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假如你是上海动物园的志愿讲解员,请你根据以下信息提示,写一篇英文讲解稿来介绍动物明星多多。
要求: 1.讲解稿须包含所有信息提示,可适当发挥;
2.语言表达要准确,语句通顺,意思连贯;
3.词数不少于60讲解稿的开头已给出,不计入总词数。
Welcome to Shanghai Zoo.
范文欣赏
Welcome to Shanghai Zoo. I'd like to introduce an elephant to you. Its name is Duoduo. It is 21 years old. It is an Asian elephant. Its hometown is Thailand. It likes taking a shower and saying hello to everyone by its trunk. It likes eating grass. It also likes eating all kinds of vegetables and fruit. Please don't feed anything to the elephant.
Now, please follow me to greet Duoduo!
【名师点评】
作者按照题目要求,运用所学词汇和句式,通过提炼加工把提示信息有机地整合成为一篇短文。文风活泼,文笔流畅,用语准确,对亚洲象多多进行了生动的描述。
在本文中,作者能够运用本单元所学词汇和句式,将大象多多进行生动描述。如: taking a shower ... 、saying hello to ... 、eating grass、all kinds of ... 等短语; Its name is ... ,please don't feed ... 等句式。作者善于捕捉所描述对象的习性与动作细节,并融合、利用新旧知识进行准确描述。同时,本文结尾语"Now, please follow me to greet Duoduo!"体现了口语的灵活性和交际性,增添了本文的趣味性。
假如你是上海动物园的志愿讲解员,请你根据以下信息提示,写一篇英文讲解稿来介绍动物明星多多。
要求: 1.讲解稿须包含所有信息提示,可适当发挥;
2.语言表达要准确,语句通顺,意思连贯;
3.词数不少于60讲解稿的开头已给出,不计入总词数。
Welcome to Shanghai Zoo.
范文欣赏
Welcome to Shanghai Zoo. I'd like to introduce an elephant to you. Its name is Duoduo. It is 21 years old. It is an Asian elephant. Its hometown is Thailand. It likes taking a shower and saying hello to everyone by its trunk. It likes eating grass. It also likes eating all kinds of vegetables and fruit. Please don't feed anything to the elephant.
Now, please follow me to greet Duoduo!
【名师点评】
作者按照题目要求,运用所学词汇和句式,通过提炼加工把提示信息有机地整合成为一篇短文。文风活泼,文笔流畅,用语准确,对亚洲象多多进行了生动的描述。
在本文中,作者能够运用本单元所学词汇和句式,将大象多多进行生动描述。如: taking a shower ... 、saying hello to ... 、eating grass、all kinds of ... 等短语; Its name is ... ,please don't feed ... 等句式。作者善于捕捉所描述对象的习性与动作细节,并融合、利用新旧知识进行准确描述。同时,本文结尾语"Now, please follow me to greet Duoduo!"体现了口语的灵活性和交际性,增添了本文的趣味性。
答案
Welcome to Shanghai Zoo. I'd like to introduce a cute elephant to you. Its name is Duoduo. It is 21 years old. It's an Asian elephant and its hometown is Thailand. Duoduo enjoys taking a shower a lot, and it always says hello to every visitor with its long trunk. It likes eating grass, all kinds of fruits and vegetables. Please remember not to feed it anything. Now, let's follow me to say hi to Duoduo!
解析
【分析】
首先明确写作任务：作为上海动物园志愿讲解员，写一篇介绍动物明星多多的英文讲解稿，开头已给出，需包含所有提示信息（名字、年龄、物种、家乡；喜欢的活动、食物；观赏注意事项），语言要准确通顺、口语化，词数达标。解题思路：1. 承接开头引出介绍对象；2. 依次介绍多多的基本身份信息；3. 描述它的喜好（活动和食物）；4. 说明观赏注意事项；5. 设计互动性结尾，符合讲解员语境，确保信息无遗漏，语句连贯自然。
【解析】
1. 承接开头“Welcome to Shanghai Zoo.”，用“I'd like to introduce a cute elephant to you.”引出介绍对象，契合口语化的讲解风格；
2. 依次介绍基本信息：“Its name is Duoduo. It is 21 years old. It's an Asian elephant and its hometown is Thailand.”，用并列句连接，信息清晰简洁；
3. 描述喜好：“Duoduo enjoys taking a shower a lot, and it always says hello to every visitor with its long trunk. It likes eating grass, all kinds of fruits and vegetables.”，用恰当短语（enjoys taking a shower、says hello with）丰富表达，覆盖所有喜好信息；
4. 说明注意事项：“Please remember not to feed it anything.”，明确传达要求；
5. 结尾用“Now, let's follow me to say hi to Duoduo!”引导互动，符合讲解员的交际性，整体信息完整，语言流畅，满足任务要求。
【答案】
Welcome to Shanghai Zoo. I'd like to introduce a cute elephant to you. Its name is Duoduo. It is 21 years old. It's an Asian elephant and its hometown is Thailand. Duoduo enjoys taking a shower a lot, and it always says hello to every visitor with its long trunk. It likes eating grass, all kinds of fruits and vegetables. Please remember not to feed it anything. Now, let's follow me to say hi to Duoduo!
【知识点】
英文介绍写作、常用短语运用
【点评】
这篇讲解稿完整覆盖所有提示信息，语言准确自然，口语化表达契合志愿讲解员身份，适当添加修饰词让描述更生动，结尾的互动设计增强了感染力，是一篇符合要求的优秀写作。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先明确写作任务：作为上海动物园志愿讲解员，写一篇介绍动物明星多多的英文讲解稿，开头已给出，需包含所有提示信息（名字、年龄、物种、家乡；喜欢的活动、食物；观赏注意事项），语言要准确通顺、口语化，词数达标。解题思路：1. 承接开头引出介绍对象；2. 依次介绍多多的基本身份信息；3. 描述它的喜好（活动和食物）；4. 说明观赏注意事项；5. 设计互动性结尾，符合讲解员语境，确保信息无遗漏，语句连贯自然。
【解析】
1. 承接开头“Welcome to Shanghai Zoo.”，用“I'd like to introduce a cute elephant to you.”引出介绍对象，契合口语化的讲解风格；
2. 依次介绍基本信息：“Its name is Duoduo. It is 21 years old. It's an Asian elephant and its hometown is Thailand.”，用并列句连接，信息清晰简洁；
3. 描述喜好：“Duoduo enjoys taking a shower a lot, and it always says hello to every visitor with its long trunk. It likes eating grass, all kinds of fruits and vegetables.”，用恰当短语（enjoys taking a shower、says hello with）丰富表达，覆盖所有喜好信息；
4. 说明注意事项：“Please remember not to feed it anything.”，明确传达要求；
5. 结尾用“Now, let's follow me to say hi to Duoduo!”引导互动，符合讲解员的交际性，整体信息完整，语言流畅，满足任务要求。
【答案】
Welcome to Shanghai Zoo. I'd like to introduce a cute elephant to you. Its name is Duoduo. It is 21 years old. It's an Asian elephant and its hometown is Thailand. Duoduo enjoys taking a shower a lot, and it always says hello to every visitor with its long trunk. It likes eating grass, all kinds of fruits and vegetables. Please remember not to feed it anything. Now, let's follow me to say hi to Duoduo!
【知识点】
英文介绍写作、常用短语运用
【点评】
这篇讲解稿完整覆盖所有提示信息，语言准确自然，口语化表达契合志愿讲解员身份，适当添加修饰词让描述更生动，结尾的互动设计增强了感染力，是一篇符合要求的优秀写作。
【难度系数】
0.6
