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校英语报 Youth Voice 正在开展“发现美好”主题征文活动,请你以“Life is beautiful”为题,写一篇英语短文投稿,分享你发现生活之美的经历与感悟,引导同学们用心感受生活,珍惜当下,乐观面对每一天。
请你根据提示,从以下三点展开写作:
What makes life beautiful in your eyes?
What experience made you feel life is beautiful?
What have you learned from it?
要求:词数 100 左右,标题和开头已给出,不计入总词数;文中不得出现真实校名和姓名;内容完整,语言流畅,条理清晰。
Life is beautiful
Life is full of beauty. It is around us if we look with our hearts.
校英语报 Youth Voice 正在开展“发现美好”主题征文活动,请你以“Life is beautiful”为题,写一篇英语短文投稿,分享你发现生活之美的经历与感悟,引导同学们用心感受生活,珍惜当下,乐观面对每一天。
请你根据提示,从以下三点展开写作:
What makes life beautiful in your eyes?
What experience made you feel life is beautiful?
What have you learned from it?
要求:词数 100 左右,标题和开头已给出,不计入总词数;文中不得出现真实校名和姓名;内容完整,语言流畅,条理清晰。
Life is beautiful
Life is full of beauty. It is around us if we look with our hearts.
答案
Life is beautiful
Life is full of beauty. It is around us if we look with our hearts. I used to feel deeply concerned about my studies, and as a result, I rarely paid attention to the beauty that surrounded me. I even lost my confidence.
One day, I fell behind others in an exam. Not only did my parents and friends offer me patient encouragement, but they also stood by me when I was at my lowest. Thanks to their unwavering support, I achieved remarkable progress.
From this unforgettable experience, I have come to realize that life is beautiful. We should maintain a positive mindset, value the love around us, and face every day with hope.
Life is full of beauty. It is around us if we look with our hearts. I used to feel deeply concerned about my studies, and as a result, I rarely paid attention to the beauty that surrounded me. I even lost my confidence.
One day, I fell behind others in an exam. Not only did my parents and friends offer me patient encouragement, but they also stood by me when I was at my lowest. Thanks to their unwavering support, I achieved remarkable progress.
From this unforgettable experience, I have come to realize that life is beautiful. We should maintain a positive mindset, value the love around us, and face every day with hope.
解析
【解析】
写作思路：
1. 开篇承接给定开头，先点明自己眼中让生活变美好的事物：身边亲友的陪伴与善意，对应第一个写作要点。
2. 选取一次考试失利的具体经历，描述低落时父母和朋友给予鼓励陪伴，最终自己取得进步的过程，对应第二个写作要点。
3. 最后阐述从这次经历得到的感悟，呼吁大家保持积极心态、珍视身边的爱、乐观面对生活，对应第三个写作要点。
参考范文：
I used to feel deeply concerned about my studies, and as a result, I rarely paid attention to the beauty that surrounded me. I even lost my confidence.
One day, I fell behind others in an exam. Not only did my parents and friends offer me patient encouragement, but they also stood by me when I was at my lowest. Thanks to their unwavering support, I achieved remarkable progress.
From this unforgettable experience, I have come to realize that life is beautiful. We should maintain a positive mindset, value the love around us, and face every day with hope.
【答案】
I used to feel deeply concerned about my studies, and as a result, I rarely paid attention to the beauty that surrounded me. I even lost my confidence.
One day, I fell behind others in an exam. Not only did my parents and friends offer me patient encouragement, but they also stood by me when I was at my lowest. Thanks to their unwavering support, I achieved remarkable progress.
From this unforgettable experience, I have come to realize that life is beautiful. We should maintain a positive mindset, value the love around us, and face every day with hope.
【知识点】
英语提纲作文写作
高级句式运用
主题内容表达
【点评】
本题属于校园征文类英语写作题，紧扣"发现美好"的主题，三个写作提示清晰明确，考生只需要结合自身真实感的经历展开叙述，合理运用部分高分句式，控制好词数，避免出现个人真实信息，就可以完成一篇符合要求的优质短文。
【难度系数】
0.6
写作思路：
1. 开篇承接给定开头，先点明自己眼中让生活变美好的事物：身边亲友的陪伴与善意，对应第一个写作要点。
2. 选取一次考试失利的具体经历，描述低落时父母和朋友给予鼓励陪伴，最终自己取得进步的过程，对应第二个写作要点。
3. 最后阐述从这次经历得到的感悟，呼吁大家保持积极心态、珍视身边的爱、乐观面对生活，对应第三个写作要点。
参考范文：
I used to feel deeply concerned about my studies, and as a result, I rarely paid attention to the beauty that surrounded me. I even lost my confidence.
One day, I fell behind others in an exam. Not only did my parents and friends offer me patient encouragement, but they also stood by me when I was at my lowest. Thanks to their unwavering support, I achieved remarkable progress.
From this unforgettable experience, I have come to realize that life is beautiful. We should maintain a positive mindset, value the love around us, and face every day with hope.
【答案】
I used to feel deeply concerned about my studies, and as a result, I rarely paid attention to the beauty that surrounded me. I even lost my confidence.
One day, I fell behind others in an exam. Not only did my parents and friends offer me patient encouragement, but they also stood by me when I was at my lowest. Thanks to their unwavering support, I achieved remarkable progress.
From this unforgettable experience, I have come to realize that life is beautiful. We should maintain a positive mindset, value the love around us, and face every day with hope.
【知识点】
英语提纲作文写作
高级句式运用
主题内容表达
【点评】
本题属于校园征文类英语写作题，紧扣"发现美好"的主题，三个写作提示清晰明确，考生只需要结合自身真实感的经历展开叙述，合理运用部分高分句式，控制好词数，避免出现个人真实信息，就可以完成一篇符合要求的优质短文。
【难度系数】
0.6
巩固练习
你收到好友 Tom 的英文邮件,他在邮件中写道:"I just feel tired of busy school life. Every day is about lessons and exercises. I really want to know how to live a meaningful life." 请你以李华的身份回复这封邮件,结合自身经历,和他分享你的理解与建议。
请从以下三点展开写作:
1. What does a meaningful life mean to you?
2. What experience made you understand it better?
3. What advice would you give to your friend?
要求:词数 100 左右(邮件开头、结尾已给出,不计入总词数);文中不得出现真实校名、姓名;格式正确,语气真诚,逻辑清晰。
To: Tom@163.com
From: Li Hua@qq.com
Subject: How to Live a Meaningful Life
Dear Tom,
I'm sorry to read your email and understand your feelings completely. Let me share my ideas and experience with you.
Hope my words can help you.
Yours,
Li Hua
你收到好友 Tom 的英文邮件,他在邮件中写道:"I just feel tired of busy school life. Every day is about lessons and exercises. I really want to know how to live a meaningful life." 请你以李华的身份回复这封邮件,结合自身经历,和他分享你的理解与建议。
请从以下三点展开写作:
1. What does a meaningful life mean to you?
2. What experience made you understand it better?
3. What advice would you give to your friend?
要求:词数 100 左右(邮件开头、结尾已给出,不计入总词数);文中不得出现真实校名、姓名;格式正确,语气真诚,逻辑清晰。
To: Tom@163.com
From: Li Hua@qq.com
Subject: How to Live a Meaningful Life
Dear Tom,
I'm sorry to read your email and understand your feelings completely. Let me share my ideas and experience with you.
I used to be bored with my busy school life too. Later, I started to help others and develop hobbies. Not only did I volunteer at the community but also I took up reading. I found happiness and value in these activities. To me, a meaningful life is full of love and growth. We should care about others, keep learning and enjoy every small moment. I believe you will find your own way.
Hope my words can help you.
Yours,
Li Hua
答案
写作能力突破
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:本文是一篇英文电子邮件(书信体)。②时态:叙述自身经历用一般过去时,表达观点、给出建议用一般现在时。③提示:围绕"对有意义生活的理解、相关亲身经历、给好友的建议"三点展开,贴合邮件情境。
[写作步骤]
第一步,承接邮件内容,表达对好友的理解,自然引出写作主题;第二步,叙述自身类似经历,结合经历说明对有意义生活的理解;第三步,给出具体建议,呼应主题,结尾表达美好祝愿。
[词句积累]
① be bored with 对……感到厌倦 ② develop hobbies 培养爱好 ③ take up 开始学习/从事 ④be full of 充满
⑤care about 关心,在意
⑥Not only did I volunteer at the community but also I took up reading. (not only ... but also 引导的倒装句)
⑦I believe you will find your own way. (省略 that 的宾语从句)
One possible version:
Dear Tom,
I'm sorry to read your email and understand your feelings completely. Let me share my ideas and experience with you.
I used to be bored with my busy school life too. Later, I started to help others and develop hobbies. Not only did I volunteer at the community but also I took up reading. I found happiness and value in these activities.
To me, a meaningful life is full of love and growth. We should care about others, keep learning and enjoy every small moment. I believe you will find your own way.
Hope my words can help you.
Yours,
Li Hua
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:本文是一篇英文电子邮件(书信体)。②时态:叙述自身经历用一般过去时,表达观点、给出建议用一般现在时。③提示:围绕"对有意义生活的理解、相关亲身经历、给好友的建议"三点展开,贴合邮件情境。
[写作步骤]
第一步,承接邮件内容,表达对好友的理解,自然引出写作主题;第二步,叙述自身类似经历,结合经历说明对有意义生活的理解;第三步,给出具体建议,呼应主题,结尾表达美好祝愿。
[词句积累]
① be bored with 对……感到厌倦 ② develop hobbies 培养爱好 ③ take up 开始学习/从事 ④be full of 充满
⑤care about 关心,在意
⑥Not only did I volunteer at the community but also I took up reading. (not only ... but also 引导的倒装句)
⑦I believe you will find your own way. (省略 that 的宾语从句)
One possible version:
Dear Tom,
I'm sorry to read your email and understand your feelings completely. Let me share my ideas and experience with you.
I used to be bored with my busy school life too. Later, I started to help others and develop hobbies. Not only did I volunteer at the community but also I took up reading. I found happiness and value in these activities.
To me, a meaningful life is full of love and growth. We should care about others, keep learning and enjoy every small moment. I believe you will find your own way.
Hope my words can help you.
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
拿到这道写作题首先要先明确核心要求：这是写给好友的私人回信，不需要过于生硬正式，首先要对应题干指定的三个写作要点，不能漏写。第一步先梳理写作逻辑：先共情Tom的感受，说明自己也曾有过类似的厌倦校园生活的经历，自然引出自己的相关体验；第二步结合经历讲清楚自己对"有意义的生活"的理解；第三步给出贴合Tom处境的实用小建议，完成所有要点。同时要注意时态区分：讲过去的亲身经历用一般过去时，表达观点、提建议用一般现在时，还可以灵活使用积累的高级词汇和倒装句型，让作文更出彩，控制中间填充内容的词数在100左右即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：体裁为英文私人邮件，核心要求覆盖三个指定要点，词数要求100左右（首尾已给出不计入总数），不得出现个人真实信息。
2. 内容搭建：
① 先铺垫共情内容：说明自己过去也对忙碌的校园生活感到厌倦，和Tom的处境形成共鸣；
② 叙述亲身经历：介绍自己后来尝试参与社区志愿活动、培养阅读爱好，在这些小事里找到了快乐和价值；
③ 点明核心观点：说明自己眼中有意义的生活是充满善意、不断成长的，要关心他人、享受日常的小美好；
④ 最后给出鼓励建议，收尾呼应主题。
3. 表达优化：使用not only...but also引导的部分倒装句作为亮点句型，用积累的高级表达替换普通口语化表述，让行文流畅自然，符合好友沟通的语气。
【答案】
I used to be bored with my busy school life too. Later, I started to help others and develop hobbies. Not only did I volunteer at the community but also I took up reading. I found happiness and value in these activities.
To me, a meaningful life is full of love and growth. We should care about others, keep learning and enjoy every small moment. I believe you will find your own way.
【知识点】
英文邮件写作，高级表达替换，部分倒装结构
【点评】
本题属于贴近学生日常场景的应用文写作，既考察学生对邮件写作规范的掌握，也引导学生结合真实生活体验输出内容，避免内容空洞套话，同时鼓励学生灵活运用积累的亮点词汇和句型提升作文质量，难度梯度友好，学生只要覆盖全部三个要点就能拿到基础分，合理使用亮点表达即可拿到高分。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道写作题首先要先明确核心要求：这是写给好友的私人回信，不需要过于生硬正式，首先要对应题干指定的三个写作要点，不能漏写。第一步先梳理写作逻辑：先共情Tom的感受，说明自己也曾有过类似的厌倦校园生活的经历，自然引出自己的相关体验；第二步结合经历讲清楚自己对"有意义的生活"的理解；第三步给出贴合Tom处境的实用小建议，完成所有要点。同时要注意时态区分：讲过去的亲身经历用一般过去时，表达观点、提建议用一般现在时，还可以灵活使用积累的高级词汇和倒装句型，让作文更出彩，控制中间填充内容的词数在100左右即可。
【解析】
1. 审题定位：体裁为英文私人邮件，核心要求覆盖三个指定要点，词数要求100左右（首尾已给出不计入总数），不得出现个人真实信息。
2. 内容搭建：
① 先铺垫共情内容：说明自己过去也对忙碌的校园生活感到厌倦，和Tom的处境形成共鸣；
② 叙述亲身经历：介绍自己后来尝试参与社区志愿活动、培养阅读爱好，在这些小事里找到了快乐和价值；
③ 点明核心观点：说明自己眼中有意义的生活是充满善意、不断成长的，要关心他人、享受日常的小美好；
④ 最后给出鼓励建议，收尾呼应主题。
3. 表达优化：使用not only...but also引导的部分倒装句作为亮点句型，用积累的高级表达替换普通口语化表述，让行文流畅自然，符合好友沟通的语气。
【答案】
I used to be bored with my busy school life too. Later, I started to help others and develop hobbies. Not only did I volunteer at the community but also I took up reading. I found happiness and value in these activities.
To me, a meaningful life is full of love and growth. We should care about others, keep learning and enjoy every small moment. I believe you will find your own way.
【知识点】
英文邮件写作，高级表达替换，部分倒装结构
【点评】
本题属于贴近学生日常场景的应用文写作，既考察学生对邮件写作规范的掌握，也引导学生结合真实生活体验输出内容，避免内容空洞套话，同时鼓励学生灵活运用积累的亮点词汇和句型提升作文质量，难度梯度友好，学生只要覆盖全部三个要点就能拿到基础分，合理使用亮点表达即可拿到高分。
【难度系数】
0.6
