语应用文写作，解题时首先要梳理题干给出的所有必填要点：①江阴的地理位置 ②江阴的环境状况 ③江阴当地居民的性格特点 ④游客可前往的游玩地点以及对应的活动 ⑤表达邀约的希望。首先开篇做简单自我介绍引出欢迎主题，之后按照从地理环境到人文风貌再到游玩推荐的逻辑顺序依次填充要点，最后收尾发出邀约，全程注意语句通顺，控制总词数在80左右，贴合向外国友人介绍城市的热情语气即可。
【解析】
写作可按照以下步骤完成：
1. 开篇引入：简单自我介绍，直接点题发出欢迎，快速切入主题。
2. 介绍基础信息：先说明江阴地处长江南岸，接着描述城市干净整洁、鸟语花香的宜居环境，覆盖前两个要点。
3. 介绍人文特点：点明江阴市民友善、乐于助人的特质，完成第三个要点的表述。
4. 游玩推荐：列举特色游玩地点，分别说明对应的游玩活动，覆盖景点和对应活动的两个要点。
5. 收尾点题：夸赞江阴是宜居的好城市，表达希望游客尽快来访的心愿，完成最后一个要点，最后通读全文检查语法错误、核对所有要点无遗漏，调整语句让行文流畅自然。
【答案】
Welcome to Jiangyin
I'm Li Hua from Jiangyin. Welcome to my hometown.
It is in the south of the Yangtze River. It is big and clean. Every day, I can smell the flowers and hear the birds sing. People in Jiangyin are very friendly. They are also helpful. They are willing to help each other any time.
There are many places to visit. Zhongshan Park is a good place to row boats and fly kites. You can also go to Waitan to enjoy the beautiful Yangtze River.
Jiangyin is a wonderful city. I hope you can come and visit soon.
【知识点】
地点类英语写作，要点整合表达
【点评】
本篇短文完全覆盖了题干给出的全部提示要点，行文逻辑清晰，从城市基础信息到人文风貌再到游玩推荐层层递进，语言简单流畅，语气热情友好，完全符合向外国友人介绍江阴的写作要求，词数符合题干80词左右的规定，是一篇合格的高分范文。
【难度系数】
0.7
