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四、书面表达。
为了弘扬榜样的力量，学校英语社团将举办以“我心中的榜样”为主题的征文活动。请你从身边的师长亲友或了解知晓的名人中选取一位，以“The Person I Admire Most”为题写一篇英语短文，根据以下提示，介绍你敬佩的人物。
内容提示：
1. Who is the person you admire most?
What is the person like?
2. Why do you admire the person?
3. What can you learn from the person?
注意：
（1）短文须包括以上内容提示，可适当发挥；
（2）文中不得出现学生真实的姓名和校名；
（3）词数80个左右。
The Person I Admire Most
为了弘扬榜样的力量，学校英语社团将举办以“我心中的榜样”为主题的征文活动。请你从身边的师长亲友或了解知晓的名人中选取一位，以“The Person I Admire Most”为题写一篇英语短文，根据以下提示，介绍你敬佩的人物。
内容提示：
1. Who is the person you admire most?
What is the person like?
2. Why do you admire the person?
3. What can you learn from the person?
注意：
（1）短文须包括以上内容提示，可适当发挥；
（2）文中不得出现学生真实的姓名和校名；
（3）词数80个左右。
The Person I Admire Most
答案
The Person I Admire Most
The person I admire most is my head teacher, Ms Li. She is kind and hard-working, and she always cares about every student in our class. She not only teaches us knowledge but also helps us solve problems in life.
Ms Li is very responsible. She prepares lessons carefully every day and often stays late to help students with their studies. When we face difficulties, she listens to us patiently and gives us useful advice. She sets a good example for us with her actions.
I admire Ms Li because she loves her work and her students deeply. From her, I learn that we should be responsible for and helpful to others. I hope to be a person like her when I grow up.
The person I admire most is my head teacher, Ms Li. She is kind and hard-working, and she always cares about every student in our class. She not only teaches us knowledge but also helps us solve problems in life.
Ms Li is very responsible. She prepares lessons carefully every day and often stays late to help students with their studies. When we face difficulties, she listens to us patiently and gives us useful advice. She sets a good example for us with her actions.
I admire Ms Li because she loves her work and her students deeply. From her, I learn that we should be responsible for and helpful to others. I hope to be a person like her when I grow up.
解析
【分析】首先明确写作主题为“我最敬佩的人”，需覆盖三个核心要求：介绍人物身份与性格、说明敬佩的原因、阐述从人物身上学到的品质。选择身边熟悉的师长（如班主任，避免真实姓名），采用三段式结构：第一段引出人物并介绍基本情况；第二段通过具体事例说明敬佩的缘由；第三段总结收获并表达自身愿望。同时需注意不能出现真实姓名、校名，词数控制在80左右，适当补充细节让内容更充实。
【解析】1. 开篇点明敬佩的人物是班主任Ms Li，描述其性格特点（善良、勤奋、关心学生）；2. 列举具体事例说明敬佩的原因：认真备课、熬夜辅导学生、耐心倾听并给出建议；3. 总结从人物身上学到的品质（责任、乐于助人），表达自己未来的愿望。写作时需注意语句通顺，用词恰当，符合词数要求，避免出现真实信息。
【答案】The Person I Admire Most
The person I admire most is my head teacher, Ms Li. She is kind and hard-working, and she always cares about every student in our class. She not only teaches us knowledge but also helps us solve problems in life.
Ms Li is very responsible. She prepares lessons carefully every day and often stays late to help students with their studies. When we face difficulties, she listens to us patiently and gives us useful advice. She sets a good example for us with her actions.
I admire Ms Li because she loves her work and her students deeply. From her, I learn that we should be responsible for and helpful to others. I hope to be a person like her when I grow up.
【知识点】英语书面表达、人物介绍类写作
【点评】范文紧扣题目要求，结构清晰，层次分明，完整覆盖所有内容提示，语言简洁通顺，符合词数要求，传递了积极向上的价值观，是一篇优秀的习作范例。
【难度系数】0.3
【解析】1. 开篇点明敬佩的人物是班主任Ms Li，描述其性格特点（善良、勤奋、关心学生）；2. 列举具体事例说明敬佩的原因：认真备课、熬夜辅导学生、耐心倾听并给出建议；3. 总结从人物身上学到的品质（责任、乐于助人），表达自己未来的愿望。写作时需注意语句通顺，用词恰当，符合词数要求，避免出现真实信息。
【答案】The Person I Admire Most
The person I admire most is my head teacher, Ms Li. She is kind and hard-working, and she always cares about every student in our class. She not only teaches us knowledge but also helps us solve problems in life.
Ms Li is very responsible. She prepares lessons carefully every day and often stays late to help students with their studies. When we face difficulties, she listens to us patiently and gives us useful advice. She sets a good example for us with her actions.
I admire Ms Li because she loves her work and her students deeply. From her, I learn that we should be responsible for and helpful to others. I hope to be a person like her when I grow up.
【知识点】英语书面表达、人物介绍类写作
【点评】范文紧扣题目要求，结构清晰，层次分明，完整覆盖所有内容提示，语言简洁通顺，符合词数要求，传递了积极向上的价值观，是一篇优秀的习作范例。
【难度系数】0.3
