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第二节 书面表达（满分 20 分）
每个人都有一些很好的朋友。假如赵凯是你最好的朋友，请根据下面有关赵凯的提示，以“My Best Friend”为题，用英语写一篇文章，准备在英语课上向同学介绍他。
要求：
1. 内容包括所有提示，可以适当发挥。
2. 70 词左右，文章开头已经给出，不计入总词数。
3. 提示：(1) 能歌善舞，爱好画画和踢足球；(2) 早睡早起，通常步行去上学；(3) 乐于助人 (helpful)；(4) 经常在家里帮妈妈做家务。
My Best Friend
Zhao Kai is my best friend. He is 13 years old.
每个人都有一些很好的朋友。假如赵凯是你最好的朋友，请根据下面有关赵凯的提示，以“My Best Friend”为题，用英语写一篇文章，准备在英语课上向同学介绍他。
要求：
1. 内容包括所有提示，可以适当发挥。
2. 70 词左右，文章开头已经给出，不计入总词数。
3. 提示：(1) 能歌善舞，爱好画画和踢足球；(2) 早睡早起，通常步行去上学；(3) 乐于助人 (helpful)；(4) 经常在家里帮妈妈做家务。
My Best Friend
Zhao Kai is my best friend. He is 13 years old.
He is good at singing and dancing. He likes drawing and playing soccer. We often play soccer together after school. He gets up and goes to bed early every day. He usually walks to school. He thinks it's good for his health. He is helpful and often helps other people. When he is at home, he often helps his mum with some housework. His parents think he is a good boy.
答案
My Best Friend
Zhao Kai is my best friend. He is 13 years old. He is good at singing and dancing. He likes drawing and playing soccer. We often play soccer together after school. He gets up and goes to bed early every day. He usually walks to school. He thinks it's good for his health. He is helpful and often helps other people. When he is at home, he often helps his mum with some housework. His parents think he is a good boy.
Zhao Kai is my best friend. He is 13 years old. He is good at singing and dancing. He likes drawing and playing soccer. We often play soccer together after school. He gets up and goes to bed early every day. He usually walks to school. He thinks it's good for his health. He is helpful and often helps other people. When he is at home, he often helps his mum with some housework. His parents think he is a good boy.
解析
【分析】
拿到这道人物介绍类书面表达题，首先第一步先审题，明确核心写作对象是好友赵凯，必须覆盖题干给出的全部4项提示内容，词数控制在70词左右，给定开头不计入总词数。接下来梳理行文顺序：先写他的才艺与兴趣爱好，对应第一个提示点，补充少量合理的日常互动细节让内容更生动；接着介绍他的生活作息和上学出行方式，对应第二个提示点，补充他认为步行有益健康的小说明让逻辑更通顺；之后介绍他乐于助人的品质，再延伸到在家帮妈妈做家务的表现，覆盖第三、第四个提示点，最后用家人对他的评价收尾。最后写完核对所有要点是否都覆盖，检查语法错误，确认词数符合要求即可。
【解析】
1. 要点梳理：先把题干要求的所有必写内容逐一列出来，避免遗漏：①擅长唱歌跳舞，爱好画画、踢足球；②作息规律早睡早起，通常步行上学；③性格乐于助人；④在家经常帮妈妈做家务。
2. 行文组织：按照“兴趣爱好→日常作息→性格品质→居家表现”的逻辑顺序串联内容，适当添加少量符合人物设定的细节，比如“放学后我们常一起踢足球”“他认为步行对健康有益”“他的父母觉得他是个好孩子”，让文章衔接自然不生硬。
3. 最终校验：通读全文，确认没有语法错误，所有提示要点全部覆盖，总词数符合70词左右的要求。
【答案】
My Best Friend
Zhao Kai is my best friend. He is 13 years old. He is good at singing and dancing. He likes drawing and playing soccer. We often play soccer together after school. He gets up and goes to bed early every day. He usually walks to school. He thinks it's good for his health. He is helpful and often helps other people. When he is at home, he often helps his mum with some housework. His parents think he is a good boy.
【知识点】
人物类英语写作，动词短语搭配，书面表达要点覆盖
【点评】
这篇参考范文完全覆盖了题干给出的全部提示要点，行文流畅自然，逻辑递进清晰，补充的少量细节让人物形象更鲜活，没有语法错误，词数符合题目要求，是一篇非常规范的低年级英语人物介绍习作。同学们完成这类写作时，优先保证所有提示要点都写到，再适当添加少量衔接细节，就能拿到不错的分数。
【难度系数】
0.8
拿到这道人物介绍类书面表达题，首先第一步先审题，明确核心写作对象是好友赵凯，必须覆盖题干给出的全部4项提示内容，词数控制在70词左右，给定开头不计入总词数。接下来梳理行文顺序：先写他的才艺与兴趣爱好，对应第一个提示点，补充少量合理的日常互动细节让内容更生动；接着介绍他的生活作息和上学出行方式，对应第二个提示点，补充他认为步行有益健康的小说明让逻辑更通顺；之后介绍他乐于助人的品质，再延伸到在家帮妈妈做家务的表现，覆盖第三、第四个提示点，最后用家人对他的评价收尾。最后写完核对所有要点是否都覆盖，检查语法错误，确认词数符合要求即可。
【解析】
1. 要点梳理：先把题干要求的所有必写内容逐一列出来，避免遗漏：①擅长唱歌跳舞，爱好画画、踢足球；②作息规律早睡早起，通常步行上学；③性格乐于助人；④在家经常帮妈妈做家务。
2. 行文组织：按照“兴趣爱好→日常作息→性格品质→居家表现”的逻辑顺序串联内容，适当添加少量符合人物设定的细节，比如“放学后我们常一起踢足球”“他认为步行对健康有益”“他的父母觉得他是个好孩子”，让文章衔接自然不生硬。
3. 最终校验：通读全文，确认没有语法错误，所有提示要点全部覆盖，总词数符合70词左右的要求。
【答案】
My Best Friend
Zhao Kai is my best friend. He is 13 years old. He is good at singing and dancing. He likes drawing and playing soccer. We often play soccer together after school. He gets up and goes to bed early every day. He usually walks to school. He thinks it's good for his health. He is helpful and often helps other people. When he is at home, he often helps his mum with some housework. His parents think he is a good boy.
【知识点】
人物类英语写作，动词短语搭配，书面表达要点覆盖
【点评】
这篇参考范文完全覆盖了题干给出的全部提示要点，行文流畅自然，逻辑递进清晰，补充的少量细节让人物形象更鲜活，没有语法错误，词数符合题目要求，是一篇非常规范的低年级英语人物介绍习作。同学们完成这类写作时，优先保证所有提示要点都写到，再适当添加少量衔接细节，就能拿到不错的分数。
【难度系数】
0.8
