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九、书面表达(20分)
假设你是阳光中学八年级学生李华，你打算给你的英国笔友 Tom 写一封电子邮件介绍你的校园生活。请根据提示完成电子邮件。
要求:1. 邮件内容须包含所有要点,可适当发挥;2. 不少于 80 词,邮件开头与结尾已给出,不计入总词数;3. 邮件中不得使用真实的个人姓名或学校名称。
Dear Tom,
How is everything going? I'm writing to share my school life with you.
I hope you will have a colourful school life too.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Hua
假设你是阳光中学八年级学生李华，你打算给你的英国笔友 Tom 写一封电子邮件介绍你的校园生活。请根据提示完成电子邮件。
要求:1. 邮件内容须包含所有要点,可适当发挥;2. 不少于 80 词,邮件开头与结尾已给出,不计入总词数;3. 邮件中不得使用真实的个人姓名或学校名称。
Dear Tom,
How is everything going? I'm writing to share my school life with you.
Now I'm a student in Sunshine Middle School. I'm very busy. I have many subjects. My favourite subject is English, because my English teacher Mr Li is great and I think English is interesting. I can take part in different school activities.
I also joined the Basketball Club. I learnt lots of skills. That not only makes my life interesting but also helps me to make more new friends.
Last month, my classmates and I had a school trip. We visited the science museum. I learnt a lot about science there.
I think my school life is great. How about you? How is your school life?
I hope you will have a colourful school life too.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Hua
答案
九、
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:应用文。②时态:以一般现在时为主,描述当前的校园生活。③提示:写作要点已给出,注意不要遗漏提示的要点,并适当添加细节,使内容更加丰富和生动。
[写作步骤]
第一步,表明写作意图(开头已给出),引出想要介绍自己的校园生活;第二步,具体阐述校园生活是什么样的,包括最喜欢的学科、参与的俱乐部及学校郊游等方面;第三步,书写结语,表达自己对校园生活的感受及对汤姆的祝愿。
[词句积累]
①take part in 参加 ②make more new friends 交更多的新朋友 ③learn about 了解
④That not only makes my life interesting but also helps me to make more new friends.(not only ... but also ... 结构)
⑤I think my school life is great.(省略 that 的宾语从句)
One possible version:
Dear Tom,
How is everything going? I'm writing to share my school life with you.
Now I'm a student in Sunshine Middle School. I'm very busy. I have many subjects. My favourite subject is English, because my English teacher Mr Li is great and I think English is interesting. I can take part in different school activities. I also joined the Basketball Club. I learnt lots of skills. That not only makes my life interesting but also helps me to make more new friends. Last month, my classmates and I had a school trip. We visited the science museum. I learnt a lot about science there.
I think my school life is great. How about you? How is your school life?
I hope you will have a colourful school life too.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Hua
写作指导
[审题步骤]
①体裁:应用文。②时态:以一般现在时为主,描述当前的校园生活。③提示:写作要点已给出,注意不要遗漏提示的要点,并适当添加细节,使内容更加丰富和生动。
[写作步骤]
第一步,表明写作意图(开头已给出),引出想要介绍自己的校园生活;第二步,具体阐述校园生活是什么样的,包括最喜欢的学科、参与的俱乐部及学校郊游等方面;第三步,书写结语,表达自己对校园生活的感受及对汤姆的祝愿。
[词句积累]
①take part in 参加 ②make more new friends 交更多的新朋友 ③learn about 了解
④That not only makes my life interesting but also helps me to make more new friends.(not only ... but also ... 结构)
⑤I think my school life is great.(省略 that 的宾语从句)
One possible version:
Dear Tom,
How is everything going? I'm writing to share my school life with you.
Now I'm a student in Sunshine Middle School. I'm very busy. I have many subjects. My favourite subject is English, because my English teacher Mr Li is great and I think English is interesting. I can take part in different school activities. I also joined the Basketball Club. I learnt lots of skills. That not only makes my life interesting but also helps me to make more new friends. Last month, my classmates and I had a school trip. We visited the science museum. I learnt a lot about science there.
I think my school life is great. How about you? How is your school life?
I hope you will have a colourful school life too.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Hua
解析
【分析】
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步先审题：明确体裁是给笔友的电子邮件，主题是介绍自己的校园生活，时态以一般现在时为主，描述过去参加俱乐部、过去的郊游事件时切换为一般过去时即可。接下来对照思维导图的四个核心要点逐个梳理内容：1. 最喜欢的学科：先选定一个熟悉的科目，补充喜欢的合理原因，让内容更饱满；2. 俱乐部部分：说明你加入的具体俱乐部，写清楚你在俱乐部学到的内容；3. 学校郊游部分：补充郊游的时间、地点、具体开展的活动，覆盖提示的三个要素；4. 最后补充自己对校园生活的真实感受，还可以反问笔友的校园生活情况自然衔接结尾。最后把所有内容用通顺的英语语句串联起来，保证字数超过80词，不遗漏要点就可以完成写作。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：
1. 承接题目已给出的开头，先简单介绍自己的在校基本情况，引出后续的细节介绍。
2. 依次展开所有提示要点：
① 介绍最喜欢的学科：点明最喜爱的科目，补充合理的喜欢理由，比如选择英语作为最爱科目，说明英语老师很优秀、英语本身很有趣等原因。
② 介绍俱乐部经历：说明自己加入的具体俱乐部，比如篮球俱乐部，写清楚在俱乐部学到的相关技能，同时补充参与俱乐部带来的额外收获，比如认识新朋友。
③ 介绍学校郊游：补充郊游的时间（比如上个月）、地点（比如科技馆）、具体活动，说明自己在郊游中的收获。
④ 最后表达自己对校园生活的整体感受，反问对方的校园生活情况，自然过渡到题目给出的结尾部分。
3. 串联所有内容，适当用上not only...but also等学过的高分句型，检查语法和拼写错误，保证字数符合要求。
参考范文：
Dear Tom,
How is everything going? I'm writing to share my school life with you.
Now I'm a student in Sunshine Middle School. I'm very busy. I have many subjects. My favourite subject is English, because my English teacher Mr Li is great and I think English is interesting. I can take part in different school activities. I also joined the Basketball Club. I learnt lots of skills. That not only makes my life interesting but also helps me to make more new friends. Last month, my classmates and I had a school trip. We visited the science museum. I learnt a lot about science there.
I think my school life is great. How about you? How is your school life?
I hope you will have a colourful school life too.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
1. 英语应用文写作
2. 时态正确运用
3. 要点整合表达
【点评】
本题围绕学生熟悉的校园生活主题展开，给出的思维导图明确划分了写作的四个核心模块，大幅降低了写作的构思难度，学生只需要为每个模块补充符合逻辑的细节，注意对应事件的时态使用准确，适当运用所学的复合句、并列结构丰富表达，避免遗漏要点，就可以写出符合要求的优秀作文，是难度适中的初中英语写作题。
【难度系数】
0.6
拿到这道书面表达题，首先第一步先审题：明确体裁是给笔友的电子邮件，主题是介绍自己的校园生活，时态以一般现在时为主，描述过去参加俱乐部、过去的郊游事件时切换为一般过去时即可。接下来对照思维导图的四个核心要点逐个梳理内容：1. 最喜欢的学科：先选定一个熟悉的科目，补充喜欢的合理原因，让内容更饱满；2. 俱乐部部分：说明你加入的具体俱乐部，写清楚你在俱乐部学到的内容；3. 学校郊游部分：补充郊游的时间、地点、具体开展的活动，覆盖提示的三个要素；4. 最后补充自己对校园生活的真实感受，还可以反问笔友的校园生活情况自然衔接结尾。最后把所有内容用通顺的英语语句串联起来，保证字数超过80词，不遗漏要点就可以完成写作。
【解析】
写作步骤如下：
1. 承接题目已给出的开头，先简单介绍自己的在校基本情况，引出后续的细节介绍。
2. 依次展开所有提示要点：
① 介绍最喜欢的学科：点明最喜爱的科目，补充合理的喜欢理由，比如选择英语作为最爱科目，说明英语老师很优秀、英语本身很有趣等原因。
② 介绍俱乐部经历：说明自己加入的具体俱乐部，比如篮球俱乐部，写清楚在俱乐部学到的相关技能，同时补充参与俱乐部带来的额外收获，比如认识新朋友。
③ 介绍学校郊游：补充郊游的时间（比如上个月）、地点（比如科技馆）、具体活动，说明自己在郊游中的收获。
④ 最后表达自己对校园生活的整体感受，反问对方的校园生活情况，自然过渡到题目给出的结尾部分。
3. 串联所有内容，适当用上not only...but also等学过的高分句型，检查语法和拼写错误，保证字数符合要求。
参考范文：
Dear Tom,
How is everything going? I'm writing to share my school life with you.
Now I'm a student in Sunshine Middle School. I'm very busy. I have many subjects. My favourite subject is English, because my English teacher Mr Li is great and I think English is interesting. I can take part in different school activities. I also joined the Basketball Club. I learnt lots of skills. That not only makes my life interesting but also helps me to make more new friends. Last month, my classmates and I had a school trip. We visited the science museum. I learnt a lot about science there.
I think my school life is great. How about you? How is your school life?
I hope you will have a colourful school life too.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Hua
【知识点】
1. 英语应用文写作
2. 时态正确运用
3. 要点整合表达
【点评】
本题围绕学生熟悉的校园生活主题展开，给出的思维导图明确划分了写作的四个核心模块，大幅降低了写作的构思难度，学生只需要为每个模块补充符合逻辑的细节，注意对应事件的时态使用准确，适当运用所学的复合句、并列结构丰富表达，避免遗漏要点，就可以写出符合要求的优秀作文，是难度适中的初中英语写作题。
【难度系数】
0.6
