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五、健康的生活习惯对每个人来说都非常重要。某青少年英文网站健康专栏正在开展征文活动,请你根据下面的要点提示和写作要求,用英语写一篇短文,给该专栏投稿。
要点提示：
1. 你或你的家人某次生病的经历；
2. 你对这次经历的感受；
3. 关于如何保持健康,提出你的建议 (至少两点)。
写作要求：
1. 短文应包含以上所有提示信息,可适当发挥；
2. 文中不得出现真实姓名、学校名称等信息；
3. 词数90左右(文中已给出内容不计入总词数)。
Health is very important to us.
要点提示：
1. 你或你的家人某次生病的经历；
2. 你对这次经历的感受；
3. 关于如何保持健康,提出你的建议 (至少两点)。
写作要求：
1. 短文应包含以上所有提示信息,可适当发挥；
2. 文中不得出现真实姓名、学校名称等信息；
3. 词数90左右(文中已给出内容不计入总词数)。
Health is very important to us.
答案
One possible version:
Health is very important to us. I once went
through a stomachache that I'll never forget.
Last Sunday, I bought a cup of iced milk tea and
drank up in one go. In the evening, I had a
stomachache, and later it got worse. I took some
medicine. After that, I put something warm on my
stomach. When I felt better, it was 5 o'clock the next
morning. I regretted drinking that milk tea. This
experience made me realize how terrible it was to lose
good health.
Here is my advice on how to keep healthy. First,
we should avoid cold drinks, especially in winter.
Second, we should not eat too much fast food like
hamburgers and chips. Remember: Good eating habits
make us strong and healthy.
Health is very important to us. I once went
through a stomachache that I'll never forget.
Last Sunday, I bought a cup of iced milk tea and
drank up in one go. In the evening, I had a
stomachache, and later it got worse. I took some
medicine. After that, I put something warm on my
stomach. When I felt better, it was 5 o'clock the next
morning. I regretted drinking that milk tea. This
experience made me realize how terrible it was to lose
good health.
Here is my advice on how to keep healthy. First,
we should avoid cold drinks, especially in winter.
Second, we should not eat too much fast food like
hamburgers and chips. Remember: Good eating habits
make us strong and healthy.
解析
【分析】
首先拿到这道写作题先明确核心要求：属于健康话题的英文征文，必须覆盖三个指定要点，词数控制在90左右，不能出现真实个人信息。解题思路可以按三步走：第一步，先构思贴近青少年真实生活的小病经历，不用选太夸张的重病事件，比如贪喝冰饮引发胃疼这类日常小事就很有代入感，把事件的起因、发病过程、后续好转的完整脉络梳理清楚；第二步，写完经历后自然衔接自己的感受，点明这次经历让自己意识到健康的可贵，呼应开头给出的总起句；第三步，过渡到健康建议部分，给出至少两点好操作的实用建议，比如健康饮食、规律作息这类内容，最后用简短的句子收尾点题，全程注意区分时态，描述过往经历用一般过去时，提建议用一般现在时，写完后核对所有要点是否都覆盖，词数是否符合要求。
【解析】
1. 承接给定的开篇句，引入个人生病经历：用"I once went through a stomachache that I'll never forget"引出事件，接着交代事件背景：上周日一口气喝完冰奶茶，当晚突发胃疼，症状加重后服药、热敷胃部，直到次日凌晨五点才好转，完整还原事件过程。
2. 补充经历带来的感受：写出自己后悔乱喝冰奶茶，真切体会到失去健康的糟糕体验，完成第二个要点的表达。
3. 过渡到健康建议部分：用"Here is my advice on how to keep healthy"自然引出建议，先后给出两点建议：第一要少喝冷饮，第二不要吃太多快餐，最后用"Good eating habits make us strong and healthy"收尾点题，传递正向的健康观念。
4. 最终核对全文：确认所有要点全部覆盖，没有出现真实姓名、校名等信息，总词数符合要求，语法时态准确，符合征文投稿的语境。
【答案】
One possible version:
Health is very important to us. I once went through a stomachache that I'll never forget.
Last Sunday, I bought a cup of iced milk tea and drank up in one go. In the evening, I had a stomachache, and later it got worse. I took some medicine. After that, I put something warm on my stomach. When I felt better, it was 5 o'clock the next morning. I regretted drinking that milk tea. This experience made me realize how terrible it was to lose good health.
Here is my advice on how to keep healthy. First, we should avoid cold drinks, especially in winter. Second, we should not eat too much fast food like hamburgers and chips. Remember: Good eating habits make us strong and healthy.
【知识点】
健康类英语写作
记叙文时态运用
征文类作文结构
【点评】
这篇参考范文选取了非常贴近中学生日常生活的生病小事作为叙事内容，细节真实有代入感，三个指定要点完整覆盖，从叙事到抒发感受再到给出建议的过渡自然流畅，语言表达地道简洁，完全符合题目对词数、内容的各项要求，学生可以借鉴这种以小见大的写作思路，不用刻意编造夸张的事件，从自身真实经历切入更容易写出真情实感。
【难度系数】
0.6
首先拿到这道写作题先明确核心要求：属于健康话题的英文征文，必须覆盖三个指定要点，词数控制在90左右，不能出现真实个人信息。解题思路可以按三步走：第一步，先构思贴近青少年真实生活的小病经历，不用选太夸张的重病事件，比如贪喝冰饮引发胃疼这类日常小事就很有代入感，把事件的起因、发病过程、后续好转的完整脉络梳理清楚；第二步，写完经历后自然衔接自己的感受，点明这次经历让自己意识到健康的可贵，呼应开头给出的总起句；第三步，过渡到健康建议部分，给出至少两点好操作的实用建议，比如健康饮食、规律作息这类内容，最后用简短的句子收尾点题，全程注意区分时态，描述过往经历用一般过去时，提建议用一般现在时，写完后核对所有要点是否都覆盖，词数是否符合要求。
【解析】
1. 承接给定的开篇句，引入个人生病经历：用"I once went through a stomachache that I'll never forget"引出事件，接着交代事件背景：上周日一口气喝完冰奶茶，当晚突发胃疼，症状加重后服药、热敷胃部，直到次日凌晨五点才好转，完整还原事件过程。
2. 补充经历带来的感受：写出自己后悔乱喝冰奶茶，真切体会到失去健康的糟糕体验，完成第二个要点的表达。
3. 过渡到健康建议部分：用"Here is my advice on how to keep healthy"自然引出建议，先后给出两点建议：第一要少喝冷饮，第二不要吃太多快餐，最后用"Good eating habits make us strong and healthy"收尾点题，传递正向的健康观念。
4. 最终核对全文：确认所有要点全部覆盖，没有出现真实姓名、校名等信息，总词数符合要求，语法时态准确，符合征文投稿的语境。
【答案】
One possible version:
Health is very important to us. I once went through a stomachache that I'll never forget.
Last Sunday, I bought a cup of iced milk tea and drank up in one go. In the evening, I had a stomachache, and later it got worse. I took some medicine. After that, I put something warm on my stomach. When I felt better, it was 5 o'clock the next morning. I regretted drinking that milk tea. This experience made me realize how terrible it was to lose good health.
Here is my advice on how to keep healthy. First, we should avoid cold drinks, especially in winter. Second, we should not eat too much fast food like hamburgers and chips. Remember: Good eating habits make us strong and healthy.
【知识点】
健康类英语写作
记叙文时态运用
征文类作文结构
【点评】
这篇参考范文选取了非常贴近中学生日常生活的生病小事作为叙事内容，细节真实有代入感，三个指定要点完整覆盖，从叙事到抒发感受再到给出建议的过渡自然流畅，语言表达地道简洁，完全符合题目对词数、内容的各项要求，学生可以借鉴这种以小见大的写作思路，不用刻意编造夸张的事件，从自身真实经历切入更容易写出真情实感。
【难度系数】
0.6
