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八、书面表达(满分20分)
英文周报以"The moment I grew up"为题向中学生开展征文活动,请你用英语写一篇短文投稿,内容包括:
1. 你对成长的理解;2.一次让你成长的经历例如:阅读、旅行、志愿服务等方面;3.你的收获。
注意:1.词数80左右;2.内容完整照抄阅读语篇不得分;3. 文中不得出现与考生相关的真实校名和姓名等信息。
The moment I grew up
In my eyes, growing up means
英文周报以"The moment I grew up"为题向中学生开展征文活动,请你用英语写一篇短文投稿,内容包括:
1. 你对成长的理解;2.一次让你成长的经历例如:阅读、旅行、志愿服务等方面;3.你的收获。
注意:1.词数80左右;2.内容完整照抄阅读语篇不得分;3. 文中不得出现与考生相关的真实校名和姓名等信息。
The moment I grew up
In my eyes, growing up means
learning to take on responsibilities and understand others better.
Last summer, my grandma was seriously ill. My parents were so busy that they had no time to look after her. So I decided to take on this task. I made sure she took medicine on time, prepared light meals for her, and chatted with her to make her feel less lonely.
During this period, I realized how much effort my parents had put into taking care of family members. This experience taught me to be more responsible and caring. It was the moment I truly grew up.
答案
八、书面表达
【审题指导】
本文是一篇征文,主题是成长。根据要求,首先需要指出自己对
成长的理解。然后写出一次让你成长的经历,经历需要符合实际,
并能体现成长。最后需要表达此次经历给你带来的收获。时态主
要为一般现在时;注意写作要点,不要遗漏。注意词数要求。
【写作指导】
步骤 内容
第一步 开篇点明自己对成长的理解
第二步 详细描述让你成长的一次经历
第三步 阐述在这个过程中的感悟,体现主题
One possible version:
The moment I grew up
In my eyes, growing up means learning to take on responsibilities
and understand others better.
Last summer, my grandma was seriously ill. My parents were
so busy that they had no time to look after her. So I decided to take
on this task. I made sure she took medicine on time, prepared light
meals for her, and chatted with her to make her feel less lonely.
During this period, I realized how much effort my parents had
put into taking care of family members. This experience taught me
to be more responsible and caring. It was the moment I truly
grew up.
【审题指导】
本文是一篇征文,主题是成长。根据要求,首先需要指出自己对
成长的理解。然后写出一次让你成长的经历,经历需要符合实际,
并能体现成长。最后需要表达此次经历给你带来的收获。时态主
要为一般现在时;注意写作要点,不要遗漏。注意词数要求。
【写作指导】
步骤 内容
第一步 开篇点明自己对成长的理解
第二步 详细描述让你成长的一次经历
第三步 阐述在这个过程中的感悟,体现主题
One possible version:
The moment I grew up
In my eyes, growing up means learning to take on responsibilities
and understand others better.
Last summer, my grandma was seriously ill. My parents were
so busy that they had no time to look after her. So I decided to take
on this task. I made sure she took medicine on time, prepared light
meals for her, and chatted with her to make her feel less lonely.
During this period, I realized how much effort my parents had
put into taking care of family members. This experience taught me
to be more responsible and caring. It was the moment I truly
grew up.
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道题先明确写作要求：这是主题为"The moment I grew up"的征文，必须覆盖三个指定要点，词数控制在80左右，不能出现真实个人信息。第一步先思考对成长的正向理解，选贴合中学生认知的表述，比如学会承担责任、体谅他人，开篇直接点出；第二步挑选自己熟悉的真实感强的经历，比如照顾生病的长辈、参与社区志愿活动这类日常场景，补充2-3个具体小细节让内容不空洞；第三步收尾写这次经历的具体收获，呼应开头的成长定义，点题点明这就是自己长大的瞬间，同时注意叙事部分用一般过去时，观点部分用一般现在时，保证逻辑通顺，所有要点不遗漏。
【解析】
1. 开篇补全给定的开头句，清晰点明自己对成长的理解，符合积极正向的价值观，直接切入主题；
2. 主体部分选取贴近生活的成长经历，用一般过去时交代事件的起因、经过，补充具体行为细节，让内容真实生动，避免空泛；
3. 结尾部分阐述经历带来的感悟收获，呼应开头对成长的定义，点出核心主题，最后检查确认所有要求的要点都覆盖，词数符合80左右的要求，没有出现真实校名、姓名等隐私信息。
【答案】
One possible version:
The moment I grew up
In my eyes, growing up means learning to take on responsibilities and understand others better.
Last summer, my grandma was seriously ill. My parents were so busy that they had no time to look after her. So I decided to take on this task. I made sure she took medicine on time, prepared light meals for her, and chatted with her to make her feel less lonely.
During this period, I realized how much effort my parents had put into taking care of family members. This experience taught me to be more responsible and caring. It was the moment I truly grew up.
【知识点】
英语书面表达审题，一般过去时态运用，记叙文主题升华
【点评】
本题是中学生常考的成长类主题征文，贴近学生日常生活，写作要点清晰明确，考生可以结合自身真实经历展开创作，不容易出现跑题问题，写作时注意覆盖全部指定要点，补充少量细节让内容更饱满，控制词数符合要求，表意准确通顺即可拿到较高分数。
【难度系数】
0.7
首先拿到这道题先明确写作要求：这是主题为"The moment I grew up"的征文，必须覆盖三个指定要点，词数控制在80左右，不能出现真实个人信息。第一步先思考对成长的正向理解，选贴合中学生认知的表述，比如学会承担责任、体谅他人，开篇直接点出；第二步挑选自己熟悉的真实感强的经历，比如照顾生病的长辈、参与社区志愿活动这类日常场景，补充2-3个具体小细节让内容不空洞；第三步收尾写这次经历的具体收获，呼应开头的成长定义，点题点明这就是自己长大的瞬间，同时注意叙事部分用一般过去时，观点部分用一般现在时，保证逻辑通顺，所有要点不遗漏。
【解析】
1. 开篇补全给定的开头句，清晰点明自己对成长的理解，符合积极正向的价值观，直接切入主题；
2. 主体部分选取贴近生活的成长经历，用一般过去时交代事件的起因、经过，补充具体行为细节，让内容真实生动，避免空泛；
3. 结尾部分阐述经历带来的感悟收获，呼应开头对成长的定义，点出核心主题，最后检查确认所有要求的要点都覆盖，词数符合80左右的要求，没有出现真实校名、姓名等隐私信息。
【答案】
One possible version:
The moment I grew up
In my eyes, growing up means learning to take on responsibilities and understand others better.
Last summer, my grandma was seriously ill. My parents were so busy that they had no time to look after her. So I decided to take on this task. I made sure she took medicine on time, prepared light meals for her, and chatted with her to make her feel less lonely.
During this period, I realized how much effort my parents had put into taking care of family members. This experience taught me to be more responsible and caring. It was the moment I truly grew up.
【知识点】
英语书面表达审题，一般过去时态运用，记叙文主题升华
【点评】
本题是中学生常考的成长类主题征文，贴近学生日常生活，写作要点清晰明确，考生可以结合自身真实经历展开创作，不容易出现跑题问题，写作时注意覆盖全部指定要点，补充少量细节让内容更饱满，控制词数符合要求，表意准确通顺即可拿到较高分数。
【难度系数】
0.7
